Agnes

Good so far

This is honestly a good concept for your story, but there are a number of mistakes which i picked up on, apart from that the story is awesome, keep up the good work

i'm so excited

ok from what i have read so far, the book is something definitely worth having a second look. i love the writers style and the plot of the story, form that short intro i am already looking forward to reading this book.

i love it

oh my gosh, i really love your story, everything about it is just right, from the details to the story like, i could literally picture everything in my mind and then the mystery hmhmhm, it felt so right. i cant wait for the next chapter

has potential

overall the story has a nice plot, but the book can be confusing, during the story you made zero use of quotation marks when the characters where talking, it was very hard to read it because of that, it would be more convenient to use quotation marks when people are talking as it gives the book a nicer, neater and more enticing look. i also felt that you were rushing a bit in the story as you left out details that would make readers feel like they were actually saher. when people read books they want to feel like they can visualize everything. when you said she took in the beautiful scene in chapter one you should have emphasized on how the scenery was beautiful, you could've mentioned the flowers or the gardens or even statues and podiums , you could've given the place a landscape.

a good story

i really like where the story is going, it has a good plot and it definitely has potential, but i feel that as a writer you should pay more attention to detail and grammatical errors. you should always proof read your work and then have someone else read it, like a sister or best friend before you post it because as writers it is a bit hard to spot errors in our own books as we were the ones who wrote it and your brains have already programmed what we wrote down, so even if there is a mistake we'll think its correct because we know what we meant when we wrote it and i feel like writers shouldn't use words that they do not understand in their books as it can confuse the writers. but i really love your book overall other than grammatical errors the story was nice. can't wait for the next chapter