Waiting for more...
The author has a wonderful mind - one that can see possibilities and translate them to the page.
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Actually, I was wanting for more pages. I think this story could be developed to novel length. I think Kiri is a great protagonist. The story felt to me like a cross between Ayn Rand's ANTHEM and the old movie Logan's Run.
There were the occasional misspelling and grammatical , and I would have liked more showing and less telling, but this is obviously a work in progress.
And I will be happy to re-read this story through each of them.
L.M. Bloom has definite room for improvement with a few writing skills, but, as a STORYTELLER, has a way of grabbing on to you -keeping you in the story.
This is an author I will keep following!