Soumya Roy

Just a troubled human, who is using the power of words combined with the internet, as an escape.

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Needs improvement

A very promising story Elle. The plot seems good and the first chapter has been written nicely. It creates a suspense, that pushes you to read more, without giving away too much of information.
The only problem is, that you make a lot of mistakes. You know grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes. But that's alright. You'll get better. It's something I am sure of, because you do show potential. And I also understand that English is not your first language, so you're bound to make mistakes. For that I would recommend a few things: you should read more books in English. That'll help you understand sentence construction. You should re-read your chapter, so you'll know what changes you want to make. And thirdly, you can also use apps that can help you edit it properly.
And it's just first chapter, so you're doing good. I'll keep on updating my review, as I read the next chapters. looking forward to read more from you. : )
xoxoxo

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I am stunned!

I know I know, you might;ve read it over for a hundered times, but I am just going to repeat what everyone has to say: I loved it!
From everything to use of latin, to the author's writing style, to the plot and the descriptions, everything is just flawless. I can go on, but you already know what I am going to say.
So, instead, let me just get straight to the point why I gave it 4 stars, instead of 5, when I say that this book is just perfect.
The only problem I find are the elongated descriptions. Your descriptions are your strength as well as your weakness. They are detailed and vivid, which makes it interesting to read. But sometimes, they tend to be longer than they should be. At some places, it becomes too much flowery and goes on to explain the same thing in 4 lines, that could be explained in just 1. Hence, it becomes a little hard to follow through.

Apart from it, I have no complaints. It's just awesome and as perfect as it gets.

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Requires some refining

First thing I would like to say is, that I love the author's reading style. She has written and portrayed her work very nicely. The sentences are properly constructed and there are very few mistakes.
However, the thing that was a turn off for me was that it got confusing in the middle. Suddenly there are new characters introduced out of nowhere, and balancing them became difficult. The characterization was good, but not good enough. Also, I feel that the story is moving a little too slowly, which causes the reader to lose interest.
But I will say that it can be improved surely. I recommend once that you finish writing the book, go through all the chapters and consider the reviews given by other people. It will help you a lot.
Happy writing!

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Freaking amazing!

I literally loved this book! It has such an amazing, fresh concept that you cannot not love it. It's fabulous! I like the plot, the storyline, the imaginative work and the characterization. Not to forget, unexpected twists and turns. When you start reading it, you feel like it's a typical book where weird things start happening to a normal person. But as you progress through the book, you realize how twisted it actually is. And what's great is, that the suspense factor has been maintained nicely throughout. You think you understand it for a moment, but the next moment you don't. And that's one of the many things why I like this book so much.
When it comes to critisizm. I think there are somethings that I might want to point out. Like there are some obvious grammatical, contextual and punctuation errors, but you can easily spot them and clear them out if you go through the book a couple of times. Apart from this, I think you could've framed your sentences better. Like just twerk them a little and use some different words. I mean we know that scary and horrifc basically mean the same thing, but one of them creates a better impact. Also it would be great, if you could also add some more details. Not that it's not detailed currently. Just you know, add little descriptions of how others apart from Elijah feel, how things actually look and feel like. Also it seems kind of rushed, so you know slowing down and explaining things in a little detail would help.
Overall, I just have one word for this book: Stupendous!
Kudos to the author and his/her/their imagination : )

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Needs to be improved

Let me begin with the things I liked. The plot seems really promising and if portrayed properly, it can build a readership. Also, the last chapter really left me wondering till the end. I knew what was going on, but the way the author mamanged to keep the suspense is what kept me reading.

Now coming to the things that can be improved:
1. You really need to work on your grammar, punctuation, tenses and narrative. And I know I have said it more than once too, but believe me it's something that builds your story. It doesn't matter if the plot is gripping, if your grammar is incorrect, then it will drive away the readers.
2. Imagery and description needs to be worked upon. I don't need to be told what's going on in the story, I need to see and imagine. I need to feel that I am seeing everything happen before my eyes. But the description here doesn't give out much. I suggest that you read some other works and see how it works. Try to remember that story you once read and were able to picturize the whole thing. This might help you come up with the descriptions to make everything vivid.
3. Characterization: 7 chapters into the story and the characters still feel 2 dimensional. I don't know how they look, how they talk or how they behave around everybody. You can start by describing how they look. This will let us imagine them and build something out of it.
Also, the dialogues seem unreal. This leads to making your story more unconvincing. Also, there are some plot holes. If this an isloated island, how come they have phones, or computers or labs? And if they do, you should've told us that it was more developed than it seemed. And, if Richard's wife died 35 years ago, what is his age now? Is Sophie attracted to an old man? Or did Richard get married in childhood? These questions need to be answered if you want to make your story flawless.

At last, I would just say that it's all my opinion. It's what I think and feel and it doesn't finalize anything about your story and writing skills and you're free to disagree with it.
Overall, I see potential in this story and I feel it can improve. You just need constant efforts and will to keep going and keep improving.

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I AM SHOOK!

I absolutely loved the book. The different themes somehow interconnected, always leave you thinking and introspecting. Everthing has been described vividly, and the exaggeration is subtle and alluring. The descriptions and the structure are smooth and lucid. The writing style of the author is commendable too. Every story leaves me asking for more.

The only problem I have is with the punctuation and other small mistakes, that can be easily removed.

Apart from it, the book is as amazing as it gets. It's impactful and worth giving a shot.

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An enjoyable read

It was one hell of a good book. Usually, I don't read fantasy, but I am glad that I read this one. The author has some commendable writing skills. The descriptions are smooth, and the flow is nicely maintained. The character development is well too. The plot was certainly new and something that I hadn't come across before.
The only problems I have are, 1. Sometimes, the descriptions get a little too much, more than that is required. 2. There are a few punctuation and other mistakes, which sort of break the flow.

But overall, it's an enjoyable read, and I would say, one should certainly give it a try.

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Worth reading

I'll begin with the things I like. The plot is quite predictable, but the efforts that the author has shown to improve it are clearly evident, and that's something I admire. The descriptions are smooth, and flow nicely. Also, the story gives a message and manages to portray it nicely too. And that I think is commendable that the author is giving out the right message, and not misleading the readers.
Now coming to the things I think require some work. Firstly, the characters seem a little blunt. The character development is surely there, but they need something more to solidify them as 'real people'. The writing can be improved too, along with punctuation (though, there're not many punctuation mistakes) and choice of words. Even though the descriptions flow smoothly, more can be added. Descriptions about the setting, how the places look, how they feel, can add a lot to the story.
I am sure that the author can improve and make the book a better version of itself. Overall, as for the book right now, I think that it is good and worth reading.

PS: You're free to delete my review, if you disagree with me, think I am wrong or I am the only fool that didn't like your story that much, just like you deleted my comment (yes, I keep track of such things).
All the best!

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Beautiful!

It was a beautiful and heart warming short story and I would even go to the extent of saying that I loved it. The transitions between past and present were smooth and nothing seemed odd or out of place. Especially the first chapter was wonderful! It's ability to make me feel a number of emotions in a single chapter, with just some words, is amazing.
I just have a few things to say though. There were a few mistakes in the second chapter, which can be easily removed if you go through it once. Also, even though I really liked your writing style, I would say that you could've used a stronger language (like metaphors or use of words that we don't use in daily life) when describing their present situation. It is good now, but I think it would become better if a better description of Ryan's and Christina's present situation was described, so that we could 'feel' their pain.
Apart from it, it's just beautiful. That's all I have to say.

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Absolutely mesmerising

A beautiful beautiful work. The words each express a story of their own. The poet has given a lot of thought in their work to make them make sense and express. It has been nicely penned too. All the poems express a deep emotion and leaves you with a million thoughts racing through your mind. Also, the language is just apt! It's neither too simple, nor too flowery, which makes it easy to read and understand ad enhances it's beauty.
Although, I do have somethings to point out. The poet uses free verse a lot. So, it's my personal suggestion that they should try writing in other rhyming schemes too. Other than that, I think they should also try to use more poetic devices and not just enjambment. Apart from that, they could also try to arrange certain words, so that they make more impact and try to improve the punctuation too.
Apart from it, I just have three other words to say: I loved it!

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Can improve

The plot is certainly intriguing, no denying that. It's gripping and has enough twists to keep you hooked.
The problem with the story was the way it was executed. The POVs changed abruptly, the use of possesive pronouns was not taken care of and there were many punctuation errors too. So these mistakes, do disturb the reading experience.
But you can easily rectify them all by going through the story a few times. And you can even take the help of the apps.
That's all I have to say.
Happy writing!

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Connects deeply with your soul

I absolutely connected with the poem at a personal level. The way it has been written and what is written makes a lot of sense. It leaves the reader with a mysterious mix of emotions. The words and the lines have been well thought about too.
There were a couple mistakes, which when rectified, will make it even more impactful.
But I have to admit I totally loved the poem.

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Deep!

The author has written really nicely. Gone into the depths of the topic to explain what depression truly is. And they have also succeeded in giving out the message. A great lot of emotions dealt with in a few lines.
But I think, there are some things that one can do to improve the poem. Like replacing the words, you can replace the existing words with their better synonyms. You can add some poetic devices. Writing in free verse is a strong poetic device in itself, which has been utilised wisely. But I think, it could be improved with repetition, metaphors or alliteration (that's all just my opinion).
Overall, I think it's a great poem to read if you want something to think about. It gives a strong message that the poet has managed to portray vividly.

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A cute-crisp read

When you write about something from your past, there's no correct style to write it. You can write whatever way you want to. And the author has proved that point. And not only that, she has used two different writing styles for different stories. Which makes it amazing to read. Also the language is simple, so you throughky enjoy it. And not to forget, the childhood stories, that always manage to make you smile at the end of the chapters.
The only things I found off were, some technical mistakes. You know punctuation, context, grammar, the usual. And it would also help if you make it more descriptve. I mean they're good as they're now. But it would also help if you dive in a little to add some description of the things.
Overall, a really enjoyable read and definitely the book to read when you want to unwind.

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An Ah-mazing read!

I like a lot of things about this story. Even in one chapter, the author managed to convey a lot of emotions and thoughts. I like the blurb, the plot, the cover, the buildup, the suspense factor and the author's writing style too. But what I like the most is the way it has been written and presented. Word play is nice too and I never felt bored even for a second. The fact that author has managed to maintain suspense throughout the story also makes it an intriguing read. What's more is it makes the reader think about their own lives and reflect upon it. The reader can feel the things happening in this story: like how we are misjudged or how me misjudge, our relationship with others and our portrayal of ourselves. So I have to say, the author has done an amazing job of capturing many emotions.
The only thing I felt off was about the grammatical errors. They were nothing major and nothing that disturb the reading experience, but they can be corrected. It would make the story even better.
It was a great read indeed!

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Short, meaningful read

The short tale captures a lot of emotions and values. It's upon the reader how he interprets the message.
It has been written nicely, so there seems no need for more than one chapter. But since it is a short tale (like a moral value story or something), if it would have been written a little differently, then I believe it would've enhanced its beauty. Like changing some of the words or reconstructing some sentences. But that's just my opinion.
Overall, it is a nice story worth reading..

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An eerie delight

I really love the plot and the concept. It's something fresh and new. Like unexplored stuff. And with the way its written, it really seems as if I have entered a new world and a strange being is telling me about herself. And did I mention that I also am intrigued by the book cover?
The only few things I found off were, that it had some mistakes. Just a few in each chapter. Not that it disturbs the reading experience, but it is noticeable. Also at times I just felt confused. Certain transitions were odd or out of place. So if you can re-arrange the sentences or maybe change them in a way that it is not too twisted, then it might become easier to understand.
But what I really love about this book is its dark humor. The protagonist just remarks at things which we humans wouldn't speak of much often, and she does it in such a way that it leaves you thinking. And the messages hidden behind those words make a lot of sense.
So I think that author has done a great job of not only story telling, but also making the reader realize things that are wrong or is thought of as wrong (hence giving a message to improve the human kind) and leaves them wondering.

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'Warm and Fuzzy' romance

Worth reading. I am glad that I found this book and made some good use of my time in quarantine.
It is such a cute story, with a bittersweet ending. The plot is good, but a little too magical (as in ressurection and elves on earth type of magical), But that's okay since it's a major part of the plot. But what makes it better is the author's writing style. She makes everything sound so deep. Like if anything is happening you can actually feel it in the heart. Moreover the chapters are short and sharp, that makes it even more engaging.
The only thing I felt off was there were a lot of mistakes. You know, grammatical errors, contextual mistakes, improper punctuation, the usual. Nothing really major, but very much noticeable.
Anyway the story was good, amazing actually.
Keep going Aspen!

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You can't be a writer, if you don't know what it means and brings with it.

Okay so I do understand that it's a work in progress, with only 5 chapters in and it's not good manners that I complain about the technical mistakes now. So, let me start with the things I like.
I like the plot. I mean the concept on which it is built is certainly intriguing. It's different than your typical best friend romances, and I like it for that. A fresh concept. And I am sure, it's only going to become more interesting.
But I feel that author has a lot to improve. Apart from the general typos, spelling, tenses, punctuation mistakes that we all make, the work still seems a bit amateur. First off, I don't think that the characterization of the female lead, has been done properly. It's like she's a weak girl, who wants to but doesn't stand up for herself. People need a strong chacracter. Sure she has her own flaws, but that too needs to be built properly. And the details are important. Throughtout the story, I noticed that you confused the color of the eyes, the names and things like that.
But I do think, that the author can improve. And after all, it has just started. I am sure, that's it's gonna be one awesome read.
I will keep updating my review as the story progresses.

Edit: I had to reduce the stars to one, because the author doesn't seem to understand something important that every writer should. CONSENT IS IMPORTANT! You can't just write in your story that the male lead kisses the female lead thrice, without her permission. Even though you mkae it sound like she enjoyed it, it doesn't justify what the male lead did. As writers, it's important that we understand our responsibility and don't write anything that gives out the wrong message. It's only to kisses in this story, but it migt turn into forced intercourse in someone else's story. One might think I am just exaggerating, but it is indeed something important.

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