Taylor1004

Chicago

17 year old high school student, aspiring author, and music enthusiast.

Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

I Love the Idea

Alright, so you've got a great idea. I love that you're talking about an issue that does scare a lot of people and it's very relevant and I was immediately gravitated towards the plot since I can relate to it since I'm growing up in this "Trump America" dynamic. Although, I found the sentences a little choppy and not very descriptive. I could've used a little more backstory on the war and what happened and stuff like that. The dialogue is good and the characters are believable, I just found the writing choppy and I think it would help if you had less simple sentences and replaced them with compound/complex sentences to add more detail and so it flows more. Other than that, I like it!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Loved!

Hey! I really liked this story! I love the plot and I found myself able to relate to the character. Only criticism is I can tell that u write fanfiction (my writing is the same cuz I wrote a lot of fanfic) so it's structured a lot like a fanfiction which is good, but not as "professional" as a novel. Though I honestly really liked this! I love how you began every chapter with a quote, that's super unique :)

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Review

Okay, well, this isn't really my genre (I'm 16, so if my parents found out I was reading erotica I'd be grounded for a year), though sometimes I read fanfiction smut (though they're usually pretty short even if some are graphic), so a whole book with a sort of 50 Shades feel was a little weird for me, but I'm sure for people who really like this kind of erotica this is really good! I like the plot, it's intriguing and I like how you added the twist of her past instead of just having the cliche submissive girl with dominant business guy.

All in all I thought it was good, just I had to skip some parts

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Woah

Okay, this is your first draft? If it is then you are off to an AMAZING start! I really liked the plot (it reminds me of this movie I saw and I LOVE so awesome job)

There are defiantly some small things that need fixing, but honestly I'd buy this book. I really enjoyed it! Awesome job!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Very Intrigued!

Hi! I have to say I really like the idea of this story and the first chapter really hooked me! I think if you went more into depth about the character's feelings then it'd be even better, and I was slightly confused as to why from Jax's POV it's always "the boy____" while when it's Oliver's POV it's "I____" but I kinda like the contrast :)

All in all, I think it's a really great story and definitely a great starting point!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Awesome!

I loved this! It kind of reminded me of this book series I love (even though your plot was pretty different) but this is really great! Only thing I would add is a little more description on their looks (if you have trouble describing faces and body types I found this wiki how thing that walks you through all the steps so if you want I can send you the link cause I had a lot of trouble with describing the way people looked) though overall I love it :)

Read the story now
Weekly Teaser Award

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.