Good story line and I'd like to read what happens next
I like the story line so far and the mystery surrounding why her boyfriend vanished. I wonder if it's somehow tied to the murders and the mystery guy who just bumped into her at the end of chapter 2. I can see how others are confused with chapter 1 because there's a lot of "backstory" and flashbacks crammed into a single chapter. She doesn't just go over one memory, she goes over several, one right after the other. In addition, there's the traveling but we're not clear on why they did all the traveling. I think this story shows a lot of promise and interesting story line. Just needs to be edited and restructured in a way that the reader can seemlinessly move from one memory to the next without getting lost in chapter 1.
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