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Plot
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Pretty good with some bad aspects
Your book is very good, and the details pull in the reader and make them imagine what if feels like to be the characters. I would suggest developing the characters more, and having more drama is not a bad thing. Also, maybe ending off books in the future on a more positive note that ties some problems together and solves them, while leaving other problems unsolved for more people to come back.
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