the lost padwan
All in all, not a bad story, however, there were too many punctuation errors for my liking. The writer has to understand that when you finish a line of dialogue and you use "he said/she said", you have to use a comma at the end of the dialogue. "I'm going to the store," he said. Not "I'm going to the store." He said. It's too distracting for the reader when the entire story is written like this.Read the story now
KOTOR: The True Sith
Never having played KOTOR, I come into this story as an outsider. That doesn't mean I'm unaware of the characters. I've always been a bigger fan of the Old Republic than I have of the Empire. That being said, let's get down to it. It liked the story. It read easily. The main character was a typical teenaged boy, and when he goes out on his first mission and suddenly realizes that he's led a rather sheltered life in the Temple, we watch him grow from naive child, into understanding young man coming to terms with his first love as well as meeting his parents for the first time. He might be a little too young for the story, Maybe 18-19 would be a better age, I don't know. But the manipulation by the antagonist Harbinger of his Acolyte was most carefully planned out and well conceived. That he was able to bring all the characters of the games into the plot to help propel the story was also well conceived.
Whatever little grammatical errors or punctuation problems there may have been, were minuscule. Overall, this was an excellent story. I would suggest sending this out and having it published as one of the books in the Star Wars library. I haver a shelf full of such books and would be happy ti include this on my shelf as well.
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