Unique plot, potential to be developed.
I saw this story on the fanfiction discussion group and it piqued my interest. I didn't know what to expect, but when I read the synopsis, overwhelming emotions hit me. The synopsis is quite strong, a little too much. I'm not too much of a fan of stories with profanity, though, it is alright when used moderately. However, I found it concerning that there was some sort of profanity and cussing almost every single sentence. I do not know what your character's quirk is, and I'm interested in how it is developed throughout the book and how it relates to their back story. From what I was given in the first chapter, this character has a pretty harsh background. Again, probably a bit too much to handle in such a short time, and, if you don't mind me saying, a little forced and unnatural. Rather, I'd like to see this trauma be developed throughout the book in small portions rather than just thrown at me immediately. Not only does it make the story more natural and authentic, but it also makes the character's development more worthwhile to witness. The synopsis listed the character's flaws and harsh background, it isn't typically something I would want to read if that's all the synopsis gave me. The character almost seems like a Mary Sue, but in an opposite form. However, despite this, I am excited to read more about this character's tale. I hope this feedback helps you, apologies if I came off as too harsh. :)
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