Zara DarkRaven

Pretoria, South Africa

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Fun Read

This story has a wonderful concept and is full of life as was a great view from a Gamering POV.

Perfect Fan-base material for any anime lover looking for something to ship, as you find your favorite character right away.

Definitely a must read.

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Beautiful

This short story had me smiling and on the constant verge of wanting to tear up.

Wonderfully detailed and touching.

I would definitely recommend for people to try it if they are looking for a quick read.

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Unique Story

I enjoy the storyline of this story and I'm looking forward to seeing more from this writer.

I would recommend adding more details about the scene and characters to give the reader a better idea what the scene they are meant to picture.

All in all, I am really enjoying her character ideas. I look forward to see how they all play out in the end.

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Intresting

This is a really interesting story.

I'm curious why those boys where fighting.

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Thumbs up

This was fun to go through trying to spot if I recognized the story the character came from besides reading the character chart.

What was great is reliving the memories when I had an OC that was a pokemon player ect.

The characters are not Mary-Sues that are pure Sugar fluff sweet perfect with no weakness which makes them more likable.

One had a habit of 'hiding things' which I found random and cute.

The mix that I picked up (I didn't recognize everything used) was between games, anime, and cartoons.

A great list to go through to relive your OC fan days.

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Beautiful

This is an enjoyable story that I was sad to see is put on hold.

At most I would suggest trying 'showing not telling; in your story more and editing here and there if possible as in changing the 'i' to capital letters for example.

From the current writing style, it seems to me you are writing with a passion for your characters as you hurry to write while they take over and lead your fingers and you down their rabbit hole.

I hope the fire and inspiration for this story spark again and look forward to seeing the rest of this story soon.

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Wow

Well written and draws you in.

I hope everything turns out ok in the end :(

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Pulls you I

Wonderful wording. The writer sets out the scene without over doing it, making you feel as if you are there experiencing everything!

A great read!

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Capturing

Definatley hooked on this story.

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Wonderful

I love the writing style of the author.

I'm honestly disappointed that there is only four chapter currently as I'm enjoying it a lot.

The characters are well written and the pacing is set clearly so your attention is captured from the first word.

I had butterflies in my stomach reading about Cove and Bonnie in the garden. Beautiful!

Looking forward to the rest!

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Fantastic

I love this Idea of werewolves going to school and being separated into different classes.

Reese seems like such a daddy pleaser and trying to find herself that it's so cute!

I cant wait to see more of this.

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Wonderful Beginnings

I enjoyed the first few chapters of this book that is currently out.

It immediately brought out the family and friend dynamics of the main character as well as the Heroine's personality nicely. This included the way there was both love and protectiveness in both the friend and family circle.

I find her writing style nice and comfortable with a positive flow when you read it. From the way the characters are handled, The writer is carrying the passion of the characters letting them lead her in the storytelling which should make this a worthy journey to follow for the reader.

I would still recommend trying to use the 'show not tell' method for the story.

I am looking forward to the next chapter.

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Very Emotional read

I couldn't put this down.

Just when you thought you knew where the story was headed, it dragged you into a totally different direction. I was honestly a mix between smiling too hard my face was about to crack to needing tissues as I read this.

The characters make up was fantastic and wonderfully diverse. The situation the Writer chose was a difficult topic but wonderfully handled, including handling people's emotions and not leaving it to the impression that there is only a wrong party who does things because they are bad.

The more you read, the closer you become to the characters until reaching the end I felt I had just finished a journey with a friend I would never see again and that I already miss.

REally wonderful work.

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Must Read

The story was written beautifully and well-paced.

I'm enjoying the plot so far which hooks you from the start and was binging on the current chapters. The characters are well-developed and balanced out nicely, especially in their circumstances and you soon decide on your favorites.

I would suggest is try 'show not tell' more when you write. Everyone battles with it at times, myself included.

I look forward to the next chapter.

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An African delight

I practically devoured the first chapter in one sitting.

A wonderful concept about the power of faith and the strength of a woman

Defiantly worth the read.

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Wonderful Potential

The writer is still experimenting with her style and finding her feet. At the same time, she took the challenge of writing a tale revolving around an illness that is still some times a sensitive topic, a wonderfully brave move.

Although there are times when it seems to switch between the points of view of who is narrating the story, I have no doubt about the feelings she is trying to put through.

Currently, It promises to lead you anywhere, from a sad romantic tale to something uplifting to a tragedy after chapter one. Personally, I'm hoping the Lead Character gets well again and finds the love of her life.

I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.

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