Hello! This is actually the first Twilight fan-fic I have read, and I have to say I'm impressed! In the books and movies, I really wasn't a huge Jacob fan, but you made him very likable! I think you captured the personalities of each character very well, and possibly even improved a few! I wasn't a big Bella fan either, but again, you made me like her. As for your original characters, very well done. You gave them believable personalities and backgrounds and made them very easy to connect to and love. However, I hope this isn't the end of your story! I need to know what happens with the Winters! Please continue it!
One suggestion I have is to be careful to keep your plot consistent. I noticed a few minor discrepancies, such as people not being in a class one chapter, then actually being in the class the next chapter. I truly don't mean that to be rude, I just want to provide constructive criticism to a fellow writer! :)
Have a great day!
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