Chere Taylor

I love horror ...just as long as it’s fiction.

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No one wants to be ....Claimed.

No one wants to be ...Claimed.

Before I begin I should note this review is for the first chapter only. But boy is it goooood! It’s an awkward name but Spelunkadunk excellently paints the story of Toom, a would-be prince who learns about the dreaded fate of those who are Claimed. The term ‘Claimed’ in this world refers to a horrible form of slavery that includes sexual abuse. In a less talented writer there would be an immediate descriptive porn scene whose only goal would be a cheap turn on. But Spelunkadunk takes the abuse seriously and he (or she) deserves respect for that. I plan to read some more tonight. It’s a great way to relax after a hard day’s work. I just wish I could read it in a book form instead of a tablet. Keep an eye on this author. He (or she) may be going places ...

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It’s All in the Blood ...

It was never Amber’s desire to become a vampire. What others took for granted (going to school, going out on dates, living a normal life.) she yearned for with all her heart, but it was too late. The four male vampires were impossible to resist. They enjoyed using their good looks as a weapon and they’re collective sexuality as bait. While they train Amber, running their hands on her silken body, she wonders what they’re ultimate motive could be. Was it to teach her how to procure her own blood meals? Or more likely was it to train her to become their willing perfect victim as they consume her blood again and again with burning kisses.

This was hot. I do have a thing for Vampire stories. (I tend to prefer sexy vampires to sexy werewolves. What can I say? I’m old school that way. Lol.) Author Perez is good at delivering on that front with her sexy, male vampires each desirable and powerful in a special way. You can’t help but feel lucky if any of these lads were to turn their attention your way. Lol. The grammar could be a little tighter, but an entertaining novel nonetheless.

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Don’t Be Afraid of the Flood, Noah.

Noah knows there is something desperately wrong with his life. But he can’t quite determine what the problem may be. Was it his parents, who’s selfishness makes it difficult for them to see the destructive pain in Noah’s eyes? Was it his inability to connect with people, especially lovely Meghan whom he secretly desires to form a romantic relationship with? Noah, doesn’t know for sure. All he understands is that like his biblical namesake he faces a flood of deep, dark depression and if he is unable to rescue himself, then he too may drown in suicidal thoughts.

A rather sad story though I believe there is some hope for him in the form of Meghan. She may one day come to care for Noah and provide him with the affection he so desperately needs. It’s difficult not to sympathize with poor Noah. I kept wanting some miracle to take place where he would be saved, or at least receive some counseling. This is not your typical, happy everything-will-work-out-in-the-end romance. But if you’re willing to take a chance on the characters and with author Monkey Teah’s unconventional story line, you will be rewarded with a story that lays bare the horrors of depression and what could be done to help those who suffer from it.

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All F’d Up!

‘Candy’ Porter goes by many names and guises. She is Viktor’s kind-hearted sister and ‘Twitch’s’ drug addicted whore. Right now she wishes to become the only label that means something to her heart. That is as 13 year old Martha’s mother. But how can that even be possIble when she is locked up in jail. It takes more then giving birth to be a mother. Candy understands this but will Viktor, her brother be willing to give Candy one more chance and help her with Martha? Especially after the way Candy abandoned her first born son that Viktor is currently raising?

There’s more. Much more. But I’ll stop here so as not to give up too much of the juicy details. But wow. This was very well written. I’m a little jealous of V. Locklear’s writing skills actually. Lol. But that’s alright. Maybe I can learn from her. What I especially enjoy about Locklear’s work is the details she puts into her characters. You won’t mistake Clara, “ ...the bombshell widow with a cinched waist and box red hair” for Martha who hates her name. She describes it as “ ...the grating sound of her tongue slapping against her teeth.” Smal details, but it shows us more about who these characters are then a whole page worth of bland descriptions. I don’t score this way often, but I think ‘The F Club’ is another one of those novels that deserves the five star salute! Can’t wait to read more from this author. Perhaps one day we may find a book of hers in Barnes and Nobels.

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My Guardian



Opening Comments

Okay, here’s the intense critique as promised. These are the kind of critiques Scribwriter’s like to receive before submitting a piece to be professionally published.

Overall, I was impressed. You are a better writer then many who post here on Inkitt. But of course no work is flawless. Please remember too that most of my comments are personal opinions and may not always be correct. So please keep whatever advice works for your story and discard the rest.

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For starters congratulations on using the present tense so successfully. Personally, I prefer past tense. I know it’s an oxymoron, but present tense has a way of feeling stilted and aged while past tense feels fresh and urgent. However, I must say you used present tense perfectly. I saw no flip-flopping between the two senses. (As you know flip-flopping happens often on Inkitt.) I also liked your strong narrative voice. There’s a sense of direction in this story. I never felt bored while reading.

I did have some issues with the chase scene involving Olivia and her Guardian. You did cover your tracks some, by describing Samuel’s speed-walking. But still, how can a teen on crutches possibly hope to catch up with another able bodied teen? And Olivia also stops to help a nurse with her spilled papers and still manages “... catch the stranger round a left corner.” I’m just not seeing it. There’s another scene where Olivia easily knocks down Samuel and pins him to the ground again while on crutches.

Now if there is some justification for her powers, maybe something revealed in a later chapter, (like she has an unusual physical capability, or she is a specially trained athlete) it would be easier for me to accept. And for all I know that very well maybe the case. (I stopped after chapter five due to time restraints.) At any rate I thought that was something to point out.

Pacing

The pacing was perfect as far I could tell. I didn’t feel rushed or bogged down while reading. Let’s continue.

Descriptions

I have noticed that it’s the style on Inkitt and Wattpad to announce the POV characters at the beginning of each chapter. What’s interesting is that I have never seen this style in the professional publishing world either in books or magazines. The idea there is that it should be fairly obviously who the point of view is even when you swap to another character simply from the opening sentences. But I do understand that POV announcement is perfectly acceptable here on Inkitt. It’s almost like two different writing cultures in a way. Lol!

For the most part the descriptions were well done. Most of the scenes played smoothly in my head. (Well, there was the chase scene but we already went over that.) However I think I would have appreciated more of a physical description of the protagonist other then having the same shade of cacoa hair as her mother. You did a much better job at describing Samuel. As a matter of fact ...

“At the foot of the middle bed stands a scowling guy in his late teens. The thin gray sweater with the sleeves rolled up to just above his elbows and a pair of dark jeans with a silver chain Hanging from the side tells me he definitely isn’t a fellow patient.”

I felt that was your best written paragraph out of the five chapters.

At one point Olivia “ ...grabs a thick wormed out copy of the encyclopedia” Nice description. But does anyone in this day and age of tablets and cell phones still own a set of Book Encyclopedias? This struck me as a little dated.

Come to think of it, I’m not too crazy about the title of the novel. It makes me think of “I Married a Teen Werewolf’ or ‘I Dated an Axe Murder’. Maybe I just don’t like ‘I’ as the first word in a book title. It’s a crazy prejudice of mine. Again that’s just a personal taste thing. You certainly don’t have to change it.

Point of View

Could this story have been told equally as well from a third voice narrative? In this case I think first person works perfectly. Olivia’s strong personality is key to this story and that personality would have been less defined in a third person narrative. Good choice there.

Characters

Olivia is a well-developed character. I admired her inner strength and self-confidence. She also has the weakness of over estimating her own abilities. (Like constantly stepping on her bandaged foot. Lol) I liked that. It keeps her realistic and human and protects her from becoming a Mary Sue (an annoyingly perfect and flawless character.)

I didn’t get a chance to learn much about Samuel yet. He appears to be more easy going and laid back individual which is a nice compliment to Olivia’s more fiery personality. I can see them making a good couple, which I assume you’re setting your readers up for. It was a little disturbing reading about how he liked Olivia’s dark colored bras. It made me immediately think - Uh oh, has he ever seen her naked without her being aware? And how would Olivia feel about that. Now there’s an interesting plot point to explore if you haven’t done it already. Lol.

The mother comes off as a little psychotic. Even as a psychopath. Certainly not anyone who is capable of genuinely loving her daughter. I’m not sure if you intend this as a correct interpretation of Mina. (But if you have then please ignore the rest of this paragraph.) I first thought that this might be the result of an unreliable narrator (a narrator because of youth, inexperience or whatever reason has difficulty interpreting reality correctly.) But then Samuel confirms Mina’s abusive behavior. The problem with having a character this mean-hearted, is that she sucks up the oxygen from the other characters. As a reader instead of getting involved with Olivia’s and Samuel’s problems, I was distracted with ‘Why is Mina constantly attacking Mina? What caused her to be so cruel towards her?’

Also I’m convinced that with a mother this demeaning to her daughter, the daughter would unconsciously be doing all she could to please the unpleaseable woman. (I know unoleasable is not a real word.) And that doesn’t strike me who Olivia is. She is a strong, confident young woman, dependent on no-one.

I guess this is my sloppy way of saying Mina’s difficult personality might be a little too much. You might want to soften her a bit. Make her a bit more realistic. Again, just my opinion.

Grammar and Spelling

There were a few issues here, but not many. The truth is grammar has always been my Achilles heel in writing. I’ve never been terribly good at as I’m sure you discovered from reading my own works. But here are a few issues I’ve found.

“Then for the rest of the ride, he doesn’t glance at me again, despite me glaring straight at him.” The ‘me’ doesn’t strike me as proper English. I think ‘my’ works better.

“She needs to put the weight off her foot.” Awkwardly phrased. I think “She needs to keep the weight off her foot.” works better.

“Going to be at your back and call.”
Beck and call is the proper term I believe.

Closing Comments

You are good writer. I’m not sure how that 4.3 occurred for your novel rating. It certainly isn’t deserved. I don’t say this to most of the writers on Inkitt but you might want to consider joining Scribophile. It’s a mostly free website of professional writers where we grade each other’s work honestly. The payback is that you’d be required to write just as intense feedback on their works as well. But I think it might be well worth your time. I know you don’t like to hear it, but you are a talented writer. (And while experience can build on your talent it can’t create it. You either have it or you don’t) I can see you becoming a professional writer some day. (If you’re not already.) At any rate, please continue to write and thanks for sharing.

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I See the Spooked ...

Life is supposed to be normal for Brendon Bannon. He takes comfort in his daily routine; a boring train trip to and from his job, his ability to go blissfully unnoticed in all of his surroundings. When Brendon’s glasses becomes broken, he reasonably goes to have them fixed. But why is this particular Optometry storefront so off-putting, complete with it’s mad looking eye doctor known only as Dabra? Brendon tries to ignore the gnawing feeling in his soul that Dabra’s peculiar sight treatment he performs on Brendon is not right. And when the dead begins to approach Brendon with a familiarity that seems to hide sinister motives, Brendon fears that going unnoticed may never be a welcoming option again.

For starters this was very well written. I couldn’t find a single, grammar error. (An accomplishment I have difficulty achieving in my own writing.) Author MicMac 21, certainly has a way with describing horror. One of my favorite scenes is when Brendon sees a ghost for this first time. “I don’t care how many zombie, crime forensics, or horror shows you’ve seen, nothing prepares you for the sight of someone’s hideously decomposed face.” Excellent. Loved that line. Be sure to read this novel when you’re in the mood for a good scare by a talented author.

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Unmasking the Killer!

Jordan Maxwell isn’t sure what he has done to earn the wrath of the Masked Killer. All he knows is that he must find a way to survive the Killer’s sadistic blood tortures, no matter what the cost. Jordan is tied to a wobbly, wooden table, cold and naked while the killer draws his knife against various parts of Jordan’s body making sure he gets his ‘point’ across. Jordan’s only hope lies in young Sam, an innocent youth who does not like the games his father the Masked Killer plays, but is as helpless as Jordan to stop him.

Robert Maxwell on the other hand understands the Masked Killer’s motivation more then anyone else. But when he kidnaps his grown son Robert, Jordan vows to himself that this time he will find the Masked Killer and even agree to play his sick games. And right when the killer thinks he has Robert at his most helpless, Robert will then teach the Masked Killer what happens when you mess with the wrong father at what will be the ultimate unmasking.

Pretty good book and properly terrifying. This reminded me a little bit of the ‘Saw’ movies with the clockwork games and penalties for choosing the wrong answers. We also get to see the victim’s viewpoints as he struggles with the mad man’s game. This is the perfect story to read when you’re curled up in your favorite chair during a stormy morning with a box full of chocolates. (That’s how I’m reading it now. Lol.)

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Sunshiney Expectations!


Kiara Suns’ world was turned upside down the day she lost her family fortunes to an unscrupulous CEO manager. Once known as the unofficial Princess of the Sunshines Hotel Chain, she now finds that she must prove her worth through ordinary means; college, business sense and hard work. Deep down Kiara doesn’t mind. She had secretly disapproved of unearned wealth and is pleased to be in a position to establish her own company on her terms. That is until she meets Jeremiah Diamond who threatens to overthrow her world once again. Gorgeous and with intimidating wealth Jeremiah is intent on making Kiara his. But is this what Kiara really wants? To once again be tied to someone else’s wealth while her identity is swallowed up by the Diamond Brand Name?

Nice romance story staring realistic people. I like the well-developed character of Kiara. Her chatty friend Adrienne seems to have a life of her own with Ricardo. (I was grateful to see she’s not the stereotypical, gay best friend who’s only purpose is in the story is to prepare the main character for dates.) An enjoyable read about a lovely romance.

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Smile Baby Smile

Winifred hasn’t had much happiness in her life. Growing up as an orphan and bullied in both elementary and high school, all she wants to do now is concentrate on her college studies and move on with her life. But Lucas her childhood tormentor won’t have any of that. He follows her around the school campus and always has some smart-ass remark to give her. Why won’t he just leave her alone? Sure, he’s grown up kind of handsome if you liked the lean muscled and lanky blonde hair type. And too, every once in a while she thinks she sees a soft glance from him. Something vulnerable and questioning before he covers it up with the usual smug-arrogance. But surely those yearning glances are just a trick from her imagination. Aren’t they?

For starters Moi-Moi is an excellent writer. If it is her goal to become a professional published author, I believe she will successful some day. (If she’s not already.) What I like best about her writing is how she realistically portrays her characters. They are not Mary Sues (a character so perfect that they ruin the plot of the story) but are well-rounded individuals and allowed to have faults. Warning, there are no fantastical, exotic creatures in this story to fall in lust with. But here is a simple love story that us ordinary humans can relate too.

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Royally, Eternally and Specifically Yours ...

In a modern day kingdom where political intrigue is a way of life and betrayal is sometimes necessary for survival, two young innocents accidentally meet. They are the red-haired, giggly and impulsive Elenor’s and the dour but princely William. Though only children they feel a bond growing between them consisting of true love and friendship. A bond that might one day be strong enough to protect them from the mercilessly manipulations of their family who likes to use each other as chess pieces.

A good read with lots of lovely, poetic language. The author Pink Pineapple sure knows how to create beautiful passages. My only minor complaint is that the language of the characters sounds like it comes from medieval Europe, and yet there is mention of electronic devices and airports. So for me at least that came as a bit of a clash. But it might just be a style I need to get used too. At any rate give this novel a try when you want to be transported to a land of beauty and mystery.

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The Key to Her Heart


Alia Carter is no stranger to tragedy. The death of her parents at the tender age of five, has left an indelible mark on her soul. Especially when she witnessed them being devoured by the impossible, a creature that can’t exist in any reasonable form of reality. Her uncle gave her a more reasonable explanation for her parents’ disappearance and Alia clings to that explanation desperately. Her childhood memory can’t be real. Everyone knows there are no such thing as monsters. But as her life reveals more discoveries, Alia, slowly learns that Magic can be terrifyingly real ... but Magic also has the ability to reveal something beautiful within herself.

This was a good story and well written. I enjoyed how it begins immediately with a calamity (one of my favorite styles of introducing a story) and I liked how the protagonist was African American like me. I’ve read some stories mostly romances with Black characters, but it’s more rarer for Blacks to star in fantasy type novels. (Though this is a romance novel too. I just started reading so I didn’t get to Eric yet.) I’ve already brought a copy because I want to read this story in pristine condition. Unfortunately it won’t be released until July 2021. But D.M. Lewry’s ‘The Eos Key’ is worth the wait.

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He’s No Abe Lincoln.

No one needs to tell Wilder Sanchez how to lead her life. As a drug abuser and a teen who is somewhat familiar with the illegal knife trade, she enjoys her life immensely. So why does this one boy, Abraham Bennett moves her so much. He is a soft boy in his physical appearance and also with his experiences in life, something Wilder very much despises. But as she slowly gets to know him, Wilder can’t help but wonder if perhaps the yielding girl once known as ‘Eli’ still exists somewhere underneath her hard surface.

A sweet romance story without the use of mythical creatures for once. I like Wilder’s well-deserved name and her unrepentant attitude about her crimes. Abraham, on the surface at least, doesn’t seem to be the type of boy to tame a Hellcat and that is where the sparks fly in this story and what makes it so fun. An extraordinary love story that examines the wonder of ordinary love.

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Double Dare ‘Ya

Sage has always felt socially awkward in life. She is not as outgoing as her more popular twin sister Salem. And she prefers working on her art then to attend social outings. But when her newly made friend Avery traps her into attending a school camp fire, Sage promises herself to keep her distance from her new friends. After all, she does not want to recreate the tragedy with these innocent teens. The one where everyone dies ...

Honestly, this was very well written. In fact I wasn’t expecting the quality that I found here. I particular liked how well formed Wordspileup has developed her characters. Sage for example is not some cookie-cutter cliche as our protagonist, but a distinct personality with her own thoughts and feelings. (I suspect Sage might possibly suffer from some form of undiagnosed Autism too. But I would have to read more to find out for sure.) Wordspileup is certainly a talented and skillful writer. I wouldn’t be surprised if to see this particular author’s works in Barnes and Nobles one day. Just not under the name of Wordspileup. Lol.

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Finding Love in all the Right Places.

The time period is a little after War World II. Rationing is still going on in Great Britain and the Pennington Boys are preparing to attend the prestigious St. Christopher’s school. Most of them are looking forward to the experience with the possible exception of Anthony who fears that his bookish personality might antagonize the other students. Also, girls will be attending St. Christopher’s for the very first time. How will the Pennington brothers react to the attractive Athene and the other girls they will soon meet on campus?

Sofia Corsi is a gifted writer. At all times I felt I was reading about distinct individuals with their own personalities. She has introduced several characters in the beginning chapters of this book and she juggles all of them well. Having said that I must admit this particular genre isn’t my favorite. (I love horror stories about things that go bump in the night. What can I say?) But Sofia Corsi has charmed me with her writing. If there was any novel that could persuade me to indulge more in romantce period pieces this would certainly be the one. A must read if you enjoy Romance from the Past.

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Evil Never Dies ...


Nisha fears very little in life. That is due mostly to her powerful and very dangerous dog, Macho. He is humongous and intimidating. As the villagers eye both Nisha and Macho suspiciously, they are careful to keep their distance. They never want to learn what it’s like to have Macho’s merciless jaws wrapped around their necks.

Unfortunately, two boys haven’t learned how to be cautious around Macho. They attempt to sexual assault Nisha which earns them Macho’s wrath. The dog attacks them, but the villagers come quickly to the rescue and kill the dog, also leaving Nisha’s body broken and beaten.

However, evil never dies, and as the Inspector Vijay learns about a new dog who kills without devouring his victims, he wonders if this could somehow be the return of Macho. He isn’t sure. All he knows is that he had better solve the mystery quickly or he may one day feel an unforgiving dog’s teeth sink into his own throat.

This was a good story. It had some nice elements from what to me is the greatest killer dog story of all time; Stephen King’s Cujo. In fact I admire Skallinkeel for continuing in the killer dog genre with King’s novel Cujo in existence. What makes The Dog distinctive is that I actually like and feel for Macho. He is the perfect anti-hero, and I’m kind of glad he’s getting vengeance for Nisha. An intense and interesting read.

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Video Game Madness!


Lydia Johnson has grown bored with her daily work routine even though it provides her with many financial comforts. But is this what she wanted out of life? To rubber stamp the approval/disproval of video games while finding ways to avoid a mother who still attempts to dominate her even though Lydia is a grown woman. She yearns for change, a sense of adventure? But what can be done when she is chained to her nine to five job?

It is then when a car accident provides a way out. She is given a new identity, a new purpose. Even her physical appearance is no longer the same. At first Lydia/Portea is grateful for all the excitement and new challenges. But as she is taken to trial, she slowly realizes that change comes with a cost and to loose in this game may cost her and the nation of monsters all of their lives.

I liked this story. I found it quite engaging. The title is a bit deceptive. I for one was imagining this psychopathic woman who would be the leader of a gang of criminals preparing for their next crime spree. Instead author Morgan Powers has created a relatable character that I couldn’t help but greatly sympathize with. (Lord knows I can relate to Lydia. But perhaps the less said about that the better.) Morgan is also a skilled writer and avoids the past/present tense trouble I often see on Inkitt. Glad I discovered this novel and keep your eyes on Morgan Powers. We maybe hearing big things from her in the years to come.

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Hope is a Wish with Wings.

In the Shierran Kingdom darkness rules over this once happy land. Their country is over-run with vampires and werewolves and monsters that bite. The towns people live in daily despair with no real reason to hope.

Or is there a reason? For an ancient prophecy states that when the three princesses are re-united once again, then the good fortunes of Shierran will be restored. But where are the princesses? Perhaps a simple peasant girl with an unusual jeweled stone embedded in her belly, can supply the answers ...even if she is unaware of her own importance at first.

A charming fairy tale. I liked how author Quilltip the made her characters as three distinct individuals with their own personalities. (A less-talented writer would have more or less cloned all three of them.) My favorite princess-sister was Esther. She has this unique, magically inspired disease that I won’t spoil by describing it here, but it was her character and her condition that drew me into the story.) I saw little bits and pieces of Shrek here and there. Especially in the over-talkative and clinging Lilly character. This is a wonderfully, creative piece of writing. I’m a bit jealous actually of Quilltip’s unbounded imagination.

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Love, the Ultimate Challenge

Coraline loves challenges in life. A gorgeous and free spirited beta-wolf, she does whatever she pleases and damn the consequences. Even when Finn tries to inspire fear in her by recklessly driving his car towards her, Cora does little more then sneer. This irritates Finn greatly, but he knows his position as the son of the Most-High Aloha Wolf he could do with her as he pleases. Cora might have found trouble with this irresistible werewolf ...or perhaps a burgeoning love interest.

Livvie Ray has created an intricate romance story. I’ve read other werewolf fantasies before. But none where the rules were so carefully built and acknowledged. It gives the novel a strong feeling of realism. I admired Cora’s indomitable spirit and am wondering how both of these strong willed characters (If I understood correctly I think Finn is an alpha) are going to work together. Definitely not your average werewolf story. Be sure to give this one a try if you like strong, indomitable women.

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A Star-Crossed Tribe!

Raymond, a lazy archaeologist along with his best friend Sigismundo explore a mysterious section of Northern Italy hoping to stumble onto something valuable. Instead Raymond accidentally transports himself to a dark tunnel full of ancient evil secrets. There he encounters a man who in a horrendous scene psychologically molests Raymond (in one of the best descriptions of mind rape I have ever encountered.) Somehow he manages to escape and returns to his friend’s villa.
There is a betrayal and Raymond is again recaptured. This time he will be forced to endure an even worse threat then the mere penetration of his mind. Perhaps a fate even worse then death.

This was really good. I mean really good. I truly didn’t expect to enjoy Pentaurus as much as I did. So much so that I was disappointed that there weren’t any more chapters. (At the time of this review there were only four available.) I can see myself buying Pentaurus at Barnes and Nobles if it was available there. Bleeding Petals is an excellent writer with a strong, narrative voice. It’s not often that I give a novel the perfect five star review. (I think I only did it three times before.) But Pentaurus certainly deserves it. I hope the author posts some more chapters soon. I gotta know what happened to Raymond.

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A Lone Wolf


This review pertains to the first four chapters only. He dreams of love, of perfection. But he lives in a broken body. His only companions are Jafril and Shadow who are somehow tasked with his care. His own past is a deep mystery even to himself. Is he fully human? An alien perhaps? Or possibly a mixture of a living organism and cold animatronics? He doesn’t know. All he knows is that once was more. And he wants more, an awakening if you will. Though what this awakening ultimately means can come with a huge cost for him and his only companions.

I’m not normally into science-fiction. My taste runs more toward horror and romance. But I do know quality when I read it and Brittney Miller is a talented writer. I didn’t note any past-present tense issues in the chapters or what I call ‘jumping head narratives’. (Where were seeing the story from Bob’s perspective and then suddenly were in Alice’s head and then we’re back with Bob’s again. That can be quite confusing.) An engaging story with a very unique protagonist. I wouldn’t be surprised if we see Miller’s books in Barnes and Nobles one day.

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Beware the Truth!


A lonely thirteen year old named Ralphie lives in a stilted, barren world. He never visits children his own age and his parents treat him almost as an after thought. His only entertainment is in the form of a headset. Through his headset he can virtually visit other places even though those areas also feel empty. Yet, bleak as Ralphie’s world is, there creeps at the edges of his life a dark, dark secret. One that is capable of destroying his entire world if ever discovered.

I don’t dare reveal more but what a wonderfully creative story. I didn’t see the ending coming and was genuinely chilled by it. The author MG Trazor has a very strong narrative voice. By that I mean there is a personality and a skill in his (or her) writing. It’s not the drab “...he said this, then she said that. He did this. She did that.” In fact his/her narrative voice reminded me a little bit of my own if I can butter myself up a bit. I’m not sure if I’ll ever reach the stage of becoming a traditional published author, but I wouldn’t be surprised if we were to see a MG Trazor novel in Barnes and Nobles one day. Remember, you heard it here first.

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Let’s Start From the Very Beginning ...



This review pertains to the first chapter only.

Jack Madox has the unusual blessing of belonging to a family of immense wealth and intelligence. When he becomes the proper age his Uncle Ron invites Jack to his private castle like home in order to offer Jack a chance to contribute to the secret of a life time.

An interesting take on the time travel genre. One of the plot details that is unusual for this genre is that there is no ‘Butterfly Effect’ (Which for me was always the fun part of time travel stories, but perhaps the Butterfly Effect will return in future chapters). Also currently, the machine only has the ability to take their subjects to the year 1721 and once departed there is no way to return to the present age. (I liked that. Wonderfully sinister.) Mr. Hayes is a confident writer and is convincing in his portrayal of the special intelligence of the Madox family. Be sure to give this novel a try for a unique time travel story.

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Where Have You Been, my Oblivion?



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On a seemingly ordinary day, thirteen year old Chance and his best friend Jaden attend school which is filled with boring lectures. Chance tries his best to remain focused on his teacher but he daydreams anyway and sees his own shadow mysteriously move and shift even as Chance himself remains still. Is this an illusion? Or has he gained some wonderfully new super power?

After school Chance tries to demonstrate his new skills for Jaden but he fails miserably and this causes Jaden to regard him with suspicion. But after leaving the movie theater, the two boys encounter a dark and dangerous entity. Suddenly Chance knows he is in the fight for his life. Will his new powers be enough to save himself and Jaden. Or will they fail him yet again?

This chapter ends with quite the cliffhanger. I enjoy super hero stories. (I’m a huge Batman fan, myself.) And I liked the Batman connection of a possible fatal crime occurring at the exit of a movie theater. (I picked up some nice Shazam vibes too in Chance’s sardonic but youthful personality) Interesting enough I couldn’t find any grammatical errors in this chapter. However there were on a few occasions an unusual phrasing of the English language that was mildly distracting at times. But nothing fatal to the story. I’m hoping Chance survives his encounter with the dark stranger and becomes the superhero he is destined to be. Go Chance!

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Bad Moon A’ Rising



This review is for the first two chapters only. It is the time of year when werewolves are required to mate and Killian Darcy is very impressed by the Anglo Saxon beauty of Helena his mate chosen by the Luna Goddess, herself. Will he be equally impressed when he sees her in wolf form and vice versa? For that matter will their marriage be enough to heal their warring factors of their two werewolf tribes? What will be the ultimate fate for both of them?

M.Mokka has all the answers in this novel. He/she is a confident writer and carefully guides the reader’s attention through this version of Romeo and Juliet story with werewolves. I saw no grammatical errors here. (Very rare for Inkitt). In fact this is the best werewolf story I have read to date on this site. Definitely take a look if you’re a fan of Twilight.

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Choose It!



An interesting retelling of Stephen King’s It novel, this time told through the character of Richie Tozier. In this version, his adult self slowly comes to the realization that he was in love with Eddie while they were both children. This brings about conflicted emotions in Richie and the story becomes an interesting study on how his lost love effected and continue to effects the rest of his life. I liked the explanatory nature of Reddie’s story. Realistically love is based on time and experiences instead of the stereotypical “You look so hot let’s fuck” message of so many romance novels.

Kudos to Reddie’s bravery for borrowing characters from the great Stephen King. (And between you and me, I think Richie would have been a more interesting character if King had chosen this sexual orientation for him.)
I noted some past and present tense issues but nothing that can’t be easily ignored (or fixed). A promising read if you’re looking for something beyond the typical romance novel.

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Elyren’s Destiny



In a world far different from our own, lives a child with the destiny of becoming a great sorcerer. He is influenced by Seer Savi and as a child even tries to attack him in his thirst for magical knowledge. Lord Arwell tries hard to control the fate of his son by enrolling him into the military. But it quickly becomes obvious that Elyren is not a man who can be controlled by traditional means.

This is a very particular world that Vin Wintergreen builds quite carefully and skillfully. Magic abounds as well as a feeling of grandeur and legendary history. This novel has that same hopeful sense of awe and wonder I felt when watching the early Star Wars movies (But this is not a science fiction work. It is strictly fantasy) Grammar was superb. I could find no technical errors. Elyren is an intense read, but ultimately enjoyable.

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The Love of Ink

I’m usually not much into poetry but I liked this one. The narrator is obviously looking for love. The question becomes is it a flesh and blood person who she seeks to “chase away” her pain? Or perhaps the act of writing in itself? Does expressing herself try away her tears and give her hope for the future? This is an interesting poem that writers can relate to.

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You’ve got talent!

You certainly have talent. To be fair I’m still new to Inkitt and I haven’t read many stories yet, but yours is the best written I’ve encountered so far. I liked your opening paragraph which did the unique job of describing Georgina and setting up immediate tension with the dog. What a hook. You read this paragraph and you immediately want to know more. Creating that kind of interest takes skill as a writer.

Saw a minor grammar issue, a repeated word Most likely a typo. I’d quote it to show you where, but Inkitt doesn’t allow direct quote from author’s work. But if you look for it in the first chapter I’m sure you’ll find it. That’s nitpicking really. Honestly, you’re a good writer. You have a strong, narrative voice and you provide your characters with distinct personalities. I’m a little jealous actually. I wouldn’t be surprised to buy your book from Amazon some day. Keep writing. You’re very good at it.

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Feel Her Fear

The journal is a small golden sleeved book that is abnormally untouched by decay or ruin despite being discovered among the manor rubbles. But that doesn’t deter ghost investigator Jack, from exploring it’s contents. He has always been fascinated by the super natural. And the evil described in the book is a bizarre one, a monster who takes the form of a child’s worst nightmarish creations, the classic monster under the bed.

Jack is wise enough not to scoff at such a monster. He treats it with respect, by carefully taking the Nightmare journal back to the hotel with him and tucking it underneath his bed hoping the monster will make an appearance. But respect is not enough to tame the terror in the book. As Jack senses something dark and terrible underneath his bed, he suddenly remembers what it’s like to be a child again, shivering alone and afraid of the terror that can’t be seen.

Oooooh, I liked this. I love horror stories and this novel had me hook, line and sinker. It’s a shame author Chloe stopped at only three chapters. She hinted that she might like some ideas on how to finish the story. Unfortunately I really can’t give her any as both Jack and the monster are unique characters coming solely from the author’s imagination. Still, I hope she chooses to finish this novel someday. It would be a shame to let this story with such a creative premise go unfinished.

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Not Your Average Household

Zadine is an ordinary teen who dreams of having the same luck with girls as his more adventurous, best friend Brandon. Alas, Zadine knows he doesn’t have the level of confidence or classic good looks to be as successful as Brandon in the women department. That is until he meets the most beautiful and exotic woman in the world. Her beauty is stunning and intimidating, smooth dark skin and lips that seem to hide a sensual secret that may prove impossible to resist. How can he ever hope to impress this dark, classic beauty? Let alone win her heart?

Kyra is used to men of all shapes and colors flirting with her and she usually finds their attention irritating rather then stimulating. So why can’t she stop thinking of the Zadine boy? She can have any man she wants, but it’s Zadine she burns for and she imagines tasting his blood as he enters in the darkest part of the night. Yes, Zadine will be her latest sex toy, Kyra decides ...if she doesn’t kill him for his blood first.

Whew! Some hot, sexy stuff here. I’m surprised this novel isn’t labeled as erotica. There’s plenty of well described sex scenes. (Kyra likes to use sex as a way of dealing with the ennui that comes from being over a thousand years old.) I also enjoyed reading about a gorgeous African American female vampire. I believe she is the first one I’ve encountered here on Inkitt. Overall this was a compelling and well-written book. I do understand why it’s so popular. As a matter of fact I wouldn’t be surprised if this particular novel ends up on Inkitt’s best seller list in the future. Remember, you heard it here, first.

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Welcome to Jonesville ...

..A sleepy little town where nothing much happens outside of the local diner. Cahdla, the attractive server who works at the diner doesn’t much mind though. She finds the daily routine a comfort. Unlike her sister, she is not looking for romance and finds it convenient to live at home with her parents.

But that was before the stranger bought the house next door. His name is Lars and he visits the diner where Cahdla works at on his move-in day. Who is this crazy guy? Cahdla wonders as she serves him and his friend spaghetti that they both eat with a spoon?!? Cahdla doesn’t know. All she knows is that she likes the appreciative glances, the good looking Lars keeps throwing her way. It just might be time Cahdla thinks to herself for the sleepy little town of Jonesville to finally be shaken up.

For starters this was well written. Present tense writing is difficult to master without falling occasionally into past tense. (I know from personal experience. I’m not even sure how well I handled present tense in this review. Lol!) But Jacque C writes it beautifully. There is also no jumping head narratives and the story doesn’t open with an alarm clock. These are all things I fully appreciate in a story. Lars is certainly a fascinating character. Part of me is wondering if he’s an alien. I had to my pause in my reading to write this review, but I plan to read further just to find out. An interesting tale about an unexpected and unusual lover.

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All in the Bucket.

Jenifer, an attractive young woman has always tried to inspire hope in others. After surviving an emotionally abusive family that values money above all else, she promises herself to never let those warped values change her into someone she can’t respect. But when cancer invades her body, forcing her to realize how short and precious life really is, Jenifer is forced to come to a decision. Does she feed her long resentments towards her uncaring mother and extract revenge? Or does she try to inspire hope in her younger brother, just one more time?

A very sentimental novel that aims to tug the heart strings and I admit with me has somewhat succeeded. The first chapter was the best in my opinion and my favorite. There we learn about Jenifer’s difficult past and how her half brother managed to live a more privileged life then she did. But this doesn’t destroy the love between the two siblings. Nicely done. I did note some grammar errors, but none that ruined the flow of the story. This novel certainly spoke to me and reminded me of the power of love and forgiveness.

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My Mystery Lover ...

Jay has never had a hard time attracting male attention. With her long curly, black hair and startling blue eyes, the problem had always been how to let her more friskier bar customers know she that she wasn’t interested in them. But all that changes when she meets her invisible lover. Jay is unable to see him, but she feels his stare on the back of her neck. She can feel his touch on the most intimate parts of her body. How can she refuse a lover that is unable to be seen. And even worse ...did she really want to?

I haven’t gotten to the Hotel part of the novel yet, but I can tell already Jeayness Is a skilled writer. I saw no past/present tense problems here. No jumping POV syndrome. The novel doesn’t begin with Jay waking up to an alarm clock. (The protagonist getting up out of bed as the starting part of the novel happens to about seventy five percent of the stories here on Inkitt.) My only very mild complaint is that on occasion two separate lines of dialogue would be combined together in one paragraph, hence the four stars in grammar. Otherwise this would have been a perfect five stars in every score. A fascinating novel that is sure to grab your attention and keep it. At least, that’s what it did to me.

P.S. The author did correct the dialogue errors, therefore earning a perfect five star salute.

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Darkness in the Shadows ...

Noah was never one to avoid mysteries. Haunted by his older brother’s death, he has vowed that he would find out what exactly has happened to him, no matter what the cost. With his two best friends, the bold and intelligent Max and the ever inquisitive Derek, Noah sincerely believes that there is no mystery they can’t solve together. However, there are mysteries and then there are dark and evil secrets that can be dangerous to uncover. As the deaths at Edgewood High increase in volume, Noah begins to wonder if there are some secrets better off remaining in the shadows.

A nice mystery story. I’m sure Cole’s death (the older brother) is tied somehow with all the deaths that are going on at Edgewood High. But how can only be answered by Aryan’s creative imagination. At the time of this review there were only three chapters, but I can’t wait to see how everything is tied together. I hope Noah and his friends aren’t in over their heads.

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Fuc-ing Oblivion, Baby!

Survival is difficult in this new world, created by scientists who lost control of their serum that ironically was designed to promote life. Instead, the serum mutated, turning humans into mindless zombies and forcing Nature itself to create monstrous creatures bent on destroying humans. Despite his dangerous surroundings, Ethan finds the will and means to survive. He is filled with guilt over the accidental shooting of his best friend and has decided that he deserves a life of solitude. So why does Lixa insist on saving him? Yes, she is attractive with her wild, flowing black hair and her tight shorts that show off her well-muscled thighs. But Ethan sees himself a murderer, not worthy of giving or receiving love. Can Lixa’s patient understanding perhaps change Ethan’s mind?

An interesting take on the Apoplectic genre. I don’t find too many End-of-the-World novels on Inkitt. I liked Erhan’s no nonsense attitude, honed by the battles he survived. My favorite character though was Lixa (what a beautiful and exotic name.) At the time of this review there were only two chapters available. (The first three chapters were actually copyright information and detailed plans about the future of the novel.) Here’s hoping Ethan and Lixa survive ...and perhaps cook up a nice romance.

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Team Septet Go!

In this alternate world, Zeus has become an evil god, and is troubled with madness. He plunges the entire world into a realm of darkness. Who can shed light in the world once again and battle the powerful King of the Gods himself? Penelope knows it won’t be a singular magical being that can take on Zeus. She will need seven. After careful screening and Antipholus using disappearing tricks, Penelope believes she has finally gathered her group. But even with her new recently crowned super heroines, will it really be enough to defeat the madness and power of a god?

Interesting. I believe this is the first screenplay I’ve encountered on Inkitt. It reads smoothly and the action is fast paced. I did have some trouble imagining what the characters looked like, but author Sreya P.B. kindly offered to provide photographs of what her characters look like if asked. What else can I say? Go Sextet go!

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Welcome From The Prince of Death ...

... And he certainly has plans for some certain unfortunates inhabiting 1920’s New York. Grown-up, Evie has just relocated her brother after years of unwanted separation, but this doesn’t erase the feelings of rejection in his heart or the awkwardness the two siblings now feel towards each another. Then there is Christopher’s and Rosemary’s ungainly romance. As they twirl in dance to Mr. Sandman, Christopher in his heart dreams of another, a handsome young man who will bring social rejection and condemnation, if Christopher’s true sexual desires were ever discovered. Underneath it all lies ‘The Prince’, something dark and unforgiving waiting to turn the city’s joy into madness, their secretly hidden booze and wine ...into rivers of blood.

Whew! This was quite a read. I did find it fascinating though. I admire author Gurman for wiling to tackle a difficult time period liked Prohibition era and juggle so many characters as well. I think my favorite part was Chris and Rosemary dancing to Mr. Sandman. Even now as I’m writing this I have the lyrics to that earwormy song stuck in my head. Thanks a lot Gurman. Lol. Just kidding. This is a good story for when we’re tempted to romance the past a little too much.

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🎶 She looks like an Angel ...🎶

... But Angelina is the devil in disguise. Don’t be fooled by her gorgeous red hair and innocent blue eyes. For behind her beautiful exterior lies a merciless mind, just waiting for the kill. She is a woman that is capable of slowly torturing and bleeding her enemies to death, even as her eyes feign pity. Is there anyone willing to risk their life to tame this fire-like beauty?

Aiden might He is child-like in his awe of Angelina’s good looks and wealth and Angelina willing indulges his desire for a simple friendship. But there is more that meets the eye to Aiden’s silly and youthful behavior. Perhaps Aiden is simply acting. And if Angelina isn’t careful she may find herself tangled up in a romantic web that can’t easily be solved by murder.

I haven’t finished this story in it’s entirety yet, but it’s certainly not boring. I can’t wait to meet Xavier and see how he completes the romantic triangle. Angelina strikes me as a unique psychopath who seems to feel only genuine love towards her father ...and no one else. That’s what make so dangerous. I’m curious to see if any of these two men can break through to her and capture her heart. A good, romantic read.

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Breach in the Sky

The death of her brother creates a hole in Esha’s heart. Not human, her Elvin blood cries out for revenge. But the Keeper, a guide and leader of her people, offers up a different plan. Esha will spy on the humans, since she already has a natural curiosity about them. Her memory will be erased, but she will retain enough of her recollections to allow success in her mission. As Esha wakes up on a whole new world with pain in her arms and wrists and heavy chains around her body, she wonders if she made the correct decision after all. Especially after noting the appearance of a dark tornado in the sky, an incoming portal that promises to deliver evil and dread.

This was a very intense and intricate fantasy world filled with it’s own culture and vocabulary. But the story is interesting and well written. Author MBD knows what she’s doing. I recognized that immediately after the first paragraph. Warning, Into the Eluvian is not a simple fairytale, but is worth the commitment for fantasy lovers and those who loved Game of Thrones. (I admit I’m one of them.)

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The Hostest with the Mostest

When Alexis and her friends get bored with their repetitive yet opulent life styles, she asks herself, why not spend some time in a beautiful mansion off the coast of Ireland? There, they can love, live and laugh without any adults interfering with all the fun.

However there is something a bit wrong with Greenbane Manor. Something off kilter that Alexis can’t quite put her finger on. Worst of all, their host who goes by the name Taffy, refuses to leave the mansion despite the available ferry. But no, worries. They can still continue with their nice vacation. That is until Steven from their party turns up dead.

An enjoyable horror story that I think leans a little more towards the mystery genre then horror. In fact it reminds me a little of Agatha Christine’s great mystery novel ‘And Then there were None’. Here’s hoping the teens find a way off that island before each of them end up dead.

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All Hail the Bad Ass Queen!

Meet Selena Winston. She is a very special teen with witch and wolf and vampire powers. She is royalty as well, but is forced to hide her true nature for the protection of her people. She uses a blonde wig to help camouflage her wild rose beauty. Contact lenses cover the true color of her ocean blue eyes.

But try as she might, Selena can’t hide from the attention of Adrian. He is aware of her beauty and knows there is far more then meets the eye to this would be nerd. Can Selena continue to hide her identity from Adrian’s possible romantic interest? .And is he worthy of the attention from this saucy, exotic princess?

Selena is certainly a very unusual creature. I don’t think I ever read a novel about a woman who was a wolf and a witch and vampire. I like it. Such an exotic mixture of races. Lol! Cute story. At the time of this review there were only three chapters available, but here’s hoping for a hot and sexy love affair between Selena and Adrian.

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Hiding Away and Away and Away ...

Tony is never one for tolerating secrets. He loves exploring the unexplained and the inexplicable. Perhaps this is why he enjoys exploring the Hideaway forest despite it’s evil reputation. Tony knows that as long as he has his dog and his old fashioned walkie-talkie system, (not a lot of cell towers in the Hide Away forest) he will be alright.

Or will he be alright? Tony discovers the lifeless body of a child while traveling through the dark forest. The child has a missing left hand. (Was it chewed off, cut off? Sacrificed somehow for the little boy’s escape?) Tony isn’t sure exact what happened to the boy, but for the first time he feels the slightest tingling of fear. And when the child opens his eyes and regards Tony with a lackluster expression, Tony wonders if the Hide Away Forest was ready to punish him for his lack of caution.

Whoops, I hope I didn’t make this novel sound too scary. I love horror so I tend to lean more in that direction when reading and reviewing. The truth is Hideaway is correctly labeled as mystery and a thriller piece. The biggest mystery of all is Tony’s past. Apparently he was abandoned in this forest as a infant while his possible birth mother was being chased by some creature. That was my favorite part of the novel. It gave me chills. I can’t wait to find out what Tony’s past is all about. A fun story for the mystery lover in us all.

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A Rose can Grow in the Harshness of Hell

The Tsunami creates horrible damage to the Dalian country side. The drowned bodies stack up quickly and there is destruction and despair as far as the eye can see. But this does not destroy the spirit of Zachariah the leader and president of Dalia. He physically helps his people, with the removal of debris and offering personal words of encouragement, despite the disapproval of his officials. They believe that mixing with the common folk is not Zachariah’s place as their official leader.

It is during one of his rescue missions that he discovers a beautiful but broken woman named Isabelle. She is pregnant and despondent just having witnessed the death of her husband and prematurely born daughter. Yet Zachariah is touched by her inner strength. He realizes Isabelle will survive even if she is too blinded by the horror of her circumstances to understand this yet. Zachariah also realizes it’s too early to hope, but perhaps eventually Isabelle will be able to move beyond her past, and see the true love he has for her.

A unique story about an unusual love affair. Funny how the leader of a country can be more exotic then a werewolf, but there you have it. Maybe because there are so many werewolf love stories out there, but few involving real people. I enjoyed learning about Zachariah and Isabelle. (Especially Isabelle who has more depth and character then your average female love interest.) A good read if you want to remember how realistic romance works.

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Ain’t no Cure for the Summertime Blues.

Being the mayor’s daughter doesn’t include all the perks it should have. At least that’s how Summer sees it. She is bullied at school and sincerely believes herself to be fat and ugly. Now she is dragged to some ‘Graduation Ceremony’ by her handsome older brother. Summer dreads the whole ordeal. Men staring at her and fighting to get closer to her as if she were some sort of beauty. But Summer is convinced this isn’t the case or why would she be bullied at school? Is there hope for this Summertime Cinderella to realize the truth about herself?

I admit I didn’t get the humor of the story at first. All I could do was feel sorry for poor Summer, and I still do a little bit even though now I understand she is an unreliable narrator. (Her take on reality may not be reality if you get my meaning.) The premise was clever and that earns a ‘like’ from me. An interesting story about a girl who has far more to offer then what meets the eye.

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Partners in Love

Ellie is not necessarily looking for love in her young life. She has no time for friendships let alone romantic entanglements. Her goals are to get good grades and then graduate from school. But Bad Boy Ethan simply refuses to leave her alone. “He’s a stalker,” she tells herself. She knows his tainted reputation, all the detentions he receives. How can he hope to form a romance with her when they are such complete opposites. Ellie believes the entire idea is hopeless. But when she looks into Ethan’s eyes and sees the caring, sensitive souls beneath the tough boy exterior, she begins to wonder if there might be room in her life for love after all.

This was a sweet romance tale filled with lots of heart melting moments. Like when Ethan tenderly cares for his infant sister. (Those were my favorite scenes.) Ethan, interesting enough, starts out as the typical detention riddled bad boy but then morphs into a sensitive and caring individual. It was a fun transformation. As a matter of fact I’m not sure where the ‘Arson’ is from the title. I haven’t encountered any fires yet, other then the fiery love the two leads have for each other. Though it’s possible this might be coming up in future chapters. This was an enjoyable about a sweet romance. It’s sure to put a smile on your face.

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In Love with the Mafia

Sienna doesn’t like to be reminded of her Mafia family background. She doesn’t want people to fear her or treat her special just because her father could order their death with just a snap of his fingers. But unfortunately Xander doesn’t seem to have that problem. He is the owner of the coffee shop that Sienna works at and feels no shame about flirting with her even in front of all the customers. Should she tell daddy about her little problem and have this annoying and arrogant man ceremonially removed? Or was there something magnetizing behind his deep blue eyes and easy dimpled smile. Something that Sienna can’t resist.

This was an interesting love story with a fun mafia side story. I liked the characters, Sienna in particular. Xander is apparently connected with the mafia, but I’m not sure how. (Most likely because I ran out of time after the fifth chapter. I’ll have to read more to find out.) It’ll be fun to see how both Sienna and Xander will react when they realize their in love.

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🎶 Falling in Love Again ...🎶

Anne has survived a difficult marriage. Married to an abusive man who liked to communicate his displeasure with his fists, she somehow managed to find the daily strength to start each day anew. Yet her soul remains torn down, especially after the fate of her infant son. “You need therapy” her older sister JoAnne advises. But Anne resists this idea at first. Therapy in her opinion is for the weak. Eventually she does succumb and meets Andrew the first authoritative male to treat her with kindness and understanding. Can Andrew show Anne the inner strength that lies within herself without loosing his heart to Anne?

Overall this was an encouraging story. I hope I didn’t make it sound too depressing. It’s easy to identify with Anne who doesn’t put on airs but has an uncanny knack for seeing the truth that can make others including Andrew her therapist feel uncomfortable. Truly an enjoyable character. There might have been a few grammar errors here and there. But they are easily fixed. A good novel for those looking for reasons to hope.

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The Merman Question ...

Helen doesn’t feel her life is necessarily empty. She is an attractive woman who prides herself on her education, being physically fit and her straight forward manner. Yet buried deep in her heart there is something that yearns for the impractical, even a bit of magic. And so when she meets Craig a merman who defies reality with his mystical presence, Helen can hardly contain her joy. Yet will her curiosity blind her to the dangers that Craig is under as well as the dangers to herself?

For starters this novel was stunningly well-written. I just loved what author Cat does with just the opening paragraph. “The doors opened like magic. Helen knew they were automatic ... but a very small, very excited, part of her liked to believe her very presence made the doors acquiesce to her will.” Look at how much those few sentences tells us about Helen. That she yearns for magic and power (despite later feeling intimidated by the secretary.) Also I encountered no Mary Sues here (an abnormally perfect character) Everyone including the merman have realistic human flaws. At the time of this review there were only four chapters. It would be a shame to quit on such a beautiful, skillfully written story.

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Don’t Mess With Joel ...

There is something wrong with Michael’s household. A feeling of unease that can’t be explained away by anything rational. His mother is obsessed with Michael’s unborn brother Joel, an infant who died through a miscarriage. Michael doesn’t believe in ghosts but as he feels his own sanity slipping helplessly away he begins to wonder who is this ‘Joel’ and is it possible for a dead infant’s spirit to want revenge.

A delicate and intricate story. I admit I might have gotten a little lost a few times (but I managed to find myself in the end, thank you. Ha ha) And this is true horror so I can’t help but appreciate the story. My favorite part was the smashing walls that were covered in blood and slime ...ewww. I loved that. But you don’t want to be eating while reading this story. I do agree with having a warm blanket. Especially if you make the poor decision to read this story at night. Sweet Dreams. Lol.

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Hope For the Match Maker!

Dreams die almost everyday for the villagers of a small, neglected town in Scotland. But not for Aspen. Cold, hungry and told he is worthless by his own father, he is forced out of his home at the tender age of eight and told to fend for himself. Yet hope springs within him despite his heartless situation. He meets a man with funny looking ears who gives him bread to eat. Later the man returns and offers an interesting choice for Aspen. He can have a full belly, warmth and comfort.All he has to do is accept death for his life on earth.

I’m sorry if I made the story sound more gruesome then it really is. The truth is this is a story about hope. Aspen grows up to be a handsome, young man who grooms fantastical creatures for a living. To say more would give away too much of the plot. (I know I already ruined the surprise that Aspen survives.) I particularly enjoyed reading about the magical beasts in this story. In fact some of it reminded me of the animals in C.L. Brieley’s Creature Seers. (Especially the Dairmunds. Maybe C.L. will include those in her Creature Seer’s Guidebook one day. Lol!) At any rate this is an Ienchanting story that reminds us why we must continue to hope even in the most darkest of circumstances.

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Who Doesn’t Love Diamonds?

Diamond is used to receiving admiring glances from both boys and men. Her beauty is a classic with long dark, brown hair and warm, mocha eyes. But that doesn’t mean she is obligated to every male who flirts with her including bad boy Travis. He thinks he can bully her with his unyielding presence and hard ways. But beauty isn’t the only reason Diamond is named ‘Diamond’. She too can be hard and knows how to survive under pressure. And if Travis isn’t careful he will loose more then his head from this sultry beauty with the powerful, cutting touch. He may just loose his heart.

A classic love story. You know that Travis and Diamond are destined for each other the moment he rudely shoved her aside. I liked the name of Diamond for the protagonist. It’s an unusual name and suggests she posses a stunning beauty and a hard nature. There were some grammar issues, but we all learn through practice as I have done with my own writing. This is a good read when you’re in the mood for a romance.

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Looky Here, Loki

Loki is no fool. Abandoned on earth and forced to play dead in order to appease his enemies, he waits for the proper time when he can take vengeance on all. Vengeance on his father Odin who denies him his proper place on the throne. Vengeance on his brother Thor for pretending to be so superior, and most of all vengeance on those meddling Avengers who have destroyed all of his hopes and dreams. They will know the price of angering a god who is also a prince.

In the meantime he is weak, helpless and about to be destroyed by the ones he desires to destroy. Right before he is to be crushed to death from Ingrating Hulk Monster he is rescued by a beautiful Sorceress. She causes all of his enemies to fall asleep. But who is this enchanting rescuer? What does she want? Loki isn’t sure. However he believes that with his pale good looks, dark hair and penetrating green eyes he will eventually seduce his new babysitter and on her broken body (as well as her broken heart) once again retrieve the greatness that is destined to be his.

A fun story. I’m sorry the author stopped at three chapters. I’m dying to read more. Personally, I’m a sucker for super heroes and super villains novels though I understand it’s not a popular genre outside of movies and comic books. In fact one of these days I plan to write a super villain story myself. In the meantime I’m just going to enjoy reading these three chapters over and over again. Here’s hoping Valor Heart will return to write more.

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A Cryptic Catalytic ...


What is the ultimate price for survival? Is it worth living underground among dirt and darkness, never to see sunlight again? How about enduring extreme poverty as the Mundane are forced to live, privilege only for those who belong to the Research-Defense Zone?

Jaxon wants to do more then merely survive. He dreams of life above ground with sunlight and the endless blue of the sky. However to succeed in his dream could bring him death as well as deliver danger to all who live in the Sprawl. Can Jaxon ignore his desire for the outside world or will the lure of true freedom prove irresistible?

An interesting tale. Reminded me a bit of Orwell’s 1984. It has that same feeling of darkness and the uncertainty of living under the thumb of an overwhelming government. Give this novel a try when you’re in the mood for intrigue and a spy like adventure.

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Don’t Mess with Aviry

Her slender build disguises the danger, along with her good looks and mix matched eyes. But life has taught her to be merciless, and once she raises a gloved hand, her opponent is almost certain to fall down bloody and defeated. But what happens when Aviry is sold against her will to a new manager who is as merciless and cunning as herself. Will she still remain champion during her battles in the forest? And what does it mean to fail under this evil new management.

This was a well written, action intense novel. Aviry is certainly one of a kind. I never met an anti-hero quite like her. Also, there’s some nice character development here. We learn about the experiences that has shaped Avery’s fierce personality. This novel reminded me a little of a The Hunger Games and yes that’s a compliment. I can understand why it’s so popular. Be sure to give Rejection Denied a try.

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Andrew’s Perilous Adventures

Andrew only wants a quiet life where he can be left alone to pursue his studies and perhaps become the best trooper of all time. But that was never going to happen as long as his fellow classmates Butch and Shane are there to harass him. One day the two bullies request the unthinkable. Andrew is to accompany them on a camping trip. To say ‘no’ was a guarantee that Andrew would continue the rest of his life with of a mouth full of broken teeth. But what are the bullies truly after? Was this some sort of trick to humiliate or abandon Andrew in the middle of the thick woods? Or was there something truly dangerous lurking in the forest and all of them were in over their heads? Andrew isn’t sure. But he does begin to suspect that this will turn out to be one adventure he could do without.

I surprisingly liked this. I only say surprise because normally this isn’t the type of story I enjoy reading. I tend to like horror and evil fairy tales. But the characters were engaging and their personalities distinct and the story really grew on me. I began to care for young Andrew. Maybe because I know what it’s like to be bullied myself. At any rate this was a fun read, and I think I’m going to have finish it. Which is a pain because I’m reading a lot of other books, not to mention working on my own writing. My time is so very limited. Damn you Sword for your engaging story!!! (Just kidding, just kidding)

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Legend of the Found!

What drives Astrid, a powerful and gorgeous witch to search the dangerous woods? Surely she is aware of the forest’s notorious reputation. Anyone who enters, will never return, their ultimate fate left unknown. But this doesn’t frighten Astrid. She believes her magical powers are a match for the forest, even if she has no control over her ‘trance’ state. The trance causes Astrid to become a demon. Her powers ultimately to be used on the whims of a mysterious conductor, whether for good or evil.

This was a good fantasy and well-written. I enjoyed the narrator’s voice which was excellent at invoking an enchanting but dangerous world where you are as likely to meet a demon as easily as a fairy. I only have one minor complaint. The author for some reason prefers passive language. The passive voice is when the subject of a sentence receives an action instead of giving it. There’s nothing wrong with using an occasional passive voice. (I used it myself when describing the plot.) But I find a lot of it can be a little distracting. At any rate this was a fun read with some truly imaginative characters you won’t meet anywhere else.

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Go on, Girl

Veronica Reeves isn’t sure what started her down the slippery slope of addictions. Sure, she’s an adopted child, but her adoptive family is very loving towards her (if perhaps a little lax on supervision.) Then there’s her best friend Nicole. Ronnie sees how Nicole falls apart over the betrayal of a former boyfriend. “That will never be me!” she assures herself. Yet there is something deep within her that remains unsatisfied. She can cover up that need now with alcohol and sex. But Ronnie knows that eventually the consequences actions will catch up with her. And she wonders what will happen if there is no one there to rescue her when she eventually falls.

An interesting story about the seductive powers of anti-authoritative reasoning. Veronica is charming and a little naive in the way she assumes she can control all actions that occur to her in life. You don’t want to see her life choices destroy her. So far I’m on chapter five and things haven’t gotten to bad for her yet. I’m assuming the potential love interest Derek will be there to support Ronnie when she’s ready to admit she needs it. An interesting read.

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An Agency of Evil

How does one cope surviving an evil government who’s only concern is the survival and perpetual growth of itself? Agent 411 doesn’t ask herself these questions but only operates as a protector for the agency. She knows how to stop potential threats through her superior eye sight and physical prowess. If her actions are moral or not is beyond her interests.

Then there is Sarah. As a journalist she understands the risks of asking questions. But how can she ignore the human right violations of the Agency? She gives a powerful speech warning her fellow media specialists about the dangers of their government as well as the suspicious death of her good friend Tristan. When her speech is over, Sarah immediately catches the interest of a strange man. He introduces himself to her as ‘Hugo’. But the question still remains. Is Hugo friend or foe?

There is a lot going on in this novel. A whole history of intrigue and government spies and betrayals. Anastasia Thomas has a good bit of skill as a writer. Her greatest strengths is her creation of such a unique and pressured government along with her ability to add human touches to her characters to make them personable. I won’t say this book is a casual read, because it isn’t. There’s a dedication needed to enjoy it properly. But you will be rewarded with an interesting world full memorable and vulnerable characters.

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🎶 Yo ho ho, A Lightning Seeker’s Life for Me🎶

Vale has always known she was destined to travel the skies. More then that, she desires to be a lightning seeker, a dangerous yet thrilling job of chasing down storms and harnessing the lightning’s dangerous power. She easily runs away from home without thinking about the consequences of her actions and after stowing away on an airship, Captain Mortem reluctantly allows her to stay if she can prove her worth by out-predicting the airships’ GPS machine. ‘No problem’ Vale privately assures herself.

Except while entering the heart of the storm, Vale is accidentally thrown overboard, a mere rope the only thing saving her from plunging to the depths below. As she dangles helplessly from the rope with her torn and bleeding arm, Vale wonders for the first time if Lightning Seeking is better lived out as a dream instead of reality.

I hope I didn’t give away too much of the plot right there but ...Wow! This was wonderfully and skillfully written. I’m not sure if the author Frenzy Chaos is male or female but he/she definitely knows what they’re doing in this highly specialized world. I liked the sky/sea comparison and also the feeling that a fantastical adventure was just around the corner. (I feel the same excitement while watching most of Spielberg’s films.) I don’t give the five star salute terribly often (perfect five stars all along the board) but Lightning Seeker is another work that certainly deserves it.

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I Know Why the Dying Flower Blooms ...

Amelia has only wanted peace and joy in her life. Yet all of her dreams are coming apart before her very eyes. Her best friend and secret crush Liam, announces his engagement to another girl, completely oblivious to Lia’s romantic interest in him. Then there is her parents’ public announcement that Lia is an adopted child and not their birth daughter at all. (Though this is a secret Lia claims to have known all along.) Worst of all is her diagnosis of brain cancer, a debilitating disease that can destroy both speech and rob Lia of all her mental facilities, thereby reducing her to a state of complete helpless. Can Amelia find reasons to bloom when surrounded by so much darkness?

Whew! A lot is going on in this story. I admire Kit Francisco’s plot building skills as well as her well-developed character Amelia. She never quite gives up hope despite her cruel circumstances. There were a few grammar errors here and there, but not enough to destroy the flow of the story. A good book to read when you need to be reminded about hope.

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Scared for Life

The child (for he has no name) each day endures extreme physical abuse. His mother is also abused. She is beaten for no explained reason. However the child has the ability to heal hurts when he touching a physical wound. Daily he does his best to heal his mother, though he can never repair the wounds in her broken heart.

Hmmm. Not sure how I feel about this story. Child abuse is such a difficult subject to write about and/or handle correctly. You don’t want to maximize a child’s pain for pure entertainment reasons. But you also don’t want to manipulate the reader with an instant demand for sympathy without illustrating the proper reasons for it. I will say this. I do have admiration for Astrid69 for attempting to write about such a serious topic. I’m not sure if I would ever attempt to write about child abuse myself.

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Killing Satine ...

No assassin in Britain is more feared then Madame Rouge. Her arsenal of weapons are legendary as well as her sadistic and efficient killing styles. She knows how to beguile you with her good looks and innocent smile even as she slits your throat with malicious good cheer. When Rouge is offered a tremendous amount of money for the murder of the notorious mob boss Sergio Amiro, Lady Rouge decides this might be the one death she can finally retire on.

But despite her careful planning and beguiling charms Amiro still manages to somehow wrap his hand around Rouge’s throat. I am nobody’s fool! He warns. And as he tightens the pressure Rouge’s fragile neck she promises herself she will make him suffer doubly for this indignity. No one got the better of her. Even if his good looks made it seem like he was carved by angels.

I love the plot and the characters. Especially Lady Rouge who reminded me a little of Villanelle from Killing Eve (one of my favorite tv shows.) I also liked the sexual attraction between Rouge and Amiro though I hope that doesn’t interfere with Rogue doing her job. (At the time of this review there were only three chapters written.) A fun novel for when you’re in the mood for something a bit naughty.

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Revenge is Back and Revenge is Pissed

The night is cold and full of terrors. Two young men walk home from a drunken party. One of them senses the danger in the night air and wants to return to safety, while the other blindly insists that there is nothing wrong. At the end of their walk, one of them starts jabbering about night terrors while the other one is simply dead. Nothing is explained. Meanwhile the police are stumped as to who the killer is and why he or she prefers to perform during the night.

This was more of a poem then an actual story. There’s nothing wrong with that approach either. Nothing can go straight for the jugular like a frightening poem. I liked the inexplicable ness here. I also enjoyed how Silver the author slowly builds dread in this piece; This intense fear of the unknown. Can’t wait to read more from her.

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Oh What a Year ...1969

Welcome to Andal Falls University. A college that attracts quite a unique set of people. We have the bold, confident Nadia. It’s her first day living at a dorm away from her parents, but she is determined not to be intimidated by the handsome ‘hardcore jock’ Finn. Next is her beautiful, roommate Sophia. Sophia can turn the head of any man with her sultry, good looks but it is Marie that Nadia must look out for the most. Marie is jealous at the budding romance growing between Nadia and Finn. With so much drama going on, can these four ever get along? Even if a sinister magic creeps into this environment and puts the entire world at stake?

I liked how well drawn these characters were. Author Peyton Davis does a good job at making each of these students four distinct individuals. I admit at times it was a little difficult to read because the author also has an unconventional way of linking all of the dialogue together, instead of making a paragraph for each new quote. Other then that though I saw no major problems with this novel. An interesting read about the power of friendship in the face of those who would destroy it.

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The Last Sorceress and Emma’s First Hope

Emma, an orphaned nine year old, dreams of love and acceptance from a would be family. Instead she is bullied at her orphanage and labeled ‘Freak’ by the other children. Her only friends are the characters she finds in books. Emma especially enjoys consoling herself in the tales of King Arthur.

But then the unthinkable occurs when she is adopted by a female couple. Surely a ‘freak’ does not deserve such good fortune, Emma assures herself. Especially since Sam and Meghan, her new parents, also share a love for reading. When Emma discovers a rather unusual book in her new home, a book that is leather bound and tantalizing labeled Hero’s Journey in silver script, she begins to sense that her good fortune maybe has just begun. As well as challenges that could destroy her if she is not properly prepared.

As usual, author Sofi Corsi doesn’t disappoint with her excellent writing skills. She labels this novel as a children’s story. If so, then it is as much of a children’s story as the Harry Potter books or C. S. Lewis Narnia tales. In other words there are significant things here for an adult to enjoy too as well. I certainly enjoyed it. Sofi Corsi is another one of those authors I believe whose works we may one day see in a book store. At any rate this is a wonderfully inspiring tale about daring to hope when the odds are against you.

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Batch’s of Bitch’s


Young Archie has a hell of a problem. Not only does he have to contend with a horrible family life at home (a father and stepmother who takes great pleasure in physically beating him on an almost nightly basis.) But he also has to deal with the newest school jock who also happens to be a bully. Never mind the fact that the jock has such a magnetizing effect on his fellow students around him. Or the fact that he has such a terrific build and a gorgeous face. As Archie watches other boys stare painfully hard at the jock and bow in his presence, he wonders what is the jock’s secret ...and why does he himself feel so powerfully attracted to him.

There’s lots of potential here. No doubt about it. Archie is certainly a well-developed character. Kizzy the author intelligently reveals Archie’s abusive family background which goes far in explaining why he has such a no nonsense, tough guy demeanor. I kind of wanted a name for Archie’s antagonist and most likely future love interest. But I’m sure that will be revealed in future chapters. This novel was an interesting character study in what can potentially makes us a bully or a victim.

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🎶 Big Werewolves Don’t Cry ...🎶



...At least Jesse doesn’t cry no matter how many hearts he chooses to break. With his teen, blonde, good looks, Jesse is used to picking whomever he wants among the beautiful girls. But lately he has become bored with his easy conquests. What would it be like to have sex with a male? he wonders. Would he able to destroy their hearts just as he has done to so many others?

Gray on the other hand, has always harbored a secret crush on Jesse. When Jesse mentions his casual interest in boys, Gray realizes his chance has finally arrived to announce his love to his best friend. But unfortunately Gray realizes that he is too late or too early. He watches Jesse casually flirt with another boy named Kai. Gray rages feeling the wolf trying to from emerge inside of him. How can Gray remain friends with Jesse after this betrayal? And will he be able to control the beast that demands both blood and vengeance?

Interesting story. While I’ve read many novels about bisexual and homosexual vampires, this is the first time I’ve encountered a homosexual werewolf. (Though technically Gray is asexual.) I also enjoyed reading about Gray’s painful transformation into a werewolf even as he desperately tries to control himself. Personally, I’d label this under erotica rather then romance or horror genres. I think it fits there better. At any rate this was a fun read about the dangers of romance running amuck.

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Through Thick and the Thin

Don’t tell Kevah Pierce that she’s not sexy. She prides herself in her good looks, her shapely lips and ample, sensual body. She also enjoys the greedy looks men give her underneath the angry stares of their wives and girlfriends. But Kevah has promised herself no more romantic relationships (though sex is an entirely different matter altogether.) She has made too many mistakes in the game of love. Kevah doesn’t look forward to making any more of them.

But that was before she met gorgeous weatherman Trevor Munro. As she observes his muscular frame and swoons to his velvety voice, it’s all Kevah can do to prevent him from becoming her mistake number six.

Lol. This was definitely erotica. For starters I enjoyed the cover of the novel with the heavy set, sexy black woman. It was also nice to read about a confident, dark skinned woman who takes pardonable pride in her body, though I hope Kevah’s self-esteem doesn’t depend on how many guys she can sleep with. The only thing that bothered me a bit was the opening scene of a twelve year child imagining fellating a grown man. That age just didn’t feel appropriate to me, and I’m hoping the author maybe willing to up Kevah’s age to at least a teenager for that scene. But other then that this was a fine read about a beautiful, confident woman who knows how to draw positive attention to herself.

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🎶Pick Yourself Up ...and Start All Over Again🎶

Alison Lewis hasn’t enjoyed an easy childhood. Given away like a sack of dirty laundry to a distant family she hardly knows, Alison promises herself that she will make something of her new life. But that can be difficult while living with the beautiful yet irresponsible Sosa, and all of the drama she sometimes creates.

It is at a bar during one of Sosa’s ‘dramatic’ moments that Alison is forced into confronting her boss, Mr. Cordina. Strange, she hasn’t really noticed his muscular build before or his disarming smile. Everyone knows it’s inappropriate to have a romantic relationship with your boss. But Allison can’t help but wonder if starting over again may include a chance at a wonderful new romantic relationship.

What amazes me in particular about author Alias Tummas is that she can write in the present tense without slipping into the past tense, even once. That’s quite a talent. I’m not sure I could accomplish it. It just demonstrates her skills she has as a writer. I also enjoyed the depth she gives her characters. Alison is not the typical romance heroine, but a true individual equipped with strengths and faults. An enjoyable read about unique individuals.

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A Bit on the Side and A Lot in Betwen ...

Ujunwa does her best to appear content in her marriage. She knows that peace can only occur as long as her husband Somadina is happy. Unfortunately Somadina has many rules in his household and one of his most important laws is that Ujunwa is never to give birth to a child. However Unjunwa desperately wants a baby. As she does her best to hide her growing pregnancy with a feigned appetite she watches Somadina becoming suspicious. Will Ujunwa be able to continue to fool her husband? And can she bear the punishment that will swiftly follow if her husband ever finds out?

Wow. I’m not sure if my one paragraph description does the story justice, but this was very, well written. Yes there were some grammatical errors, but grammatical errors can always be fixed. A narrative voice however is something else altogether. A narrative voice is skill that can’t be taught. Either a writter has a voice or she or he doesn’t and Toniyene has an excellent one If I say so myself. I’m a little jealous actually. Lol! Anyway, I greatly enjoyed this story and I’m looking forward to reading more work from this author.

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Maya’s Continuous Hope

Maya does her best to protect her younger sister Eva. As the older sister, she understands the unique dangers that come from belonging to a not terribly strong wolf clan. So why is Eva warning her, “I dreamed about a man who pretended to be your friend, but really wasn’t.” Maya scoffs at the idea. Besides Eva’s dreams don’t always comes true.

But then Eva goes missing and Maya finds herself running through the woods chased by several evil men. All Hope seems to be lost until she is rescued by a handsome, wolf stranger. As she stares into his sparkling blue eyes and roguish, black hair, Maya believes she has found the wolf of her dreams. The only question is, was he from the yearnings of her heart ...or Eva’s terrifying nightmares?

What’s interesting to me is that the author claims not to be a native English speaker. She could have fooled me. Master Rie, unlike other non-native writers on Inkitt has a very good command of the English language. I dare say she seems to understand American and English culture as well. I also enjoyed the sense of foreboding in this novel. I like stories with evil prophecies. (The horror lover in me, I guess.) I wonder if the handsome stranger is both Maya’s love interest and Eva’s nightmare man. Now that would make an interesting story. The only way to find out is to read more.

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The Tale of Jule-sel and Gretel ...

In a deep corner of the world, hidden from all those who are in a position to help, two twin children are forced to endure unthinkable physical and emotional abuse. The monster calls himself ‘Dad’ though he’s not their real father. His favorite weapon of choice is a clothes iron which he uses to burn poor Jules mercilessly. Completely helpless and alone, all Jules and his twin sister Tay can do is dream of escape.

A cheery, uplifting story that promises to brighten your day. Ha-ha. No, sorry for the sarcasm. In actuality this is a grim story that I wouldn’t recommend for the faint hearted. Still, if you have the stomach for it (And I admit I do. Maybe because I love horror) this could be an interesting study on the psychological changes that comes from abuse. This novel is an interesting, modern day version of Hansel and Gretel. But again not for sensitive readers.

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Creature See-ers, Doers and Believers ...

It’s not easy being a high schooler in a small midwestern town. Every day Ryder tries his best to keep his mind on his studies and continue with his progress as an upright, proper student. But that’s difficult to do when his imagination gets away from him. One day he sees the unbelievable; a sinister woman in a floppy, white hat cackling to no one in particular. “It must be the ADHD medicine,” Ryder tells himself remembering what happens when he is late with his medication. But medication alone can’t explain why his younger brother also shares the hallucinations. Nor can it reveal the reason behind the charming, mystical store where magic comes shockingly to life and the fantastical is real.

This was an enjoyable fantasy to read. It reminded me a little of the works of C.S. Lewis. I adore the notion of magic hiding just beneath the ordinary, ready to surprise (and sometimes even terrify) those who are brave enough to see it. A heart warming tale that encourages it’s readers to see the magic too.

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Shadow Love that’s Inside Out

All Riley really wants in life is romantic love. She dreams about it every night and day, much to her father’s chagrin. But with a sudden move to a new country and a different culture, instant love hardly seems likely. Or is it? “Beware of shadow love ...” her former best friend warns her. But surely she couldn’t mean the harmless looking Riya. She is a pretty girl with goth clothing and thick, black hair yet there lies a vulnerability underneath. Riley is helplessly drawn to her. As she stares into Riya’s unsettling, hazel eyes, Riley realizes that she just may have found the girl of her dreams ...and possibly her nightmares.

A love story with unusual characters. The beginning in particularly reminded me of Pixar’s ‘Inside and Out’ which also stars a character named Riley who is forced into a sudden move and a new school. The difference is that this Riley is a full-fledged teenager with more complex motivations. Author Goth Jay has a way with dialogue that I admire and am a little jealous of to be perfectly frank. She knows how to make it clear who is talking without the use of distracting dialogue tags. I’m still working at the skill. Lol. Anyway this a vampiric romance story that still manages to be about ordinary love.

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Won’t You Be my Alpha?

Carter Maxwell has had it rough in life. After witnessing the death of both her parents, her wolf captors have turned her into a slave. Raped and beaten for the slightest sign of insubordination, she has learned that the best way for survival is to keep her mouth shut. Carter privately vows to herself never to speak again.

But that was before she met handsome Alpha Caine. He can’t stand to see any woman abused and when he observes Carter’s wild rose beauty underneath all the dirt and neglect he decides he wants her as his mate. But will he be successful in stealing her away from the cruel Alpha Arden? And will Carter learn to find her voice again ...along with her bite?

I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read so far in this novel. It’s nicely written. I admit that Carter may not be the strongest female character out there. But it’s possible her character arc will include her learning to stand up for herself and realizing she has worth outside of a male’s approval. Only future chapters will tell and I plan to read more. This is good, interesting read from author Hailey Vanisko

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She’s All That ...and a Bag of Chips!

Beautiful Amber Lynn hardly knows what to do with all the many blessings she has received in life. Sexy, intelligent and also the daughter of two major celebrities, Amber’s very presence tends to encourage admiring looks from her male classmates and those of envy from the girls. It takes a lot for Dylan Silver to approach her but he does and is pleased to see a look of interest from her eyes in return. But wait ...what is that large purple bruise Dylan notices as she turns away. Was there something terrible in her past? And dare he allow his attraction to Amber drag him into an unknown danger that Dylan is completely unaware of?

This was another very well written story, I’m pleased to have discovered on Inkitt. Kali Lynn is a talented writer and certainly knows what she’s doing with her well crafted characters. This was one of the few times I wasn’t distracted from past/present tense issues, Bad English, etc. My only very minor complaint is with the name ‘Dean Martin’. For those of us of a certain age it instantly brings up a well known celebrity from the past. Of course that might not be a problem at all with today’s young adults. (To be young again. Sigh) At any rate this was a very provocative novel that promises to deliver in all the right ways.

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A Bright Hope Shining in the Dark

Stunningly beautiful Ava Maxwell ponders about her cruel fate as she realizes that so much of her life is quite literally left in the dark. Born to become the greatest pianist in the world, her sight is robbed from her at a tender young age in a dreadful car accident. Now she is dependent on others to care for her needs. Will Ava learn that her blindness need not rob her of the fiery woman she still is inside?

Haven’t quite gotten to the plot yet but I know it’s coming. I’m guessing she will meet a man that will give her some self-esteem. My only minor complaint is that I’m not quite sure if Ava was a child or an adult at the time of her accident. At any rate this is a novel that intends to encourage inspiration despite some of the disadvantages that can occur in life.

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Red was the Color of My True Love’s Eyes ...

...And also of death and darkness. At least that was how Alba interpreted it as she watches her clan and family members mercilessly slaughtered one by one. Who these enemies are Wolf or human hardly matters. All she can do is attempt to escape as she barrels through one human form and slashes at another. It isn’t until she is confronted by a man who attempts to tear her hair from her head that she feels an unwelcome change in her physical body. As she feels her claws emerge painfully from her skin and a new lust for blood, Alba decides to embrace her wolf persona as she realizes that it is her buried wolf that may be the only key to survival.

Whew! This novel starts off very intensely and I admire author Yrsa for that. I guess it’s the horror lover in me. I also appreciated how a love story wasn’t immediately introduced, though there maybe one coming. Instead Yrsa skillfully guides our attention on Alba by putting her in such immediate danger. We are concerned about her fate and her future. Quite an interesting novel. But be warned. This is not your average werewolf story.

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Forever, My Evermore

All sixteen year old Julia Greyson ever wanted was the freedom to be herself. She works at a movie theater but she dreams of becoming a writer even though she knows her father wouldn’t approve. “You just need love” her best friend Shelly informs her. But Julia scoffs at this idea. Love, she decides is not the answer to everything. It is patience and understanding that is far likelier to bring her the success she craves.

However far away in Romania a man with a merciless hunger for blood awakens from his death. Is he destined to meet Julia? Perhaps he will offer Julia a chance of freedom ...at a terrible, terrible price.

Wow, this is a well written story with a strong narrative voice. (In other words there is a true and consistent personality in Julia. In fact I’m curious about what this particular author can do with a third person narrative.) I’m only on the second chapter so far but I definitely plan to continue. I read on Jacky’s wall that she wishes to be a professionally paid author some day. I think this is a strong possibility in a few years time.

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I Love the Night Because That’s the Only Place I Get My Freedom

What happens when an escape from an evil, overbearing world becomes an absolute necessIty for survival? That is something Alice from the Dragon Empire knows about. Pregnant with an ungodly child who maybe dangerous to all humanity, Alice promises Rykal that she will do her best to raise their son Kairen on earth. Kairen does succeed into growing up as a handsome young man. But there is always the battle of good and evil within his heart ...the temptation to do wrong. After Kairen allows himself to become a winged creature in order to save a trapped family, he realizes he doesn’t want to become fully human again. Who will he ultimately side with? The weak but good willed humans or the evil of the Dragon Empire?

Lot’s of potential here. You can feel Author Blaq’s passion in the novel for all of her characters. The world she builds is very unique too and unlike anything I ever read before. I did see a few phrases that demonstrated a misunderstanding of the English language. But this didn’t happen too often and is a problem that can ultimately be fixed. Overall a very unique novel about a fantastical world.

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I’m Madly in Hate with You!

If there’s anyone in this world that Tobias Harris truly detests then it’s Alexander, captain of the swim meet. Never mind Alexander’s gorgeous, tanned body and that he carries about him the sexuality of a jungle cat. Alexander has made it quite clear that he hates him and the only way Tobias knows to defend himself is to return the favor. Tobias will conquer him. If not with a swim challenge ...then most certainly in bed.

The ‘I hate you, I hate you, whoops it’s love’ is a bit cliche. But it also happens to be the opener of some of the best romance stories in the world. (There are even some tv shows that depend on the ‘I hate you’ romance exclusively) I’m only on chapter four now and they haven’t quite hooked up yet, but I cant wait to see what it’ll be like when these two guys finally get it on.

I love the author’s name by the way, Dominant Grey. It reminds me of Dorian Gray from The Picture of Dorian Gray. (One of my favorite Victorian novels.) At any rate this is a good, solid read when you’re in the mood for a male romance story.

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Goodbye Panties ...

Beautiful Aurora very much wants to be the good girl. It was a role her abusive father had assigned to her, so naturally she finds herself dating an equally abusive man. But what if deep down she desires her freedom ...and a bit of naughtiness too. That’s what Vincenzo promises her. When she gazes on his muscular build and sinister good looks Aurora’s purple eyes light up with lust. She imagines her tongue tracing the many tattoos on his perfect body. Vincenzo is more then willing to accommodate her. But here too lies danger. For Vincenzo is quick to anger and his favorite manipulative tool is violence. As Aurora does her best to satisfy Vincenzo in all the ways she possibly can, the unthinkable occurs to her. Could her newest sex partner have had anything to do with her mother’s death?

A hot sexy story. Author Crystal Love does not hold back on sharing with us the juicy details of Aurora’s and Vincent’s physical relationship. The characters are interesting too, my favorite being Vincenzo who practically has no-good stamped across his forehead. Of course this may be the very thing Aurora likes about him,the poor foolish woman. Let’s hope she doesn’t pay the ultimate price for her sexual curiosity.

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The Void of Madness!

All Jonathan wants to do does is lead an normal life with his somewhat ordinary family. He has a snotty older sister and a rather distant mother and father. He has dreams of dating the pretty teenaged girl Jenny, if his best friend Levi doesn’t accidentally ruin it for him with his over-the-top antics. Overall Jonathan is satisfied with life but then comes the fateful car accident and nothing is the same for Jonathan ever again. He wakens and yet is tormented by nightmares; dreams that present themselves as reality but is only a curtain hiding infinite horrors underneath. As Jonathan struggles to understand his new existence, he slowly looses his grip on reality. What is real and what is imagined? Will Jonathan ever be able to return to what he perceived as ‘normal’ ever again?

I enjoyed this story. It reminded me a little of the anime ‘The Blue Line’. Especially when things really go off the rockers in Jonathan’s nightmares. I also liked some of the themes Jake H explores in his novel; the accelerated descent into horror, the family that Jonathan initially took for granted now becoming monstrous versions of themselves. (He didn’t realize how good he had it before. Lol!) I’m looking forward to reading more of Jake H’s works. This was a fun dissection of the world of chaos.

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Flaming Love Burns On ...

What can you do when the one you love is no longer within reach? For that is what happened to Veda with his gorgeous best friend Ava. He remembers the look of her dark hair against her tanned skin, the way she wrinkled her nose when she smiled. How she wasn’t repulsed by spiders the way many girls were. Most of all, he remembers the touch of her hand when he led her through the school hall ways. How could she forget him so completely after her new found fame and fortune? His other friend Jimmy is rather relieved by Ava’s absence seeing her as a bit of a third wheel in their friendship. But as Veda stares into the night sky with it’s countless of stars, he knows he will one day see Ava again ...and his burning kiss will be enough to cause her to remember what they once shared together.

I for one am very curious as to what happened to put Ava far from V’s reach. Did she become a rock star? A Hollywood actress? There was only four chapters at the time of this review but I hope Black Heart the author makes this information available soon in the upcoming chapters. Black Heart is also quite fond of poetry and cleverly weaves some of her/his works through out the story. A pleasant read especially if you enjoy poetic language.

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Blockbuster Curse

It is the time of the video store chains where the idea of downloading a video was as remote of the idea of watching that same video on a CD. While working at the Video Shack, three male friends lazily discuss their interest in magic. (Dan casually mentions that he has the ability to levitate himself off the floor.) But their biggest interest of all is in movies especially the film-that-will-not-be-watched. Cursed, this movie holds an unholy fascination for the three boys.

Three girls enter the store. Young and attractive they too express interest in the nameless film. Will the boys be able to resist their charms, or will all of them destroy themselves by watching a film that promises the ultimate death to all who view it?

I loved the time period of this piece and the brown-note feel. (A brown-note is a sound that is unbearable to to the human mind and often induces thoughts of suicide.) Reminds me a little of The King in Yellow mythos too. Deserthorror has a wonderfully, dark and twisted imagination. I can only hope some of it inspires me as I continue to read his works.

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🎶 L is for the Way you Look at Me 🎶



Alivia has never had time for love. As a best selling author, her only desire in life is to give back some of the blessings she has received. She enjoys giving funds to the local orphanage and watching the joy light up in the children’s eyes as she plays with them. No man can match the pleasure of that, Alivia thinks. That is until she drops her phone on one fated day and looks into Nick’s emerald green eyes.

Nick, on the other hand always knows when he wants a woman. And right now he has his eyes settled on Alivia. But she is so insistent on playing games. She gives him only a two digit phone number and the first initial of her name. Later when fate arranges for them to meet again she gives him more vague hints. Nick tells himself that Alivia is worth the wait, but a part of him becomes just the tiniest bit impatient. How long will he have to play games with Alivia before she is finally willing to give him more then just a taste?

A cute story that has a lot of potential. It sort of reminded me of that movie ‘Isn’t it Romantic’ with it’s sly, coyness, particularly with Alivia’s character. In fact, (author please forgive me for this) but I almost wanted her to push fate and Nick so far that he decides he’s had enough of the game playing and decides to go after a simpler girl. (Lol, I know there’s no way that’s ever going to happen.) A fun book if you want to learn about the hide and seek version of love.

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The Sun is Out

The nightmare for Ray never ends. She is haunted with memories of her abusive past; the beatings, the rapes. Will she ever find peace? She runs through the forest hoping for escape. There she is discovered by yet another man who at first frightens her intensely. Yet he is very different from the men she is used to. He treats Ray with kindness and compassion and Ray becomes very confused. Haven’t her former abusers explained that she was only useful as a punching bag and a rape object?

The man’s name is Dark but he means only sunshine and hope to poor desperate Ray. Without any questions he provides food and a home for her. He administers helpful medications to her as well. Dark can heal Ray’s body, but does he have the ability to soothe her spirit which will perhaps allow Ray to love again?

Cute names for the characters. I also like the slight irony that it is Dark who brings a ray of hope to Ray. Ha-ha. This is quite an intense story. I’m wondering if Ray’s abuser’s will pursue her and perhaps attack Dark as well. There are many interesting plot lines this story could take. I’m curious as to which ones author Shezz will ultimately choose.

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Friends Light the Way


Gabrielle can hardly imagine life without her three best buddies Emma, Candice and Ava. Together they decorate the school halls for an upcoming party and they enjoy hanging out at the mall too. Gabrielle feels that there is nothing she can’t accomplish as long as her pals are there to support her. But then the unpredictable happens ...Gabrielle may be forced to move away. Can she find a way to survive her new environment without her life long buds?

This novel is about friendships and I haven’t read too many novels that have dealt purely with this topic, so kudos to author Aleena Abraham for that. I also liked the cover she chose for ‘Unpredictable’ though ironically enough it doesn’t seem to describe the actions in the book. The cover suggests a dark mystery and sensuality. Not the sort of thing one would expect for a light hearted story about teen friends. Then again I haven’t finished the novel yet so my initial impression could easily be wrong. At any rate ‘Unpredictable’ is definitely not your typical novel on Inkitt. Enjoy the read.

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Let the Right One In!

Sage Nwafor knows she deserves better then ugly relationships in life. Tired of being mistreated by men, she decides to never fall in love again with anyone including Dylan Andino. Sure he’s drop dead gorgeous with his stunning blue eyes and well-toned body. But she’s been with attractive men before and knows how deceitful good looks can be. Does she dare trust him with her heart?

Women have always came easily to Dylan. But there’s something different about Sage. Somethings that pulls him in and stops him from playing his usual hurtful games. Perhaps for the first time ever, Dylan realizes he wants something more from Sage then just her body. Can he convince her to trust a man just one more time?

A nice romance story, starring normal human beings instead of fantastical, magical creatures for once. I kind of liked that. There was only two chapters at the time of this review but it’ll be interesting to see how their romance proceeds. I’m predicting something is going to happen that will cause Sage to distrust Dylan. (Like she’ll see him with another woman though it would be under totally innocent circumstances) then he’ll have to work his butt off trying to win her over again. Lol. We’ll see. An excellent start to a promising romance novel.

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His Slave and His Queen

Valkyrie hasn’t experienced much happiness in her life. Beaten, neglected, told she is worthless she spends most of her days enslaved to others catering to their needs instead of her own. It is because they fear the power in her hands. Her burning touch can cause exquisite pain to those who don’t know how to handle her properly. Valkyrie’s punishment for this is to live in constant misery.

That is until she meets the Dragonoid Dimitri. He is a hybrid dragon. Why does lust flow through her veins at the mere sight of his body? He isn’t even human. At least not fully. But as she observes his impossibly good looks, his perfect masculine form and his exotic-ness, all Valkyrie wants to do is complete him, body soul and mind.

Were-dragons are a new concept for me. I like it though. It’s a unique idea for a creature. Maybe that’s why Dimitri comes off as hotter and sexier then your average werewolf. I also felt real sorry for poor Valkyrie. I hope she really does become that queen some day and not just a sex object. She deserves a little happiness. I just started this novel so I don’t know yet, but it looks like Valkyrie has a shot. Can’t wait to see if Valkyrie’s dreams ultimately come true.

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Beloved Queen Esther

An attractive, dark haired woman named Esther feels like she’s simply wandering without purpose through life. Her uncle transported the entire family from Iran to America when she was a young child. After her parents die in a tragic car accident her uncle decides to raise his beautiful niece all by himself. Sometime after Esther’s twenty sixth birthday she learns that one of her favorite media figures, the handsome and wealthy Jack Rhodes is about to break his engagement with Vashti Wilmer. “Ahhh” says Esther’s uncle. “Now is the time to apply for a new P.A. position for Rhodes.” But is Esther up for the task? And will this shy beauty somehow worm her way into Rhode’s heart.

I suspect this story maybe based on Esther that exists in the Bible. The plot beats seem similar to what goes on in the biblical chapter. If that’s the case I think it is a clever idea. I wish I had come up with it myself. It’s also fun to read about a beautiful character that doesn’t have blonde hair and blue eyes for a change (I’ve read about so many blonde hair/blue eyed characters to easily fill an entire Aryan Empire. Of course I should be the last one to be complaining. I’ve done it myself.) If I’m right about this novel being a modernized Esther, may I suggest writing more about the Vashiti character? I always found her a fascinating character in the Bible and wondered about her view point on things. At any rate this is a great start to a fascinating story. Can’t wait to read the next chapters.

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The River Runs Wild


Erik is a wolf who is used to getting whatever he wants. As the handsome leader of the River Runs Wolf Pack (one of the most powerful Wolf nations in the New America) very few say ‘no’ to him be they human, wolf or warlock. So he becomes very shocked when Caelynn, a gorgeous human female refuses him as a mate. Doesn’t she realize how difficult it was for him to lower himself to romancing a mere human girl? Erik decides he will then punish her because she does not realize his worth. Caelynn will be his even if she is unaware of it yet. Even if some regrettable force is necessary.

Caelynn on the other hand has murder on her mind. She knows that with Erik’s death she will become the new leader of the River Runs pack once their mating ritual is complete. Does the fool not realize the danger he is in? Or perhaps the danger is actually for her as she imagines the feel of his lips on her body. Can she control her unwanted feelings towards Erik long enough to carry out her plans?

This story is really ...sexy. I hope I don’t offend anyone by that description, but I loved it. I enjoyed the push-pull dynamic between these two characters; arrogant Erik and defiant Caelynn. I’m grateful that none of the leads are sappily in love with each other like I’ve read in other werewolves stories. You get the sense that you’re reading about grown-ups here as the two naturally feel suspicious towards each other. If you like your werewolves stories with a little more bite to them (ha-ha) be sure to give this novel a try.

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I’ll Get You My Pretty!

There is a girl with long, dark hair who lives within the pages of an ancient, mostly unread book. Her skin is eerily pale and her face remains unseen as she sleeps for the moment, trapped within the book. Hope never to wake her up. For she never leaves any living victims once her tome has been read after midnight.

Unfortunately, this is the mistake that Ivy commits. Scoffing at the simple warning of the danger of reading the journal once the clock strikes twelve, Ivy does so only to feel the ticklish sensation of an unseen something breathing down her neck. But Ivy refuses to loose hope. With her new friends, she prepares herself to battle the thing in the book. But will she ultimately succeed?

There are only two chapters so far and the prologue, but what I read was nice. I love these Ring type stories. The ones where the protagonist and the reader breaks the rules together, therefore implying that the reader will suffer the same nasty fate as the protagonist. It gives the novel this spooky breaking-the-fourth-wall feel. Brrr, I shudder just thinking about it. The details about Nigeria feels very authentic too and adds more realism to the story. I hope Lala Pubs finishes her book soon. I can’t wait to read more.

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Too Cruel to Be Petty

Something is very wrong with Officer Petty. His fellow police officers have noticed it, but prefer to ignore their observations. And he has that sexy new girlfriend McDaniels. Maybe she was the reason for his skittish behavior, the false pep in his step. Their relationship certainly went beyond the Officer Friendly treatment.

But only Petty knows how far he has really gone and the only thing that frightens him more then his self acknowledged insanity is his inability to control his thirst for personal justice ...and just how far he’ll go to get it.

I love stories like these. Stories about crazy and inventive serial killers. The fact that this guy is a police officer makes it all the more juicy. My favorite chapter was the first one with the girl trapped in the dog cage; a wonderfully, frightening experience. The author Jason Boyce has come up with some great characters. I certainly hope he continues with this novel. It would be a real shame to let Officer’s Perry’s ultimate fate (and the other crimes he will undoubtedly commit) remain unknown.

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What is Hidden in the Shadows ...?

Blair isn’t sure. She has always been aware of something haunting her, a feeling of an evil presence just hovering over the edges of her life. Sometimes she sees a dark figure in the distance that disappears if she tries to focus her attention on it. Blair only feels safe when she is with her eccentric grandmother who likes to mumble strange incantations underneath her breath. But even her grandmother seems to be hiding secrets from her. And when the day comes where an evil presence comes to collect Blair, only then does her grandmother finally hints to Blair is and all she can be. But can Blair handle this knowledge? And what is the meaning behind her mother’s cat-eye necklace?

An interesting story and well written. Blair is certainly a likable and relatable protagonist. Author Nikki Lett is quite skilled at hinting at all the evil to come and layering secrets on top of secrets. A satisfying, spooky read.

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A Tormented Night in Salem


Salem is a witch who likes to keep to herself. She alone knows of the dark and powerful magic that resides deep within her being ...and how difficult it is to control it. After all, her namesake is a town where hundreds of witches were once killed. Is her name perhaps a curse? Suggesting that she too has the power to kill, if she looses control of the dangerous magic within herself?

Leopold unfortunately doesn’t sense the danger. Or perhaps he does and is strangely attracted by it. He is deeply fascinated by this mysterious dark-haired beauty, but he is not sure why. Is it perhaps because he senses the destructive power within herself? Or even the deep secret she carries along with guilt? Whatever it is, Leopold finds her irresistible forgetting perhaps what happens to moths when they fly to close to a burning flame.

A refreshing paranormal love story. Werewolf stories are nice too, but sometimes I yearn for something a little more exotic and this story satisfies. I’ve only read three chapters so far, but I think I already know Salem’s shameful secret. I hope Leopold knows what he’s in for. I can see him accidentally getting killed if he doesn’t handle Salem the right way. Can’t wait to see how the romance progresses.

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We are Kaspar!

He is royalty but he is not treated as such. Abused, kicked, unwanted, Kaspar is forced to live in a dungeon even while his princely brothers enjoy the best of their privileged lives. Even death will not bring Kaspar peace, for suicide will tarnish his family’s reputation and he wishes to bring them no harm despite their abusive attitude towards them.

But hopes lies with Terra and her mother. They do not treat Kaspar with disrespect even though this is seemingly the attitude of the entire kingdom. And with thirst love and acceptance he sees a new strength in himself ...a determination that suggests that the true king may have arrived in the guise of this humble looking child.

Wow, I’ve been reading a lot of good stuff on Inkitt recently and that doesn’t happen terribly often. This is another well-written story. (I loved the prologue in particular- the idea of an infant’s arms becoming seperate whole identities. How creative is that?) There is a strong King Arthurian Sword in the Stone vibe here and yes this is a compliment. Author Alicia D’Tourna really knows how to build a suspenseful, compelling story.

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Welcome to Gen-Corp ...Your Worst Nightmare!

In Claire Booth’s dark and intriguing vision, the world has become dominated by greed and corruption. Countries have re-aligned themselves and some have disappeared altogether. All seem to share an usual fate of being owned by corporations, and the most cruel one of all is Gen-Corp, who almost succeeds in swallowing the entire world whole.

If there is any hope it lies with Aaron. He is drugged and made helpless in a hospital owned by Gen-Corp. Plus he is forced to endure the almost daily rapes by one of his doctors. But none of these have succeeded in breaking his spirit. Will Aaron be the key to save some small part of the world he lives in or will he become just another name on Gen-Corp’s extensive victim list?

I must say I have never read anything quite like this before (including Orwell’s 1984, which this reminding me a bit of.) And I was never bored while reading, I can tell you that. Claire Booth is a very bold writer with a unique style of getting her message across. Expect the unexpected with this novel.

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A Blood Red Flower

Eris Rozentilla was uniquely cursed. Born into a family of assassins she was carefully trained since birth not to have a conscience or to care about anyone but herself and her family.
Most importantly, she was trained how to kill and in the most ruthless and efficient fashion.

Yet despite her upbringing and all of it’s difficulty, Eris dreams of a better life. Feeling ashamed of her lack of feeling shame, Eris wonders if some where in the world there is a better garden. One where her sense of morality would be allowed to grow and flourish.

The grammar was a bit different from what I’m used too. (It took me a while to understand that the words in bold were intended to be quotes and the rest of paragraphs was Eris’s inner dialogue. But I did eventually catch on.) This novel had a nice mafia feel. Reminded me of The Godfather a little bit. It will be interesting to see if Eris can escape her family’s murdeous ideals and discover the person she truly is inside.

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Breaking of a New Dawn

Surprises can come in many forms and in many places. Dawn is certainly aware of this. Blonde, beautiful and artistic she still has to fight with her peers to earn their respect. But when a crazy man shoots her point blank in the chest, Dawn is forced to admit to herself that beauty and even her father’s political connections are not enough to keep her safe. She needs real protection ...and fast.

But is it necessary for her help to come in the form of an FBI agent? Liam is youthful enough in appearance to pass as a teenager, but that doesn’t necessarily mean he is knowledgeable as well. Sparks fly immediately when Dawn learns she will be forced to live with this man who she knows very little about. Can the two learn to get along and is there some other type of chemistry brewing between them just underneath the surface?

I sense an upcoming romance between two though I could be easily wrong. The author Kara is good at hinting at dark secrets in both of het characters lives. I also admire her bold use of the present tense. Present tense writing is a difficult narrative style to pull off as it ironically tends to age the writing and takes away the feeling of urgency. But Kara knows what she is doing and has left me with a new respect for the style. This was a good read with twists and turns that are bound to shock and entertain.

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Me and You!

Dalisay is caught in a romantic relationship which she insists on re-writing, changing if only in her own mind. She is full of regrets, but she only hints at the dark secret, (at least at first) the knowledge that has somehow destroyed her relationship with her nameless lover. She writes a novel to him and as we slowly learn the traits of her nameless lover (he is handsome, yet shy, seemingly harmless) it is difficult not to wonder what went so wrong in their relationship ...and that is the hook in this unique novel.

I’m not usually a fan of 2nd person narratives. But I have to say this novel was well written and charmed me somewhat. The author Sadie Anne hints at a complex, romantic relationship with fully developed three dimensional characters. I liked that. It was engaging. Certainly not your average love story. I’ll definitely have to continue reading.

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Smokin’ Hot!!!

What can be more fun during a 70’s rock concert then booze, marijuana and just enough authority present so you can enjoy pissing them off? How about some sex appeal? I mean some major sex appeal. Enter Corrina Jackson. Her exotic-ness shines in her purple-dyed hair and animal sexuality. To see Corrina is to want her. But all Corrina wants is to find the one guy she cannot easily dominate. Lately, her sexual conquests have come too easily.

She might have found her match in Scott Thomas. With his sandy blonde hair and well muscled body, he is nobody’s fool. He recognizes desire when he see’s it in a woman’s eyes, and often feels contempt towards her for it. The two meet while at the outdoor concert. Two jungle cats who would just as soon destroy either as mate. Will there be a true winner in their hook-up?

I have to say this was well written. I couldn’t find any grammatical errors or what I call the ‘jumping head narratives’ which I often find in the romance genre. As a matter of fact some of this strikes me as erotica. Though I’m not quite sure it fits fully into the erotic genre. At any rate it’s a very sexual love story, bold, daring and hot! Definitely not for the faint-hearted.

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A Dangerous Secret ...


Beautiful and young Prisha is in one hell of a jam. Her beauty has unfortunately attracted the attention of her boss and he makes no secret of the lust he has for her. His flirtation towards her comes uncomfortably close to rape. Will Prisha be able to escape this man and discover who she is without him?

This story certainly is very juicy and I’m intensely curious if Prisha is going to be able to get away from this creep. Having said that, I also must note that I did see some grammar issues. (Remember, always capitalize the beginning of sentences. Also, you could find some friendly editors who specialize in the English language to help with some of the other minor grammar issues.) But none of these issues were very damaging to the story. At any rate a promising start.

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Purple Pearl Eater


This review pertains to the first two chapters only. You don’t want to mess with the law firm belonging to the inquisitive Amira, her identical twin Amara and the physically attractive Caleb. On the the surface the three fight against injustice of all kinds especially if it involves cheating children. But in reality their law firm hides their true identities and motives. In secret they are Werewolves who prefer to curb their appetites for human flesh at least for the time being. What they crave more then anything is to once again posess the purple pearl, a special jewelry that is necessary for their tribe’s continued survival.

A rather unique werewolf story. I dare say I have never read a werewolf story quite like this one before. So far I haven’t encountered any love triangles which is kind of refreshing for this genre though this may change in the future. I admit I’m curious as to how the purple pearl will effect the three of them. The only way to learn the answer is to continue reading Fajitas intriguing story.

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Love is a Triple Edged Sword


What do you do when you’re in a trap that you don’t want to escape? That is the situation Vanessa Luciano has found herself in. She is hypnotized by Oliver’s good looks and oily charms. She forces herself to believe in Oliver’s lies even though she can clearly see through them. And She is willing to be Oliver’s one night stand again and again and again.

But Oliver does make one costly mistake which may be fatal to their relationship. He allows her to meet his extremely attractive roommate Jackson Lindgren. Will he be a better match for Vanessa? Or is he part of Oliver’s ultimate game, a game where he manipulates his friends and decides who’s heart will be spared ...and who’s will be broken.

A promising start. I did feel bad for poor Vanessa though. I hope she will soon see her own worth outside of Oliver’s twisted perspective or any romantic relationship for that matter. Only the end of the novel will let us know Vanessa’s ultimate fate.

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A Dish Best Served Cold



Lola Is the wrong woman to mess with. She never forgives a grudge ...and she never forgets. Though her name suggests a certain softness she uses her beauty as a weapon. Her sexuality is her sword.

Adrian her boss believes he has Lola under control. But as this shy beauty begins to seduce him, he slowly learns that he is only a pawn in Lola’s game. An interesting character study and well worth the read.

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He Looks Like an Angel ..


Reyna McCall is nobody’s fool. Young, beautiful and adopted into a prominent family, she knows she is a prize for any man. But she has no plans of becoming a ‘trophy wife’ especially to dead gorgeous Davian Cross. She senses something amiss in his flirtations with her. Perhaps something even a little threatening. But it’s so hard for Reyna not to become distracted by his sensual kisses and seductive touch. Will Reyna disentangle herself from a possibly dangerous relationship? Or will she find herself becoming the ultimate victim in ways she has never imagined.

First off ...wow! A. L. Long is a skilled writter. I haven’t run into any miss-spellings, past or present tense problems, pacing problems (my own Achilles heel as a writer) or awkward use of the English Language. Her characters are three dimensional and therefore all the more interesting to read about. You sense there are real stakes here. I’m definitely enjoying The Perfect Wife and can’t wait to find out what happens to Reyna and Davian next.

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Her Name is G201 ...


... And she can be deadly. G201 is certainly not your typical teen. She has the ability to knock a grown man unconscious and seems to be fairly comfortable around firearms. She can be programmed to be reckless with her life in order to serve her current commanders. Like a true psychopath, G201 seems hardly to care if she is serving good or evil. But there’s something vaguely intimidating about her newest order. She is given voluptuous house to live in and is told to go by the name of Natalie. What is the secret behind all this given wealth and what will Natalie be required to do in order to preserve it?

Clever story so far. G391 reminds me of a young James Bond. Noley Smith the author, hints at a dark past for her provocative protagonist. (I admit I’m very curious about G201’s upbringing.) Mission Denied promises to be a novel full of intrigue.

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A World With No Problems ...

The future is presented as a happy place in Mare Midnight’s novel, at least on the glittering surface. The energy crisis is over. There are flying cars and flying hover boards. There is no such thing as world hunger and all illnesses are a minor inconvenience at best. But there is another kind of illness breeding underneath the surface of this future society. One that can turn human minds into horrendous monstrosities with an unthinkable craving for human flesh. Sky and Jay try to cope with their rapidly changing society. But will it be too much for them? Can they ultimately survive?

An interesting take on the zombie apocalypse genre. Reminded me a little bit of Stephen King’s ‘Cell’. (And yes that’s a compliment.) Get ready for a harrowing ride with this novel.

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Pride ...But No Prejudices.


What does success feel like? Financial freedom, good looks and youth all wrapped up in the American Dream? The beautiful Evelyn White knows. She has founded her company at the age twenty six. But success hasn’t gone to her head. She still makes time for an old college friend Allison who is trapped possibly emotionally abusive relationship. Allison unfortunately will not take Eve’s very sobering advice.

Enter Adrian Stone a man with the looks of a Greek God. Intelligent and wealthy he is in every way Eve’s equal, and this disturbs her greatly. Eve feels that conquering Adrian through a romantic relationship will mean the pinnacle of success. A once enemy now conquered. But can she tame his arrogant spirit. Or will they fight through means that are fair and unfair until one of their companies is destroyed ...and the owner is left with a broken heart.

A fun story about the rich and famous that’s enjoyable to read. Reminds me a little of one of my favorite television programs, The Haves and Have Nots.

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Fiery Madness!


Young Sheyryar can hardly believe his horrible fate. He is only nine years old and yet is forced to support his entire family. His mother has disappeared long ago and his father has become an almost legendary, evil figure. A selfish and ruthless man who cares for himself and little else. Certainly not for the suffering of his children. Sheyryar and his siblings are truly on their own.

Sheyryar arrives home one night only to discover that his modest family home is on fire. As he watches the hungry flames destroy his only home with his siblings trapped inside, a tiny flame is born within his heart. Nothing but a spark perhaps but it grows into a burning knowledge that he will do whatever it takes for him and his family to survive. Perhaps even engage in a deal with the devil himself.

A powerful beginning to Nishat Fatima’s novel. It is a story full of anger and revenge and hot passions. On occasion I noted some awkward phrasing, but there was also some truly poetic language use too. I particularly enjoyed how the author described the setting sun. Nishat Fatima is an interesting writter who is worth exploring further.

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Wren-ching Fate ...


Wren is a beautiful, intelligent young woman and yet her life is somehow shrouded in mystery. There’s the sense of something dark creeping around the corners of her existence and she is chased in the forest by a strange man. Her mother comes to rescue her and is oddly nonchalant about the mystifying stranger or the fact that she requires for both her and her daughter to carry knives.
Wren is puzzled by her mother’s odd behavior but is not necessarily troubled by them. Until she wakes up in the morning and discovers an attractive but sharp eared stranger staring back at her.

“You’re not human.” Her mother replies. Then who is she? The answer to this question terrifies her as well as ignites a new sense of purpose in her soul. Will Wren accept her ultimate destiny? Or will she doom herself and her people to an unkind fate?

Aella Stormwind does a good job at building sympathy for Wren as well as passion in her novel. Her characters are well written and believable. I could find no grammatical errors or misspelled words. Plus her pacing was excellent (a skill I’m still working on.) I know I’m concerned for Wren’s fate. Here’s hoping for the best for her.

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Hot for Teacher!


Poor Eva. Not only does she struggle to perform well in school, but she just met her new history teacher. Or to be more precise she learns that her teacher is the good looking Bret Davis, a man she has known since childhood and is also a good friend of her father’s. But Eva is no longer a child. She has blossomed into an attractive teenager. As each of them become aware of their growing physical attraction to one another, the sexual tension deepens. You know someone is about to succumb to their forbidden attraction and the result ultimately will destroy one of them ...or possibly both.

The plot is one of those ‘forbidden fruit’ stories that can be a lot of fun to read. The author will have to take great care however not to let this become an accidental support for pedophile type behavior. (For that very reason many authors use the female teacher/male student hook-up and even that has to be handled delicately.) So far the author seems up to the challenge. A fun, naughty read.

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Room of Blood

Everywhere there is blood. It pours from the walls and drips from the ceiling. Your foot prints leaves smeared blood on the floor and the strong copper smell of blood chokes the oxygen out of the air. In the mirrors your own image laughs at you with deep obsidian eyes. Is this your new reality? Or have you receded into a dark place in your mind, where something laughs and controls your every move ...like a puppet.

A wonderful start for Paola Droz’s new novel. What I liked best about Uncontrollable is it’s unique premise. I’ve read and seen plenty of movies about possessions before but never one told from the possessed view point, the horror of truly loosing your control to an evil spirit. I get the shudders just thinking about. Can’t wait to see what this author has planned on what happens next.

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Mirror, Mirror on the Wall ...


Samantha’s parents are happy at the prospect of an affordable vacation for their three unique children, happy Sam, awkward and solemn Sami and the oldest and wisest of the three Samantha. Indeed her parents can’t understand Samantha’s reluctance to visit the old fashioned cabin. But it has always been Samantha’s nature to question surprises. When she first discovers the mirror, a seemingly innocent piece of glass hanging in her parent’s bedroom, it only becomes a matter of time before Samantha learns that she is the keyhole through which evil can tear her entire family apart or remain locked safely away from doing harm. Can she ultimately control the forces in the mirror?

There is much more, but to continue with my descriptions of the plot would be to ruin some of the nice surprises in the story. So I’ll stop here. Let it suffice to say that “Mirror” is well written and provides some genuine chills. This story reminded me of one of my favorite horror movies; Oculus. That’s quite an achievement.

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Maya’s Hope for Oragon



Maya loves history, especially the intriguing secret that she has discovered while reading letters from her ancestors. Yet this is not enough to impress her imposing father who believes that young women should only engage in careers that doesn’t involve studying or reading books. Torn between pleasing her father and also satisfying her deep thirst for knowledge, will Maya learn to accept herself without her father’s approval as well as discover the amazing secret of Oragon?

This is an awkward name for me to spell correctly, but Scholarstica5858 is a talented writer with a strong, narrative voice. Her characters are fully three dimensional unlike the characters I’ve read from some other books that were flat and uninspirational. This is another author I wouldn’t be surprised to discover published works outside of Inkitt some day. Probably not with that particular pen name though. Lol!

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Hope He Never Finds You ...



He knows how to seek and he is very skilled at hiding. He knows how to blend in among the ordinary people, despite his large, muscular frame. He uses his good looks to appear harmless to the unsavvy. Deadliest of all, he knows how to find the right shadows to shroud himself with, never revealing his dangerous presence until it’s much too late.

John and Carol the two detectives assigned to the case do their best to track this killer. But he always seems to be one step ahead of them. Mocking them even with a murder performed right in front of the medical examiner’s home. Will the Hide and Seek killer ever be found and forced to endure justice?

Very good plot. I liked the side story of the romance between the two detectives. There’s a nice diversity in this novel as well. Be prepared though. It’s quite an intense read.

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Something Evil this way Comes ...


This review pertains to the first three chapters only.

Meet Violet. Beautiful, popular, surrounded by friends and supported by teachers, life has always been rather easy for her. And perhaps that right there provides some unexpressed yearnings from Violet. Is there some boredom underneath her seemingly perfect life? Perhaps some secret deep desire to see what it would be like to be the bad girl for a change?

Eli, a handsome eighteen year old seems to pick up on Violet’s suppressed desires. He is an intense psychopath who unabashedly portrays himself as evil. (This becomes very obvious when Eli straddles the corpse of the dead high school principal.) Can Violet resist this wicked but oh so attractive boy, and what he means to her reputation and possible sanity?

I admit I love these type of wicked stories. There’s sort of a nice Cruel Intentions vibes here. This is the perfect book to enjoy with a soft comfortable chair and a whole box of chocolates that you’re not willing to share. Quite a fun read.

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No Agony for Agni ...



This review pertains to the first chapter only.

The Pradhan’s responsibility is to protect his people. He carries this knowledge deep in his heart and yet he fears that this time he may be overwhelmed by an unseen, terrible force who’s very presence cracks the earth. “Run!” He yells to his people. But running can only do so much. At the very end when Pradhan and his people can run no further they are forced to face their own helplessness as they observe their broken huts ...and broken dreams.

Agni promises to be a grand adventure of an epic scale. Something akin to Tolkien as mankind fights an impossible monster. Yes, there were grammar issues. I won’t deny that. But if you can manage to ignore that you will be in your way to an exciting adventure and a perilous journey.

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She cuts off their tails with a carving knife ...



It begins with a nightmare for Michael. He dreams of a witch who mercilessly attacks children by slicing into them. He wakes up with a resolve to protect all humanity against such magical creatures. After all It is his job to protect humans while they continue to pretend that the fantastical world doesn’t exist. But can he and his partner Anthony be successful against evil when witch’s have access to mind bending magic?

This was a surprisingly good read. I admit I wasn’t expecting to like The Watchman as much as I did. Of course I have a taste towards horror. That’s part of what drew me in. Also, R.D. Arlove has a good command of the English language. I found only one typo error (the use of ‘care’ instead of ‘car’) which was probably caused by an auto-correct function. So if you like detective stories with a splash of supernatural and horror, be sure to give ‘The Watchman’ a try. I’m glad I did.

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Time After Time ...



This review pertains to the first two chapters only.

How does one handle the guilt of not being there for a loved one? And if not being there caused the death of your lover?
Joanna does her best to continue in a world without her girlfriend. But she is haunted by the memories of Carra, the only woman she had ever loved. The author Kei Angelus cleverly weaves Joanna’s struggle with acceptance of loss through Joanna’s own fictiin story about Lauren. She wonders and is concerned about Lauren the same way she wonders about Carra, and is unable to come to a conclusion about either relationship ...an interesting analogy.

There were some small grammatical errors but nothing that stops the flow of the story. A painful love story which may have some hope for Joanna in the end.

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Lelia’s Hope is Our Hope!



This review only pertains to the first two chapters of the novel.

You don’t always get what you wish for ...” No one knows this better then Lelia; a girl who learns at an early age the cruel lesson of abandonment. It is a curse she has difficulty breaking. Her mother leaves her at an orphanage as a young baby and she never had the good fortune of being adopted unlike the other children. At the age of eighteen Lelia is forced out of the orphanage (the only home she ever knew) and must somehow learn to fend for herself without family or friends.

Lelia quickly learns that life outside the orphanage is a sink or swim world. She attempts to drown herself in the ocean only to be saved at the last moment by a mysterious benefactor. Who is her savior? Perhaps future chapters will reveal more answers to this mystery.

Lelia is easy to sympathize with. She seems to be innocent and helpless and as readers we hope along with her that life will get better. There does seem to be some potential for a better life for Lelia if Mr. Smith agrees to hire Lelia as a waitress. This was an enjoyable read with very few grammatical errors. Let’s hope all of Lelia’s dreams come true!

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Buckle up, Buttercup!



This review is for the first chapter only.
What can young, genius Oliver do when his mother insists he get a job? And not just any old job ..but as a janitor at the local Haunted High-school! (Some mother. You’d think with Oliver’s grades, she’d push for him to be a scientist or something.) Only younger sister Sophie seems to properly understand the dangers of the new high school but is helpless to save her brother. Quite sad really.

Grammar was good though I did notice one paragraph was duplicated in the very next paragraph. Overall a delightful read and humorous look at what can happen when the warning signs are ignored because the ones giving the advice are supposedly too ignorant. Beware the monsters!

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Answers can be found ...in the Lost Pages!



Interesting novel. I love the premise of comparing people to books. We all have pages of ourselves we try to hide from others for fear of judgment, or embarrassment, or maybe even something deep and dark that we’re afraid to acknowledge even to ourselves that we have. The Lost Pages attempts to explore these feelings in the two characters of gorgeous Aryan and the kind hearted Mila.
They flirt with each other in their attempt to find each other’s missing pages; Aryan’s goal might be only to manipulate Mila better, while Mila simply wants to help Aryan.

I did find some small issues in the novel. I’m not crazy about the use of ‘Aryan’ as a name. In English ‘Aryan’ roughly translates into ‘White Race’ which is sort of awkward reading for me. There were also some past and present tense issues and a few misspelled words. But other then that a good, solid read.

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Tris in Wonderland


As usual this review only refers to the first chapter but ...Wow! You certainly are a talented writer. I’m impressed and a little jealous actually. Your grammar is spot on. Your descriptions are excellent. While reading I found it easy to imagine myself trapped in Tris’s mind with her. A place full of all kinds of possible wonders and terrors. And yet it is a place that Tris does not wish to leave. How sad and horrifying for her.

This makes me wonder if Tris suffers from some form of autism. I suppose I’ll have to keep on reading to find out, but I am very impressed so far. Please keep writing. You obviously know what you’re doing.

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Beware the Fear!



Before we begin, let me make it clear that this review is only for the first chapter. You do have a very intriguing plot. I’ve heard of haunted houses before, but never a haunted museum. I think that is a great atmosphere for a terror to take place. I’m surprised Stephen King hasn’t come up with that idea yet.

I like Ajay. He is certainly gutsy visiting the palace not once, but twice like that. (By the way is the palace and/or the museum the same building? I’m a little confused here.) I’m also curious about what Ajay looks like and his age. My imagination is telling me he’s an older teenager perhaps 18 or 19, with thick black hair and he wears glasses, but if I’m wrong with any of that you can always provide a correct description for your readers in your story.

My favorite part of the story was when Ajay tells the boatman “Danger will be cured by giving money ...”. I loved that line. Now I don’t want to come off as a jerk. but I did see numerous grammar errors throughout this chapter. I know from personal experience that on Inkitt grammar issues are no big issue. But if you ever decide you want to get your work professionally published you might want to look into some editing. There was also some switches between past and present tense. For a story that works on fear like yours does, may I suggest past tense? Past tense has a way of making the danger seem imminent for some reason though I know that makes no sense logically.

Overall a good read. Keep up with the good work.

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Dream a Little Nightmare of Me ...


For starters please realize this review is only pertaining to the prologue and first two chapters. Overall a good story. It was properly creepy and lived up to the nightmare hype. I wonder who killed Ben if it wasn’t Martha. Is Martha having a nervous breakdown? Does the silver bracelet have anything to do with it? I admit I am curious about Martha’s fate. You have a great imagination. Wish my imagination was as good as yours.

I did see plenty of grammatical errors. I’m just being honest here. (You might want to try reading your work out loud. You’ll probably catch most of them that way.) But I didn’t see any errors serious enough to destroy my enjoyment of your work. Your characters are interesting especially Martha. I’m also kind of curious to how she is going to relate to Liam since she thinks he’s difficult. Lol. Anyway, keep up the good work. We need more female horror writers out there.

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Maya’s Hope!


Hi! I gotta warn you I tend to do a little more in-depth analyzing of a story then the average reviewer. But I only review the stories I like. And you’re more then welcome to give me the same treatment if you choose to review my story in return.

For starters, the title of your novel really intrigued me. ‘Maya’s Confinement’. Wow! Sounds like a horror story just waiting to happen. It was the title that drew me to your novel.

I’ve read your prologue which I can’t find in your novel anymore. Did you erase it? That’s okay because your first chapter is much better written then the prologue. There was so much improvement that it feels like it was written by two completely different people. (Yes, that’s a compliment.) You have a strong narrative voice and I sense an author who has good control of her story and definite plans for her protagonist. I like the personality of Maya. She is a realist and sad but not broken. A very good start. I am hooked and I can’t wait to see what happens to Maya next. Keep up the good work.

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This review is for the Prologue only.



Good writing style. You definitely have talent. I was drawn in your story of humanoid dragons. You gave great detail in their descriptions. I wonder how they would look like in a movie. Very interesting, I’d imagine.

I also enjoyed your descriptions about the floating rock island. In fact I liked it so much I wish you have written more about it, the way you did with the dragons. For example do rocks ever crumble off it and fall into the sea? (How picturesque, though I suppose it would also be dangerous to those on the sea or ground) Is there a strong sense of magic there? A feeling that can encourage fear and maybe excitement at the same time? Is it a scary place? A welcoming place? See what I mean? I crave more details about your fascinating island.

Also, I noticed you call your dragonoids, ‘dragons’. The only problem with that is that I would often get confused. Each time I read the word ‘dragon’ my brain immediately shifts to the big lizard non-talking kind. Not the very unique type of creatures you’ve created for your story. Maybe you could call them dragonoids or something else unique. This is just my opinion. Other readers may not have the same identifying problems I had.
Grammar was very good. I couldn’t find any errors. That’s often not the case on Inkitt, so kudos to you.

Overall good story. Well written. Keep up the good work.

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Death becomes us.

Overall an intriguing story. I have to say, I found the beginning prologue to be a bit purpley -overly dramatic, too many adjectives. But the rest of the story didn’t match the prologue’s tone and was an enjoyable read. The chapter on Alfred Pottinger was well written and compelling. It was interesting seeing how Charon in a sense becomes Alfred while reviewing his life, and all that Alfred experienced, we experience with Charon. Also I liked how you ignored the cliche of Charon’s becoming a fearsome deliverer of death. Instead he is kind and sympathetic towards the suffering of others. I’m normally a huge horror fan, so I wasn’t expect to like a gentle angel of death. But I did like the personality you gave Charon. That was nice. I saw no major grammar issues. Good job.

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This is Not Wonderland

Wow. I think you have an awesome idea for a compelling novel. I can even see this becoming a movie. A three year old child is kidnapped and trained to become a sexy and merciless assassin at age 17? I love it! Lisa must be such a fun character to write about. I can tell you’re having a good time with it.

Unfortunately I did have some issues with grammar. I’d get involved in the story, and then I would suddenly be yanked out again as I saw grammatical errors such as sentences not starting off with capitol letters, some misspelled words and some past and present tense issues. (I hope you choose to stick with past tense for this narrative. In my opinion your story reads so much better that way.)

I loved how you made your character Black. (I’m African American myself so I enjoy reading about Black characters.) I also liked how you showed your readers that Lisa was still human with her enjoyment of breakfast and shopping. Maybe in the future chapters you can show how she is ‘inhuman’ too. I imagine a professional assassin wouldn’t be too kind or sympathetic to other people.

Anyway, these are just my opinions. It doesn’t mean they are correct. I hope you continue with your writing. I can tell you have a wonderful imagination.

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