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The plot itself is good but I'd say your biggest issue lies in layout. The paragraphs, without proper spacing, looks like one giant passage and quite frankly, put me off. I found myself wishing to just skim through it instead of really reading.
The writing also has quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes. A quick edit should fix it all. Proper layout is really important to engage a reader and I say it from personal experience, if I don't see proper paragraphs with good spacing, I lose my eagerness to read the novel. Improving those, and correcting the a few spelling and grammar mistakes should improve the story a lot.

Excellent

It's a great book, to put it simply. The author knows what they are doing. I love the plot and the writing style is so hooking, I can't get enough. It's been a while since I've seen such a well-written book. There aren't a lot of chapters but I've read them all in one go. I think think the only thing this book needs to attract interest is a bit of work on the cover. People tend to notice that the most before they start a book. Other than that, the book is great.

Good Book

It's a good book. I love the characters and the plot is well planned. I can't wait to read more

A Good Read

The best part of your book is your characters and I absolutely love them. They are easy to understand and very human, which is one thing that I really love about this book. Mia is a really likable character and connections with other characters in the book are very catchy.
I also like the normalcy of the book. To be honest, its been I while since I read any books with a similar aura. Hence, this book also brings a strange kind of nostalgia.
The writing style is different but nice. It suits well with the characters. I like that book a lot and I would say that it is a good read for any romance lover.

Hilarious

I read it at one sitting. That itself shows how addicting this book is. And it is hilarious. I love the names of the quadruplets. Oh and their discription too.
The plot is light hearted and really refreshing.
The characters are amazing. I wish nothing more than having them as friends. They'd be a constant source of entertainment.
The only thing you could do is make the sentences a little smaller or use punctuations to help. If the sentences are too long they can overwhelm the reader.
All in all, I love it and I tell every romance lover to give this a go.

Love it

Awesome story. Love it. To tell you the truth, this is the first time I've ever read a fanfic. Stupid, I know. Anyway, I absolutely fell in love with it.. I am still reading it. Keep going author. This book is meant to see a big light

Beautifully written.

The characters in the story has been beautifully portrayed and I love the way you express their emotions. Although, the book is very nice, everything has room for development. I think every sci-fi lover should read it

Good Work

Good writing style but a but hard to folow

Worthwhile

May I just start by saying that the name Casiphia is soo beautiful to me. And I love the way the name fits her character so, so well. She is an amazing character with a lot of depth that I'm enjoying diving into.

The descriptive language is very good and has done an amazing job in keeping me hooked which is necessary for a book with so many descriptions and minimal dialogue. I think you do a fantastic job in making sure that the reader is aware of the surroundings.

One thing I would like to say though is to make the paragraphs a bit shorter as longer paragraphs tend to distract the reader which makes them only skim through it instead of reading it. It would also be nice if you could break the dialogues into different lines instead of one paragraph.

Overall, an amazing read and definitely worth one's time

Intriguing

The story is captivating from the start. I love the way the author wrote the dialogues so one can capture the character's accent through it. It made the whole experience much richer and like I'm actually hearing them talk.
The characters are quite interesting as well and I am pretty sure I'll fall in love with em in the long run. Can't wait to know more about them.
The grammars pretty good too with some slight punctuation and grammar errors here and there.
I can't wait to read from you, author. Keep up the good work.

Fun Read

You have an interesting writing style. It feels strangely unusual yet fascinating at the same time. I honestly couldn't get enough of it and enjoyed reading you book quite a lot.
That accompanied by you great plot had me fascinated for quite a while. I like how you left the discriptions so methodic. It was easy to imagine and allowed me to paint a picture in my head.
I found the main character quite fascinating. The mc had a humourous yet balanced thought process that I really enjoyed reading about. Overall, it's a great book and I had a blast reading it.

Fascinating Read

To start of, the author is extremely talented and she has a way with words. This can be seen so vividly in each of her sentences. They are woven so intricately, you can feel the emotions and the depth in every sentence.

Now the characters. Both the male and female are written so well. Often times, people just notice things from the perspective of those that are hurting. But when you stay with someone with mental trauma, when you love someone with inner struggles, the suffering you go through is of a different sort. You can't help them unless they want to be helped and you can't bear to see them suffer either. It's a complicated mess which not everyone can see let alone write about. But the author has captured it beautifully. She has done a great job on describing the wife's pain too.

More often than not, people tend to write about a character dealing with inner struggles. But they are unable to capture the true hurdles they are going through and as a result, their struggles feel superficial when u read it. But, the author has captured her struggle excellently . I have to say, this book has great potential AND I look forward to reading it soon.

Great Writing Style

It's been a while since I've enjoyed a writing style quite this much. It's very professional and blunt, quite a different style than what most authors follow. I can't help but want to read it just by your writing style
You've also got great plot. It kept me hooked for a long while and I kept wanting to read more. Combined with your great writing style, the book is a great one. I have really enjoyed the story so far and will continue to read it.

Really Interesting

It's a very good story and the discriptions are realistic enough to make you feel as if all of it was happening in front of you. That is an amazing thing and I would like to suggest anyone that loves this genre to read it. Those book might not be for everyone, seeing it can trigger people going through trauma or get triggered easily might find it hard to read. I applaud you for this work and it really is an amazing read.
The writing needs a bit editing though. The writing is good but the grammar requires a bit tinkering. Some of the sentences required a little more rearranging.
Overall, it's good to read.

Really Interesting

This genre is a little foreign to me but that didn't stop me from enjoying it. The plot is intriguing and the characters, one of the biggest elements of any story, are designed well. They feel very real. I like Edmund a lot and Stella is pretty great.
The plot too is pretty well designed. The pacing isn't too fast and neither too slow. I also like that you make your chapters long cause I honestly love reading longer stories more than shorter ones. I also like the way you started by describing the normal life of the characters before gradually sliding into the juicy bits.
However, you should focus a little on the change in tenses. You seem to switch that a lot. It's a minor error though and can easily be fixed with a little editing. I love this book and honestly can't wait for more of your works.

Good Work

It's a good story really. To be completely honest, I don't usually read this genre but your book has piqued an interest in me. I like the way you framed the story. The way you still left an air of mystery around the whole thing does its job too.
But, one thing you need to work a little on is the number of details in it. You could work on adding a little more about Alizeh's past. A little more about her parents and how her life had been before. You could also clarify why she hated her in-laws. Was it because they did something to her or was it just normal dislike to interact with people?
The book is great and it honestly did its job in making me a bit frightened. Just a little more detail and would be absolute perfection.

Good Book

It's a very nice book. The characters keep you hooked and the plot looks like it's been well thought out. Only a few chapters have been published but I will be waiting for more. The only thing you can work on a little more is shortening the sentences cause it sounds a little wordy.
It's an amazing book and I can't wait for more.

Very Cute

To put it simply, just as the title hints, the story is a love letter. An adorable one at that. I've really enjoyed the short story. It's cute and really for you if you're looking for a short read or if you are feeling down and need a smile.
The only critic I have is to check the tense used. There are a few instances where the tenses seemed to change but it's nothing major and can be edited out very easily. I enjoyed the story a lot.

Suspenseful

To say that this story will keep making you want to read further is an understatement. The plot is very gripping and the mysterious aura of this story gives it a kind of haunting feel.
Your writing style is also pretty descriptive which is probably the reason for the story to have such an enigmatic feel. It paints a vivid picture in my paint and makes it easier to understand the elements of the story.
There are a few grammatical errors which aren't a major issue since it can be fixed pretty easily by some editing.
Very interesting story and I am waiting eagerly for the next update.

Worth Reading

The plot itself is very interesting. I enjoy The perspective of the Protagonist a lot. I also like the environment of the society. Sasha's friends, her goals, and the whole aura of Sasha's world give a sense of normalcy which I love and missed(I am a non-stop fantasy reader at the moment).
The characters are also quite engaging. The way Sasha still isn't over Aiden and Aiden's dislike towards her creating an interesting read. I am very eager to know what Sasha has done. Sasha is quite likable. As for Aiden, he is still an enigma for me. I've read about 3 chapters of Abstract Worth (A very cool and compelling Title, might I add) and I can't figure out how I feel about him. I am very curious to know why Sasha likes him so much.
I like your dialogues the most and the suggestion I have is to work on more descriptive writing. And You could also reduce space between the paragraphs. You could also work on the grammar a bit. A little editing can fix that.
All in all, you are a good writer and I really like this book. Can't wait for more.

Addictive

Well, first of all, this is exactly the kind of story I love to read. A mixture of mystery, thought-provoking and intriguing.
I love you writing style. It's distinct and clear. I had absolutely no trouble in painting a picture in my head.
The characters are something out of the ordinary. Especially Xavier. There is something about him that just keeps me wanting to know more. I swear if I meet him in real life, I am gonna follow him around till I peel off each one of his layers. That being said he is addictive and I love him and will continue to do so(Even if you turn him into a villain.) Klein is also a intriguing character. He's the kind of guy I would love to keep as my right-hand man.
Your storyline is alluring and addicting. I swear I read it all in one sitting and now I am frustrated with when the next update will be.
Only one critique: try to avoid being repetitive. It changes as you progress, that I can see. And it does nothing to ruin the book. And that's it.
This book is really a work and I gotta say, A dominant like you did a great job.

Just magical

Love it.
I have always been a lover of this genre. So believe me when I say that I have read quite a few novels in this field. And I would like like to say this is definitely a must read for anyone who likes to feel in extremes while reading.
I love the way you designed the characters. I have connected to them in ways I can't express. The female MC makes is a phenomenon.
Your writing style is good too. It describes an image very clearly so readers have an idea of what you are wanting them to see but it also leaves enough space for readers to create their own imagination. The flow is good too.
You just have a few minor punctuation errors and a little switching of tenses. Though I had the same problem at the beginning of my first book. So it's not something a little editing can't fix.
I honestly recommend this to any reader who likes the romance genre.

Thrilling

I love the way you described your character. It's very realistic and the way you portrayed her emotions made me feel like I was the one feeling them.
I also love the plot. It's thrilling and extremely captivating. Good call with the cliffhangers too. It leaves you no choice but to keep reading like a possessed man/woman.
I love your writing style to. Your grammar is near perfect. The only criticism I can come up with is your punctuation. Though it's hardly a problem. I recommend every book lover to read this.

A TRUE WONDER

This is pure magic. I recommend this book to everyone. Read it people. This book will blow your mind.
I love your writing style. The plot is exceptional and your writing style brings out the best of it. I love the fact that it is a merman instead of a mermaid. I absolutely adore MCs. Their character is very distinct. I can't honestly praise this book enough. It is a masterpiece. I would guarantee buy this book when it gets published. Because a gem like this will definitely get published.

Heart-warming

Goodness me, I think I just understood what falling in love feels like. In simple words, I recommend this book to anyone who wants to feel the warmth, comfort and emotions love can bring. One of the most most heart-touching and unique books I read in years. This really is a master-picture.

Compelling

Let's just say, you have my undivided attention.
The plot is great. It has a shadow of mystery around it which will compel you read further and find out what's going to happen. I am extremely eager to know what will happen later.
It just needs a little editing on its grammar and punctuation but that can be fixed very easily.
Overall, the story is great and I am pretty sure that whoever reads it, won't regret it.

Excellent story line

You are a person with unimaginable creativity. When I started reading the book I couldn't stop. Honestly saying that this book is something I would love to have in my bookshelf. A few Grammer mistakes here and there. That is the only flaw this book have. It's not too severe either. This book has a lot of potential. I feel that one day this book is going to reach excellent hight

Good going

Nice story. Your grammar is quite good but there are a few punctuation mistakes. The plot is nice and is quite educational. I like the names you used in the book

Cool story line

Very good story line. I love the way the story is told. The plot is good too. But there are a lot of plot holes. Nothing you can't fix with a little editing. The grammar is good but there are a few. Punctuation mistakes. You are very talented and your creativity is very bright. The story is very good but even the best stories has room for improvement. The book is going to stay in my reading list because I love it. Good luck author

Good plot

Very good plot. Your writing style is very good but everything has room for improvement. The story is realistic. There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes. Nothing you can't change with a little editing.