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A very solid plot and steady build-up! There's already so many questions that need to be answered, I'm actually wondering how many more chapters you're going to need to answer them all?? Starting with the town attack? Why then? What happened to her own home? Where does she go?

I think fantasies are quite difficult to write and requires a lot of organization and methodic responses to questions, but you obviously don't want to be too descriptive because then it gets overwhelming. But this wise woman archetype that shows up for Alessandra does remind me of Obiwan Kenobi revealing himself to Luke for the first time. Very interesting and nostalgic!

You're doing great! -Mia xo

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