Commendable first attempt
I have to commend the author on writing in a language that is not their first language. I know two languages fluently, but I could never comfortably write in Afrikaans. So big props for that feat alone. Unfortunately I couldn't connect with the story or the characters enough, but I believe each chapter the writing improved. So with time, research and reading stories of similar interest... this story could fly! I love the double meaning (the word to describe escapes me now)... of the title 'Ray of Sunshine' tying into the character name Ray; and then furthermore the contrast of the male lead's name being Dark. Thought that was cool. Keep writing, ALL stories need to be told regardless of who chooses to read them. Best of luck!
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