biangeli

short review on "Walk-In Investigations: A Spirits Oracle"

I really like your work because it's very in-depth to the depression and suicide experience. The pacing and cause-and-effect chain of events were excellent as well, though I think you should also be a little more creative on some explanations of events (i.e. when Katie was explaining about the Alexander case). Also, dividing paragraphs into several sentences wouldn't hurt, either.

Nevertheless, I am loving your story to the bone, and can't wait for more! :)

I wasn't a LOTR fan...

... but you nevertheless were able to create a plot that was both extremely intriguing and audience grabbing. Believe me, a fanfic about something I wasn't a fan of probably wouldn't have me hooked for a few chapters or two, but your work on "Interviews with a Woodelf" was an exception. I honestly had to take a few hours of my internet browsing to finish your work. The plot building and turn of events, the cause-and-effect of Rachel's reactions to David's life story... it was very gripping to watch as their fate unfolded. I like how you used Rachel as a narrator's point of view, and the way you integrated her as one of the plot catalysts. And I liked the historical references that you employed... very appropriate for the scenes. Saved me some time off doing my homework. I also like how you used technical recording elements to veer from the usual narrative style of most novels... in my opinion that was your best edge to this story.

Overall, I'm pleased to inform you that you've earned yourself a fan. :)

Flawless structure, emotionally dry

I really love how much you scatter your clues and red herrings that i just wanna keep reading on!!! Though you're kinda showing the detective as a flat character, if he could show more emotion and personality he would be an amazing protagonist.