Sonia Garay

Sex, Secrets & Seductions Of An Ambitious Poet

This story is just beginning, it is a good start. The main character has a self-confident personality. I like how she stays true to herself, in the way she talks and how she describes the situation she got herself into. She seduced someone else's man, she played with fire and she got burned, Very interested to see how it continues.

The Dilemma Of A Thief

Entertaining story. I like the plot of the story, a petty thief that faces challenges and is forced to decide whether to take on a dangerous job with dangerous people. This is a short story, but it has the potential to be turned into a long book. I like the writing style of the author, the dialogue and the humor are also great. Can't wait to see what happens in the fourth chapter. Great job!

Choosing Destiny: The Chosen

Intriguing story. The beginning of the story draws you in, and fits with the title, that this girl was chosen. The main character's story becomes more complicated as the chapters go on, and we learn more about her life at the same time as the main character. These characters get to know each other very quickly and become friends.

The harm she did, which is a huge one (I don't want to give anything away), shouldn't be forgiven so fast. It would add interest if she is quarreling with the person she harmed and slowly they start to forgive and get along, even start to feel something more than friendship. Maybe if you add a line that says the main character spent weeks with the new people and they slowly got to know each other and realized they had more in common than differences, and now consider each other friends.

The friends believe Destiny has more control over her urges, trust she won't kill anymore, and are willing to fight for her. Just to show that time had passed. I don't know, just a suggestion. Also the old vamps. Very interesting characters, and I hope we see how this group continues forward, to fight evil. Enjoyed reading, good job.

Daughters of Eve

Great beginning. The plot of the story is very interesting. This is just the beginning of the story, and it starts with the main character feeling trapped and afraid. I'm curious to know what happens next. If she manages to leave, and how she deals with life on her own. Can't wait to see how it continues.

Entertaining Read, Love it

This is the first part of the story, I enjoyed it so much. The story is unique. It contains humor, and is well written. It provides a great introduction to the characters. Can't wait to keep reading. Great job.

Madness On Paper

Interesting craziness. It doesn't make sense at all, so I guess it's perfect. Well done. It really makes you think, trying to make sense of it. Some key parts are repetitive, but I think it's part of the madness, it gives the reader the feeling of going mad.

Amazing

Absolutely loved it. The author created a whole world, It is very detailed, and great introduction to the characters. It is very well written. The story is very interesting, and I like that it's not rushed, author carefully describes the setting and what is happening. Can't wait to see how the story continues. Spelling and grammar are great. The only thing author needs to improve on is adding more chapters. Very well done.

Fated

I really enjoyed reading this story, it's fun, and love the characters in the story. Like the author mentioned, some grammar mistakes, but that can always be worked on. At the moment of this review there are eight chapters. Keep working on it, cause I'm looking forward to reading what happens next. Great job.

Pills And Broken Glass

Wow! What a brilliant writer. The way the writer describes scenes in the book really help the reader visualize what is happening. The story is well written, it flows nicely, and it makes you want to keep reading to find out more. Loved it.

Dangerous Angels

Fun read. The story was enjoyable, and the characters were likable. The writing style is interesting. The first chapters introduce different characters and each chapter shows a different point of view of a character. I know this is only the beginning of the story, and I hope the next chapters don't switch point of view so much because it can be distracting to the reader. After each chapter, I wanted to know what happened next, but then it switched to a different story. There were some typos, but overall it was a fun read!

The Chronicles of Fardel: The Rise Of Syphon

Epic story that has magic. It also has battle action. The characters are likable. The author created a world with different fantasy beings working together to fight a battle between good and evil. Higher powers are also in play in this story and it supports the plot. The world building in this story is great with different detailed locations that the characters visit on their quest. Great job!

It does need some editing (I know, it's not as fun as creating the story). The story has a lot of dialogue, which I like. But sometimes a break can be added in between, ex. like when characters are having a long conversation, add an action, or facial expression, or narrator can explain how the character is feeling in that moment or what is happening in the environment. Make the reader 'feel' like they are there, or are the main character. Also dialogue between more than two characters need dialogue tags, so readers won't get lost. I'm not an expert, just giving some tips. I really like your story and can't wait to keep reading.

Eye Contact

Great start to this romance novel. The plot of the story is great. Remember to think of all the five senses when writing. That will help the reader feel like they are part of the story. Like when she smells his cologne, it would be nice to describe how it smells and how it makes her feel when she sees her crush. Just a suggestion. Can't wait to see how this story continues. Good job!

The BTS Dynamic

Great start. It's a great introduction to the characters. It touches on the struggles that Zhenis endured and still struggles with, and how he copes. The author has a great writing style, I will keep reading and giving feedback. Good job so far.

The Lie For Dystopia

Futuristic Sci-Fi story with a great plot. I like the authors writing style, it makes it easy to picture what is going on in the story. The world is futuristic, with advanced technology, but the world in this story is painted as grim, affected by war, and people facing social injustice. Which is very likely would happen in real life after a devastating war. The rich just get richer and the poor get poorer. The main character Ethan is very likable and cares about the world and the people. Ethan also has a dark side, so, will being thrown into the middle of a war change who he is? Also, every chapter has a twist or cliffhanger that keeps you turning the page. Great job, can’t wait to keep reading.

Amazing Read

I enjoyed reading this action packed story. I love it when the main character of the story is a strong and smart woman. I read the second book, and the world you created is fascinating, with humans and fairies working together against evil. I'm pretty sure the first book explains how the humans were kicked out of the fairy world. The powers the fairies and Jill possess are very cool. I like the character Jill and her family's story. I don't want to give anything away. It shows that Jill will do anything for her family. Her relationship with her parents is lovely. I also like the humor thrown in there, especially the Spanish dialogue, haha.

Your writing is also interesting, you have a combination of telling and showing in the story. You tell the story, but then you add the fight scenes, and I'm able to picture them like a movie scene. If you concentrate on showing, the story will be longer, but it will also give the reader a more personal feel of the scene. But you do both great, Great job. I look forward to reading the first book, and the future book, to see what happens to Jill and her family. Great work!

Among The Star Gods

I'm loving this story. At the moment there are four chapters, and in the chapters, the author introduces very unique characters. I'm sure we'll get to see all of their unique gifts later on in the story. I like the dialogue between the characters. The plot of the story is great and can't wait to see how it continues. The writing style is different, but after reading, you get used to how the dialogue is written, and it doesn't bother me at all. Good job so far.

Peace Love and Zombie Guts

Great story that shows how strangers come together to survive during a zombie apocalypse. I enjoyed reading this story. It's well written; I could easily picture what was going on. I couldn't stop reading and wanted to see what happened next. I liked the characters a lot and worried about their survival. The story is suspenseful and filled with action. Great job. I enjoyed it.

The Gourmet Gladiator

Fun Read! The author created a very unique world set in the future, with interesting characters that gain powers from eating. Before reading I asked myself, how do you eat a table? But poor Toby did, and I've been enjoying his journey. The characters use their unique superpowers in different ways, bringing a lot of action into the story. The author does a great job describing what is happening, It's easy to picture it. Some paragraphs can be separated a bit, but it was well written. I also like the humor in the story. Love it.

Die For Love

This story has an intense start. The main character goes through a traumatic experience that affects her family. Story is full of action, and in the end history tries to repeat itself, but will love win in the end?

Bounded Strings

Loved it! I enjoyed reading this story. The plot is great. I love the characters and their friendship. The new character added to the story brings in more mystery and I'm curious to see how it continues. I couldn't stop reading, Great job, can't wait to see how it continues.

The Withering

Great start, the first chapters give a good introduction to the main characters and what they are going through. The author does a great job of giving hints, it keeps you guessing, It makes you wonder what it is that is troubling her, and it makes you want to keep reading to find out. It's well written, Great job, can't wait to keep reading.

Hiding Inside

Loved this story from start to finish. I like the suspense, it keeps you guessing who the main character can and cannot trust. I love the mother and daughter relationship, the character's dialogues, and romance. It kept me reading and wanting more. Good job.

Apocalypse

Good story, it kept me guessing. Parts of the story could be given more details, just to add suspense to it. For a short story, it's good.

Amazing

I love the overall story of giants and humans co-existing together, and how they got to that point. Author does a great job describing each character's personalities and it's lovely to see in the beginning of the story its focus is on not really fixing, but healing a life that is broken. It sets up the story well. It's very well written, I like your writing style, the only thing I would like to see more is their world. It doesn't have to be extremely detailed, just some description, to give the reader visual of their environment. Other than that, great job. Will the main characters be able to unite two separate worlds? We'll see...I loved it, and can't wait to read more.

Perfect Deception

I enjoyed reading this story. The main character is very relatable. I like the circumstances of how the main character's life suddenly changed, and how she is dealing with them, I like her dialogue with her boss, made me laugh. Good job, can't wait to see what happens next.

Sip My Shades

Great start, the writer does a great job describing main character's personality and her struggles. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Amnesia

Love it! This writer is so talented. I love the story, it is well thought out, Her descriptions in the story give the reader a good visual. So awesome, can't wait to read more.

Bezzies Vs Foes

I loved reading how these young bezzies got along, and when they met their foes. I know this is only the beginning, and I look forward in seeing where the story goes.

The Dutch's Bottle

I loved the story, the writing style is great, it gives suspense when reading it. There could be some descriptive words thrown in, to give the reader more eerie feeling, but I read all the chapters, and the story has great potential, let's see where it goes. Good job.

XYANIUM

Amazing read. Really enjoyed the plot of the story. I like the characters, and how close they are as a team. Its fast paced, and want to know what happens next.

Look Into My Eyes

I enjoyed reading this very disturbing story. I liked the dialogue and the plot twists., and was fast paced. I would have liked to read more about how the main character plotted and prepared for her revenge, Maybe in a part two? Good job overall.

That one Ride

Love the story, It's very entertaining, and makes you want to keep reading. As the author said grammar and punctuation need a bit of work, but other than that, its a good read.

Disturbing

Author does a great job making the reader feel creeped out. I'm interested to see how the story develops, and how the little girl grows up.

It would be interesting to read chapters where the little girl grows up as a teenager, and adult, having to blend in, and pretend to be 'normal'. How she deals with everyday life, and relationships with other people. Will definitely keep reading.