A O Hilpert

"All the words I wrote, you will never read"

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The Silence is Lifted

As most have noted (in previous reviews), the language and grammar is exceptional. It had me tripping over my thoughts at some points, but it flowed so beautifully how could I not be in awe...
After the pulsating prologue, the story slowed down a bit but I still enjoyed being in the characters' world in their everyday life. It started picking up again in Chapter 21, grabbing my attention with the new plot twist. Understandably, as this is only an excerpt, the new plot twist was short-lived with only a few chapters remaining (explaining the plot rating).
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I loved the ambiguity throughout, like I was left to my own conclusions on some things and I think that is kinda neat. E.g. Thomas... is he homosexual, or am I the only one that picked up that vibe? Haden... I most certainly thought he was about to sexually assault Alieda in the alley, were it not for the forced interruption. Am I the only one that picked up creeper/predator vibes from him?
To conclude, my favorite scene had to be the storytelling of Jaran Carver, specifically the story of the traveler fig. Along with Grey; Sera and Mama G, Jaran is one of my faves.

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Wardens of the Worthy

Brilliant storytelling, engaging characters and vivid descriptions of exciting scenes!
I loved the dialogue language, it put me right on the set of a Game of Thrones episode.
It does slip into modern from medieval sometimes though, but not enough to distract from the story.
I love that Svava is not as black & white as she might be expected to be.
I love her empathy, her loyalty to the Valkyrie and what they do - the importance of what they do.
Her allegiance is blind, but not without question.
I've concluded on the most recent updated chapter (16), but am intrigued to follow where this story will lead.

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Tobacco-chewing, rifle-wielding goodness!

I enjoyed ever minute of this read and I sincerely hope there is more to come, because I am on board for that!
Loved both lead characters in each chapter respectively, connected more with Waylan but that may be because of the seamlessly placed flashback.
The character of Bill Daniels is everything I'd imagine a notorious, no-nonsense badass to be in a classic Western. The authors writing (and great dialogue) placed me right there in that scene.
The only thing I wanna know is if Levi's a better shot than he is a gambler ;)

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Fun and Full-circle

I absolutely loved this story! I was completely engaged from the first chapter by the author's writing style.
The music choices for this story is just amazing and perfectly matching the scenes, when you take Fleetwood Mac, Bob Dylan and Lizzo without it feeling like you've skipped a beat or step out of place, you've struck gold. I loved the satisfying conclusion, not only because of the HEA but more so that the female lead learned to love herself above all else.

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Commendable first attempt

I have to commend the author on writing in a language that is not their first language. I know two languages fluently, but I could never comfortably write in Afrikaans. So big props for that feat alone. Unfortunately I couldn't connect with the story or the characters enough, but I believe each chapter the writing improved. So with time, research and reading stories of similar interest... this story could fly! I love the double meaning (the word to describe escapes me now)... of the title 'Ray of Sunshine' tying into the character name Ray; and then furthermore the contrast of the male lead's name being Dark. Thought that was cool. Keep writing, ALL stories need to be told regardless of who chooses to read them. Best of luck!

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