Ahlissa Eichhorn

Was born on 30th of August 1992 in Galion, Ohio ...

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Beautiful

While this story line seems familiar to me, the aspect of the sweets and cakes made it seem more magical and new. I felt like this story wasn't neccessarily the scariest of the entries but it definitely had disturbing undertones, some of which developed into gruesome. Definitely worthy of winning compared to others!

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More!

Loved the idea here but would have felt more satisfied as a reader if there was a bit of a climb in exposition, not just an "okay, bye!" Also, the poem itself was great but the length of it made me instantly disagree with the narrator and the fact that his mother would recite it to him. It's too long to say as a warning, the kids would have stopped listening a few seconds in or run off. It's definitely a mouth full! Would have loved to get a scope on "The One" too. Otherwise, nice and creepy.

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