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Interesting world building, grabbed my interest

I'll keep this short since I'm only half way through the available chapters so far.

It's an interesting story so far. The prophesy monologue served as an effective hook, and character interactions/world building after that were well written enough to grab my attention for a prolonged period of time. I think the story could do with a bit less description, and by this I mean: "Describe eyes, describe hair, describe legs, describe armor, etc. rinse and repeat". It's not bad, but it makes certain parts of the story slower than they need to be.

Regardless, looking forward to reading more.

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