Bruno

Enjoyable for some

Glad to read that so many readers enjoyed the story. That just goes to show that spelling and grammar are optional for most readers on Inkitt et al. The story itself was ok, the last chapters too hysterical for me though. Could definitely have used editing or at least spell checking.

Choosing a tense and sticking to it would have been helpful

Regrettably I had to skip this story because it bounces between past and present tense at random and doesn't follow the consecutio temporum. Due to this disregard for grammar I wouldn't have been able to enjoy reading it. I haven't published anything myself so I still appreciate the author's effort. The story would have profited from some basic proofreading though.

Not with this grammar (at least not for me)

If only authors would stick to past or present tense and followed the consecutio temporum on the way! Changing tenses are too annoying for me so I haven't read further than the second chapter.

Could profit from proofreading

I don't write myself so I will refrain from criticism - even though criticism is a sign that people care. The story would have been even more enjoyable if some editing or at least proofreading had been done. Half of the errors should have been spotted by any word processor and the other half should have been detected by a human proofreader. Why is it that people put love, time and effort into a story but don't have it polished by a third person? This story would have deserved it! Again, thank you for sharing with us and no offense!