Andrea Senna

Genial!!

Ésta historia es simplemente genial. Está bien escrita, es divertida y bastante adictiva al leer. Simplemente amo el personaje de Mara, está muy bien logrado el fluir de conciencia y emociones de la protagonista, es muy fácil empatizar con ella, e incluso sentirse identificada... en las confusiones, en los cambios de parecer, en los dolores. La recomiendo al 100% y sigo a la espera de cada capítulo!

Tensión total

La historia hasta ahora mantiene la tensión todo el tiempo... Todo tipo de tensión... Está muy bien escrita, y me encanta este tire y afloja que plantea. En una nota personal, me encantaría leer flashbacks sobre los primeros encuentros de Ren y Umi, que creo que ayudaría a construir más los personajes. Pero esto está recién empezando, así que espero ansiosa a ver cómo continúa la historia.

Dolorosa y hermosa

La historia es breve, y en esa brevedad logra estremecerte. Vale la pena leerla y tratar de no llorar. Me hizo pensar en el poder poderoso de catarsis que tiene la literatura. Al escritor, le digo que siga escribiendo!

Lovely

It is a short love story.. The characters are vividly described, and it is very easy to get in tune with their emotions. I also think the chapter titles are very well achieved. They show how history is being built like in photographs. I really liked that.
What I think can be improved:
- Verbs tense: They change all the time, modifying the tense of the main narration from present to past. Only one should be chosen.
-The conflict: When you start reading, you think that the conflict is about the past that Winifred and Lucas share. They can't fall in love because he's basically her rival and was her bully at school. However, nothing happens with this. They soon forget it. So, you think that the conflict would be about the Winifred's acceptance by Lucas's family, or the fact that she must travel far away for a long time. But the novel ends and none of that is clarified or resolved. Therefore, it is not clear what the conflict is.
Either way, it's an adorable story. And I think it has a lot of potential if the author keeps working on it.

Captivating

In the first three chapters, the story hooks you. The descriptions are good and the narration is well paced. So far, the story seems to lead to the collision of the human world with the supernatural.
Anyway, I'm waiting for more!

Good reading

I really liked that the protagonist is a little girl, I loved being able to see that world from her eyes and observe that the bad guys are on both sides,