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Hello, I hope you are doing well. I took my time enjoying your story and to say I'm impressed would be an understatement.
I like how the plot is proceeding. But there are some areas I think you can improve:
1. It would be better to add some background to the characters. Try imagining yourself as a character and then how would you feel about being in a certain room, or an open area. It brings life to the story and make it more real.

2. Another thing, try describing how the character feels or what their physical reactions are in a certain situation.

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