Temiko

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Wholesome

I’m all for responsible female leads and a handsome male lead. What makes this story wholesome is Gem, the protagonist’s little sister.
This story has potential for lots of reader engagement. I think as a reader, I will be more hooked to the story if the narrator is more descriptive and shows more than tell (this is why I marked certain stars down). For example, if a character is described as “she looked sad”, the context can be much more believable and imaginative if instead it’s written as “her lower lip trembled as she clung to me, tears in her eyes”.

This story would be loved by those who value family and thirst for the heart-skipping romance with a charming man. <3

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Overall Rating
Plot
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Great Plot

The plot is good. I shared it with a few friends because I found it hilarious and two actually downloaded Inkitt just to read it!
Grammer could use work.

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