It is a short love story.. The characters are vividly described, and it is very easy to get in tune with their emotions. I also think the chapter titles are very well achieved. They show how history is being built like in photographs. I really liked that.
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What I think can be improved:
- Verbs tense: They change all the time, modifying the tense of the main narration from present to past. Only one should be chosen.
-The conflict: When you start reading, you think that the conflict is about the past that Winifred and Lucas share. They can't fall in love because he's basically her rival and was her bully at school. However, nothing happens with this. They soon forget it. So, you think that the conflict would be about the Winifred's acceptance by Lucas's family, or the fact that she must travel far away for a long time. But the novel ends and none of that is clarified or resolved. Therefore, it is not clear what the conflict is.
Either way, it's an adorable story. And I think it has a lot of potential if the author keeps working on it.