Trond24

Aguanga, CA

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Mumbled Glance

For some reason " ... one last mumbled glance ..." really got me. Very nice juxtaposition! I was right there in line with that boy exchanging a final unspoken eyebrow raise.

I usually am not a fan of the second person but Leah Gray made this work quite nicely. It helps, I think, that it is one brief interlude in this woman's day; nothing earth-shaking actually happens TO her but everyone can relate with her.

Well done.

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Ridiculously Good

I had to stop for the night after two chapters because I'm about to lay my head on my keyboard. That is the only thing to stop me from finishing this right now.
I want to know more about this world, about the Royals, and how Junseh will destroy them. Impressive characters, sizzling dialog, and a mystery of a plot.

I sincerely hope you continue writing; amazing job.

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2nd Place in Running Scared
Top 10% in Another World
Top 10% in Nevermore

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