Chere Taylor

I love horror ...just as long as it’s fiction.

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A Star-Crossed Tribe!

Raymond, a lazy archaeologist along with his best friend Sigismundo explore a mysterious section of Northern Italy hoping to stumble onto something valuable. Instead Raymond accidentally transports himself to a dark tunnel full of ancient evil secrets. There he encounters a man who in a horrendous scene psychologically molests Raymond (in one of the best descriptions of mind rape I have ever encountered.) Somehow he manages to escape and returns to his friend’s villa.
There is a betrayal and Raymond is again recaptured. This time he will be forced to endure an even worse threat then the mere penetration of his mind. Perhaps a fate even worse then death.

This was really good. I mean really good. I truly didn’t expect to enjoy Pentaurus as much as I did. So much so that I was disappointed that there weren’t any more chapters. (At the time of this review there were only four available.) I can see myself buying Pentaurus at Barnes and Nobles if it was available there. Bleeding Petals is an excellent writer with a strong, narrative voice. It’s not often that I give a novel the perfect five star review. (I think I only did it three times before.) But Pentaurus certainly deserves it. I hope the author posts some more chapters soon. I gotta know what happened to Raymond.

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Here We Are ...


Will is in one hell of a jam. He wakes up on a foreign planet, (in his pajamas no less) with no idea of how he arrived there or even why. He meets another alien in the exact same predicament except this alien may have murder on it’s mind. As the two circle each other they slowly begin to form an unwanted connection. Neither of them is at first pleased with that fact, but their dependence on one another is necessary if either of them hope to continue to survive their dangerous atmosphere.

There is more, much more. But to continue with the plot descriptions would ruin some nice surprises so we’ll have to stop there. Let it suffice to say that boy did I find this story fascinating. I couldn’t put it down. It reminds me of a wonderful sci-fi novel I read years ago which I can no longer remember the title of. But it had that same sense of sexual ambiguity. At first I was going to slam this novel for what I thought was a homophobic vibe, but as the story progressed I saw this wasn’t the case at all. (Again I can’t reveal too much about that or I’ll ruin major plot points.) I’ve only read the first three chapters but you can believe I’m going to finish it. Where Are We is not for the timid reader, but if you have an open mind it sure is fun.

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Piercing Thorns

Reminisce always felt different from the other girls at the orphanage but she could never quite understand why. Was it because she suffered from a rare disorder called heterochromia which gave her two opposing eye colors? Was it from her uncommon name which literally meant brooding, a habit Rem has difficulty breaking from? She isn’t sure. All Rem knows is that she never felt like she ever really belonged in the world ...anywhere.

Hope comes in the form of an upcoming charity carnival where Rem plans to work. She hopes for herself and her younger best friend will be adopted at last. But there are secrets at this fair. Some possibly terrifying. Secrets that are better left undiscovered.

A nice start. Reminisce makes quite a sympathetic character. The author Ashley Williams has provided her protagonist with some unusual depth in Reminisce’s deliberate attempts to sabotage all adoption attempts in her fear of being rejected. (Reminisce rejects you first.) Still I am hungry for the horror. I can’t wait til the real trouble begins for poor Reminisce even if it means she must suffer in the process. A must read.

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Beware the Truth!


A lonely thirteen year old named Ralphie lives in a stilted, barren world. He never visits children his own age and his parents treat him almost as an after thought. His only entertainment is in the form of a headset. Through his headset he can virtually visit other places even though those areas also feel empty. Yet, bleak as Ralphie’s world is, there creeps at the edges of his life a dark, dark secret. One that is capable of destroying his entire world if ever discovered.

I don’t dare reveal more but what a wonderfully creative story. I didn’t see the ending coming and was genuinely chilled by it. The author MG Trazor has a very strong narrative voice. By that I mean there is a personality and a skill in his (or her) writing. It’s not the drab “...he said this, then she said that. He did this. She did that.” In fact his/her narrative voice reminded me a little bit of my own if I can butter myself up a bit. I’m not sure if I’ll ever reach the stage of becoming a traditional published author, but I wouldn’t be surprised if we were to see a MG Trazor novel in Barnes and Nobles one day. Remember, you heard it here first.

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Where Have You Been, my Oblivion?



This review refers to the first chapter only ...

On a seemingly ordinary day, thirteen year old Chance and his best friend Jaden attend school which is filled with boring lectures. Chance tries his best to remain focused on his teacher but he daydreams anyway and sees his own shadow mysteriously move and shift even as Chance himself remains still. Is this an illusion? Or has he gained some wonderfully new super power?

After school Chance tries to demonstrate his new skills for Jaden but he fails miserably and this causes Jaden to regard him with suspicion. But after leaving the movie theater, the two boys encounter a dark and dangerous entity. Suddenly Chance knows he is in the fight for his life. Will his new powers be enough to save himself and Jaden. Or will they fail him yet again?

This chapter ends with quite the cliffhanger. I enjoy super hero stories. (I’m a huge Batman fan, myself.) And I liked the Batman connection of a possible fatal crime occurring at the exit of a movie theater. (I picked up some nice Shazam vibes too in Chance’s sardonic but youthful personality) Interesting enough I couldn’t find any grammatical errors in this chapter. However there were on a few occasions an unusual phrasing of the English language that was mildly distracting at times. But nothing fatal to the story. I’m hoping Chance survives his encounter with the dark stranger and becomes the superhero he is destined to be. Go Chance!

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Bad Moon A’ Rising



This review is for the first two chapters only. It is the time of year when werewolves are required to mate and Killian Darcy is very impressed by the Anglo Saxon beauty of Helena his mate chosen by the Luna Goddess, herself. Will he be equally impressed when he sees her in wolf form and vice versa? For that matter will their marriage be enough to heal their warring factors of their two werewolf tribes? What will be the ultimate fate for both of them?

M.Mokka has all the answers in this novel. He/she is a confident writer and carefully guides the reader’s attention through this version of Romeo and Juliet story with werewolves. I saw no grammatical errors here. (Very rare for Inkitt). In fact this is the best werewolf story I have read to date on this site. Definitely take a look if you’re a fan of Twilight.

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Elyren’s Destiny



In a world far different from our own, lives a child with the destiny of becoming a great sorcerer. He is influenced by Seer Savi and as a child even tries to attack him in his thirst for magical knowledge. Lord Arwell tries hard to control the fate of his son by enrolling him into the military. But it quickly becomes obvious that Elyren is not a man who can be controlled by traditional means.

This is a very particular world that Vin Wintergreen builds quite carefully and skillfully. Magic abounds as well as a feeling of grandeur and legendary history. This novel has that same hopeful sense of awe and wonder I felt when watching the early Star Wars movies (But this is not a science fiction work. It is strictly fantasy) Grammar was superb. I could find no technical errors. Elyren is an intense read, but ultimately enjoyable.

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What a Tangle!



Anneliese, a poor village girl had a difficult life. Adopted by mean-sported parents who would often abuse her, she dreamed of escape. Then one day after her adoptive parents go missing (possibly attacked by beasts) the queen rolls up to Anneliese’s docile home in her horse drawn carriage. The two women examine each other, noting their shared physical resemblance of pale, porcelain skin, the long blonde tresses. Could this be the start of Anneliese’s long delayed happily ever after ...or the beginning an inexplicable nightmare?

This story reminds me of another charming fairy tale which I have enjoyed years ago. I did note a slight change in narrative (from third person to first) but it is easily fixable. Please continue with your novel. In this sometimes difficult world, we all need our happily ever afters.

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The Love of Ink

I’m usually not much into poetry but I liked this one. The narrator is obviously looking for love. The question becomes is it a flesh and blood person who she seeks to “chase away” her pain? Or perhaps the act of writing in itself? Does expressing herself try away her tears and give her hope for the future? This is an interesting poem that writers can relate to.

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You’ve got talent!

You certainly have talent. To be fair I’m still new to Inkitt and I haven’t read many stories yet, but yours is the best written I’ve encountered so far. I liked your opening paragraph which did the unique job of describing Georgina and setting up immediate tension with the dog. What a hook. You read this paragraph and you immediately want to know more. Creating that kind of interest takes skill as a writer.

Saw a minor grammar issue, a repeated word Most likely a typo. I’d quote it to show you where, but Inkitt doesn’t allow direct quote from author’s work. But if you look for it in the first chapter I’m sure you’ll find it. That’s nitpicking really. Honestly, you’re a good writer. You have a strong, narrative voice and you provide your characters with distinct personalities. I’m a little jealous actually. I wouldn’t be surprised to buy your book from Amazon some day. Keep writing. You’re very good at it.

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Killer Klowns from Next Door!

Hi My-Story Book. I’ve read your novel and I do like it. I have a thing for Killer Klowns. They’re my favorite kind of monster. Your story definitely activated my coulrophobia - fear of Clowns.

I’m guessing you’re quite young from some of the phrasing you used and the short one paragraph chapters. Do you mind if I give you a little advice? For starters I’d get a real scary cover for your book. It would attract more potential readers. There are plenty of free evil clown pictures floating around the internet. You could also get it professionally done but that does cost money. Let me know if you’re interested in that route though. Maybe I could help.

Secondly, I think your story would read better if you combined all the mini chapters together and made it just one full chapter. In other words allow your novel to become a short story. (It’s the one paragraph chapters that suggest your age is younger then fifteen.) There’s nothing wrong with posting a short story. I’m currently working on one now.

At any rate I did enjoy your story. Please continue pursuing your dream of writing. Don’t let anyone discourage you. Who knows the height of success you may one day reach?

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Me and You!

Dalisay is caught in a romantic relationship which she insists on re-writing, changing if only in her own mind. She is full of regrets, but she only hints at the dark secret, (at least at first) the knowledge that has somehow destroyed her relationship with her nameless lover. She writes a novel to him and as we slowly learn the traits of her nameless lover (he is handsome, yet shy, seemingly harmless) it is difficult not to wonder what went so wrong in their relationship ...and that is the hook in this unique novel.

I’m not usually a fan of 2nd person narratives. But I have to say this novel was well written and charmed me somewhat. The author Sadie Anne hints at a complex, romantic relationship with fully developed three dimensional characters. I liked that. It was engaging. Certainly not your average love story. I’ll definitely have to continue reading.

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Beware the Witch!


Leanna is a witch not to be messed with. Her life (including the death of her mother) has taught her some brutal lessons and Leanna finds dark magic far more intriguing then sparkly fairy dust magic the rest of her class mates are forced to learn. When the popular girl Helena tries to bully her, Leanna responds in a way that will make sure Helena won’t try that trick again. Despite this, Helena doesn’t seem to realize that Leanna left her off the hook ...this time.

I see this novel got some negative reviews. Frankly, I’m having a little trouble understanding why. Maybe there were major errors here and author Chloe J fixed it in this revised version. I don’t know. All I can say is that I found her protagonist fascinating and her ongoing adventure in this school interesting. Of course I tend to like twisted and sinister stories which Forever Dark certainly is. At any rate I hope Chloe continues with Leanna’s adventures. I for one am hooked!

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Smokin’ Hot!!!

What can be more fun during a 70’s rock concert then booze, marijuana and just enough authority present so you can enjoy pissing them off? How about some sex appeal? I mean some major sex appeal. Enter Corrina Jackson. Her exotic-ness shines in her purple-dyed hair and animal sexuality. To see Corrina is to want her. But all Corrina wants is to find the one guy she cannot easily dominate. Lately, her sexual conquests have come too easily.

She might have found her match in Scott Thomas. With his sandy blonde hair and well muscled body, he is nobody’s fool. He recognizes desire when he see’s it in a woman’s eyes, and often feels contempt towards her for it. The two meet while at the outdoor concert. Two jungle cats who would just as soon destroy either as mate. Will there be a true winner in their hook-up?

I have to say this was well written. I couldn’t find any grammatical errors or what I call the ‘jumping head narratives’ which I often find in the romance genre. As a matter of fact some of this strikes me as erotica. Though I’m not quite sure it fits fully into the erotic genre. At any rate it’s a very sexual love story, bold, daring and hot! Definitely not for the faint-hearted.

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Yummy!


Brie, on the surface is an attractive teen with a sweet personality (She carefully holds all of her snarky thoughts inside). She enjoys making cupcakes and working in her father’s bakery. That is until Jordan, the high school jock gives Brie an impossible dare. “Make me a desert with strawberries and basil!” Talk about two contrasting flavors ...

But Brie doesn’t hesitate as she reads Jordan’s suggestion. Is she up for the challenge? And is she planning on winning maybe something a little bit more then just her father’s approval with such an unusual recipe?

This a cute and fun story much like the protagonist Brie herself. Warning; this novel is some of the best food porn I’ve ever read. (Yes, that is a compliment.) And I got kind of hungry while reading all of the wonderful cupcake descriptions. So don’t read if you’re on a diet. Lol. But yes, this is a fun story that encourages smiles.

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A Dangerous Secret ...


Beautiful and young Prisha is in one hell of a jam. Her beauty has unfortunately attracted the attention of her boss and he makes no secret of the lust he has for her. His flirtation towards her comes uncomfortably close to rape. Will Prisha be able to escape this man and discover who she is without him?

This story certainly is very juicy and I’m intensely curious if Prisha is going to be able to get away from this creep. Having said that, I also must note that I did see some grammar issues. (Remember, always capitalize the beginning of sentences. Also, you could find some friendly editors who specialize in the English language to help with some of the other minor grammar issues.) But none of these issues were very damaging to the story. At any rate a promising start.

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Purple Pearl Eater


This review pertains to the first two chapters only. You don’t want to mess with the law firm belonging to the inquisitive Amira, her identical twin Amara and the physically attractive Caleb. On the the surface the three fight against injustice of all kinds especially if it involves cheating children. But in reality their law firm hides their true identities and motives. In secret they are Werewolves who prefer to curb their appetites for human flesh at least for the time being. What they crave more then anything is to once again posess the purple pearl, a special jewelry that is necessary for their tribe’s continued survival.

A rather unique werewolf story. I dare say I have never read a werewolf story quite like this one before. So far I haven’t encountered any love triangles which is kind of refreshing for this genre though this may change in the future. I admit I’m curious as to how the purple pearl will effect the three of them. The only way to learn the answer is to continue reading Fajitas intriguing story.

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A Lone Wolf


This review pertains to the first four chapters only. He dreams of love, of perfection. But he lives in a broken body. His only companions are Jafril and Shadow who are somehow tasked with his care. His own past is a deep mystery even to himself. Is he fully human? An alien perhaps? Or possibly a mixture of a living organism and cold animatronics? He doesn’t know. All he knows is that once was more. And he wants more, an awakening if you will. Though what this awakening ultimately means can come with a huge cost for him and his only companions.

I’m not normally into science-fiction. My taste runs more toward horror and romance. But I do know quality when I read it and Brittney Miller is a talented writer. I didn’t note any past-present tense issues in the chapters or what I call ‘jumping head narratives’. (Where were seeing the story from Bob’s perspective and then suddenly were in Alice’s head and then we’re back with Bob’s again. That can be quite confusing.) An engaging story with a very unique protagonist. I wouldn’t be surprised if we see Miller’s books in Barnes and Nobles one day.

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Love is a Triple Edged Sword


What do you do when you’re in a trap that you don’t want to escape? That is the situation Vanessa Luciano has found herself in. She is hypnotized by Oliver’s good looks and oily charms. She forces herself to believe in Oliver’s lies even though she can clearly see through them. And She is willing to be Oliver’s one night stand again and again and again.

But Oliver does make one costly mistake which may be fatal to their relationship. He allows her to meet his extremely attractive roommate Jackson Lindgren. Will he be a better match for Vanessa? Or is he part of Oliver’s ultimate game, a game where he manipulates his friends and decides who’s heart will be spared ...and who’s will be broken.

A promising start. I did feel bad for poor Vanessa though. I hope she will soon see her own worth outside of Oliver’s twisted perspective or any romantic relationship for that matter. Only the end of the novel will let us know Vanessa’s ultimate fate.

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A Dish Best Served Cold



Lola Is the wrong woman to mess with. She never forgives a grudge ...and she never forgets. Though her name suggests a certain softness she uses her beauty as a weapon. Her sexuality is her sword.

Adrian her boss believes he has Lola under control. But as this shy beauty begins to seduce him, he slowly learns that he is only a pawn in Lola’s game. An interesting character study and well worth the read.

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He Looks Like an Angel ..


Reyna McCall is nobody’s fool. Young, beautiful and adopted into a prominent family, she knows she is a prize for any man. But she has no plans of becoming a ‘trophy wife’ especially to dead gorgeous Davian Cross. She senses something amiss in his flirtations with her. Perhaps something even a little threatening. But it’s so hard for Reyna not to become distracted by his sensual kisses and seductive touch. Will Reyna disentangle herself from a possibly dangerous relationship? Or will she find herself becoming the ultimate victim in ways she has never imagined.

First off ...wow! A. L. Long is a skilled writter. I haven’t run into any miss-spellings, past or present tense problems, pacing problems (my own Achilles heel as a writer) or awkward use of the English Language. Her characters are three dimensional and therefore all the more interesting to read about. You sense there are real stakes here. I’m definitely enjoying The Perfect Wife and can’t wait to find out what happens to Reyna and Davian next.

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Her Name is G201 ...


... And she can be deadly. G201 is certainly not your typical teen. She has the ability to knock a grown man unconscious and seems to be fairly comfortable around firearms. She can be programmed to be reckless with her life in order to serve her current commanders. Like a true psychopath, G201 seems hardly to care if she is serving good or evil. But there’s something vaguely intimidating about her newest order. She is given voluptuous house to live in and is told to go by the name of Natalie. What is the secret behind all this given wealth and what will Natalie be required to do in order to preserve it?

Clever story so far. G391 reminds me of a young James Bond. Noley Smith the author, hints at a dark past for her provocative protagonist. (I admit I’m very curious about G201’s upbringing.) Mission Denied promises to be a novel full of intrigue.

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A World With No Problems ...

The future is presented as a happy place in Mare Midnight’s novel, at least on the glittering surface. The energy crisis is over. There are flying cars and flying hover boards. There is no such thing as world hunger and all illnesses are a minor inconvenience at best. But there is another kind of illness breeding underneath the surface of this future society. One that can turn human minds into horrendous monstrosities with an unthinkable craving for human flesh. Sky and Jay try to cope with their rapidly changing society. But will it be too much for them? Can they ultimately survive?

An interesting take on the zombie apocalypse genre. Reminded me a little bit of Stephen King’s ‘Cell’. (And yes that’s a compliment.) Get ready for a harrowing ride with this novel.

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Pride ...But No Prejudices.


What does success feel like? Financial freedom, good looks and youth all wrapped up in the American Dream? The beautiful Evelyn White knows. She has founded her company at the age twenty six. But success hasn’t gone to her head. She still makes time for an old college friend Allison who is trapped possibly emotionally abusive relationship. Allison unfortunately will not take Eve’s very sobering advice.

Enter Adrian Stone a man with the looks of a Greek God. Intelligent and wealthy he is in every way Eve’s equal, and this disturbs her greatly. Eve feels that conquering Adrian through a romantic relationship will mean the pinnacle of success. A once enemy now conquered. But can she tame his arrogant spirit. Or will they fight through means that are fair and unfair until one of their companies is destroyed ...and the owner is left with a broken heart.

A fun story about the rich and famous that’s enjoyable to read. Reminds me a little of one of my favorite television programs, The Haves and Have Nots.

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Fiery Madness!


Young Sheyryar can hardly believe his horrible fate. He is only nine years old and yet is forced to support his entire family. His mother has disappeared long ago and his father has become an almost legendary, evil figure. A selfish and ruthless man who cares for himself and little else. Certainly not for the suffering of his children. Sheyryar and his siblings are truly on their own.

Sheyryar arrives home one night only to discover that his modest family home is on fire. As he watches the hungry flames destroy his only home with his siblings trapped inside, a tiny flame is born within his heart. Nothing but a spark perhaps but it grows into a burning knowledge that he will do whatever it takes for him and his family to survive. Perhaps even engage in a deal with the devil himself.

A powerful beginning to Nishat Fatima’s novel. It is a story full of anger and revenge and hot passions. On occasion I noted some awkward phrasing, but there was also some truly poetic language use too. I particularly enjoyed how the author described the setting sun. Nishat Fatima is an interesting writter who is worth exploring further.

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Wren-ching Fate ...


Wren is a beautiful, intelligent young woman and yet her life is somehow shrouded in mystery. There’s the sense of something dark creeping around the corners of her existence and she is chased in the forest by a strange man. Her mother comes to rescue her and is oddly nonchalant about the mystifying stranger or the fact that she requires for both her and her daughter to carry knives.
Wren is puzzled by her mother’s odd behavior but is not necessarily troubled by them. Until she wakes up in the morning and discovers an attractive but sharp eared stranger staring back at her.

“You’re not human.” Her mother replies. Then who is she? The answer to this question terrifies her as well as ignites a new sense of purpose in her soul. Will Wren accept her ultimate destiny? Or will she doom herself and her people to an unkind fate?

Aella Stormwind does a good job at building sympathy for Wren as well as passion in her novel. Her characters are well written and believable. I could find no grammatical errors or misspelled words. Plus her pacing was excellent (a skill I’m still working on.) I know I’m concerned for Wren’s fate. Here’s hoping for the best for her.

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Hot for Teacher!


Poor Eva. Not only does she struggle to perform well in school, but she just met her new history teacher. Or to be more precise she learns that her teacher is the good looking Bret Davis, a man she has known since childhood and is also a good friend of her father’s. But Eva is no longer a child. She has blossomed into an attractive teenager. As each of them become aware of their growing physical attraction to one another, the sexual tension deepens. You know someone is about to succumb to their forbidden attraction and the result ultimately will destroy one of them ...or possibly both.

The plot is one of those ‘forbidden fruit’ stories that can be a lot of fun to read. The author will have to take great care however not to let this become an accidental support for pedophile type behavior. (For that very reason many authors use the female teacher/male student hook-up and even that has to be handled delicately.) So far the author seems up to the challenge. A fun, naughty read.

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Room of Blood

Everywhere there is blood. It pours from the walls and drips from the ceiling. Your foot prints leaves smeared blood on the floor and the strong copper smell of blood chokes the oxygen out of the air. In the mirrors your own image laughs at you with deep obsidian eyes. Is this your new reality? Or have you receded into a dark place in your mind, where something laughs and controls your every move ...like a puppet.

A wonderful start for Paola Droz’s new novel. What I liked best about Uncontrollable is it’s unique premise. I’ve read and seen plenty of movies about possessions before but never one told from the possessed view point, the horror of truly loosing your control to an evil spirit. I get the shudders just thinking about. Can’t wait to see what this author has planned on what happens next.

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Mirror, Mirror on the Wall ...


Samantha’s parents are happy at the prospect of an affordable vacation for their three unique children, happy Sam, awkward and solemn Sami and the oldest and wisest of the three Samantha. Indeed her parents can’t understand Samantha’s reluctance to visit the old fashioned cabin. But it has always been Samantha’s nature to question surprises. When she first discovers the mirror, a seemingly innocent piece of glass hanging in her parent’s bedroom, it only becomes a matter of time before Samantha learns that she is the keyhole through which evil can tear her entire family apart or remain locked safely away from doing harm. Can she ultimately control the forces in the mirror?

There is much more, but to continue with my descriptions of the plot would be to ruin some of the nice surprises in the story. So I’ll stop here. Let it suffice to say that “Mirror” is well written and provides some genuine chills. This story reminded me of one of my favorite horror movies; Oculus. That’s quite an achievement.

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Maya’s Hope for Oragon



Maya loves history, especially the intriguing secret that she has discovered while reading letters from her ancestors. Yet this is not enough to impress her imposing father who believes that young women should only engage in careers that doesn’t involve studying or reading books. Torn between pleasing her father and also satisfying her deep thirst for knowledge, will Maya learn to accept herself without her father’s approval as well as discover the amazing secret of Oragon?

This is an awkward name for me to spell correctly, but Scholarstica5858 is a talented writer with a strong, narrative voice. Her characters are fully three dimensional unlike the characters I’ve read from some other books that were flat and uninspirational. This is another author I wouldn’t be surprised to discover published works outside of Inkitt some day. Probably not with that particular pen name though. Lol!

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Hope He Never Finds You ...



He knows how to seek and he is very skilled at hiding. He knows how to blend in among the ordinary people, despite his large, muscular frame. He uses his good looks to appear harmless to the unsavvy. Deadliest of all, he knows how to find the right shadows to shroud himself with, never revealing his dangerous presence until it’s much too late.

John and Carol the two detectives assigned to the case do their best to track this killer. But he always seems to be one step ahead of them. Mocking them even with a murder performed right in front of the medical examiner’s home. Will the Hide and Seek killer ever be found and forced to endure justice?

Very good plot. I liked the side story of the romance between the two detectives. There’s a nice diversity in this novel as well. Be prepared though. It’s quite an intense read.

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Something Evil this way Comes ...


This review pertains to the first three chapters only.

Meet Violet. Beautiful, popular, surrounded by friends and supported by teachers, life has always been rather easy for her. And perhaps that right there provides some unexpressed yearnings from Violet. Is there some boredom underneath her seemingly perfect life? Perhaps some secret deep desire to see what it would be like to be the bad girl for a change?

Eli, a handsome eighteen year old seems to pick up on Violet’s suppressed desires. He is an intense psychopath who unabashedly portrays himself as evil. (This becomes very obvious when Eli straddles the corpse of the dead high school principal.) Can Violet resist this wicked but oh so attractive boy, and what he means to her reputation and possible sanity?

I admit I love these type of wicked stories. There’s sort of a nice Cruel Intentions vibes here. This is the perfect book to enjoy with a soft comfortable chair and a whole box of chocolates that you’re not willing to share. Quite a fun read.

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Don’t End it So Soon ...

This review only pertains to the first two chapters only.

Beck is a would be author who is in one hell of a jam. As hard as he tries he can sell none of his novels to the Hollywood Studios (If I could talk to Beck I would advise him to get his novels published first. Then have his agent pursue the movie studios after he becomes a New York Times Bestseller.) Even worse he is stuck in an abusive relationship both physical and psychological with his wife Julie. A woman who once loved and believed in his dream of becoming a writer but no longer supports him.

But there is some hope for Beck. He is about to complete his eleventh novel and this might be the book that turns every thing around for him. Ken Writes has picked up on an interesting truth about novel writing. It is indeed very rare for any writer’s first novel to be published by traditional means. (And I’m not talking about self-publishing.) For every J. K. Rowling there are hundreds of thousands of author’s with failed first novels. Even Stephen King’s very first novel wasn’t published initially. It was the fourth novel he wrote Carrie that was published first. So kudos to Ken White’s insight on that.

I must say this is an interesting read. I was most certainly entertained by it. Be sure to give it a try. It’s great for lifting spirits.

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No Agony for Agni ...



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The Pradhan’s responsibility is to protect his people. He carries this knowledge deep in his heart and yet he fears that this time he may be overwhelmed by an unseen, terrible force who’s very presence cracks the earth. “Run!” He yells to his people. But running can only do so much. At the very end when Pradhan and his people can run no further they are forced to face their own helplessness as they observe their broken huts ...and broken dreams.

Agni promises to be a grand adventure of an epic scale. Something akin to Tolkien as mankind fights an impossible monster. Yes, there were grammar issues. I won’t deny that. But if you can manage to ignore that you will be in your way to an exciting adventure and a perilous journey.

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Let’s Start From the Very Beginning ...



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Jack Madox has the unusual blessing of belonging to a family of immense wealth and intelligence. When he becomes the proper age his Uncle Ron invites Jack to his private castle like home in order to offer Jack a chance to contribute to the secret of a life time.

An interesting take on the time travel genre. One of the plot details that is unusual for this genre is that there is no ‘Butterfly Effect’ (Which for me was always the fun part of time travel stories, but perhaps the Butterfly Effect will return in future chapters). Also currently, the machine only has the ability to take their subjects to the year 1721 and once departed there is no way to return to the present age. (I liked that. Wonderfully sinister.) Mr. Hayes is a confident writer and is convincing in his portrayal of the special intelligence of the Madox family. Be sure to give this novel a try for a unique time travel story.

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Ray is on the Case!



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It is 1940’s Manhattan. Ray Allison a private investigator contemplates a day of relaxation with his swivel chair and a cup of coffee. Suddenly, a sexy red-headed woman with downcast but the most mesmerizing eyes request’s Ray’s help. Her father has died in an apparent suicide. Ray is eager to help the young beauty, but is she to be completely trusted? Is there perhaps something more sinister brewing just underneath the surface?

Tommy, the author does an excellent job in immersing us in his saturated world of 1940’s noir. I saw the whole thing play in my head complete with the dark, menacing shadows. One thing ...I’m curious as to why the novel is called ‘Trident’. I’m willing to bet it refers to a disturbing secret of some sort. I suppose the only way to find out is to continue on with the story. ‘Trident’ promises to be a fascinating read.

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She cuts off their tails with a carving knife ...



It begins with a nightmare for Michael. He dreams of a witch who mercilessly attacks children by slicing into them. He wakes up with a resolve to protect all humanity against such magical creatures. After all It is his job to protect humans while they continue to pretend that the fantastical world doesn’t exist. But can he and his partner Anthony be successful against evil when witch’s have access to mind bending magic?

This was a surprisingly good read. I admit I wasn’t expecting to like The Watchman as much as I did. Of course I have a taste towards horror. That’s part of what drew me in. Also, R.D. Arlove has a good command of the English language. I found only one typo error (the use of ‘care’ instead of ‘car’) which was probably caused by an auto-correct function. So if you like detective stories with a splash of supernatural and horror, be sure to give ‘The Watchman’ a try. I’m glad I did.

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Choose It!



An interesting retelling of Stephen King’s It novel, this time told through the character of Richie Tozier. In this version, his adult self slowly comes to the realization that he was in love with Eddie while they were both children. This brings about conflicted emotions in Richie and the story becomes an interesting study on how his lost love effected and continue to effects the rest of his life. I liked the explanatory nature of Reddie’s story. Realistically love is based on time and experiences instead of the stereotypical “You look so hot let’s fuck” message of so many romance novels.

Kudos to Reddie’s bravery for borrowing characters from the great Stephen King. (And between you and me, I think Richie would have been a more interesting character if King had chosen this sexual orientation for him.)
I noted some past and present tense issues but nothing that can’t be easily ignored (or fixed). A promising read if you’re looking for something beyond the typical romance novel.

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Time After Time ...



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How does one handle the guilt of not being there for a loved one? And if not being there caused the death of your lover?
Joanna does her best to continue in a world without her girlfriend. But she is haunted by the memories of Carra, the only woman she had ever loved. The author Kei Angelus cleverly weaves Joanna’s struggle with acceptance of loss through Joanna’s own fictiin story about Lauren. She wonders and is concerned about Lauren the same way she wonders about Carra, and is unable to come to a conclusion about either relationship ...an interesting analogy.

There were some small grammatical errors but nothing that stops the flow of the story. A painful love story which may have some hope for Joanna in the end.

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Lelia’s Hope is Our Hope!



This review only pertains to the first two chapters of the novel.

You don’t always get what you wish for ...” No one knows this better then Lelia; a girl who learns at an early age the cruel lesson of abandonment. It is a curse she has difficulty breaking. Her mother leaves her at an orphanage as a young baby and she never had the good fortune of being adopted unlike the other children. At the age of eighteen Lelia is forced out of the orphanage (the only home she ever knew) and must somehow learn to fend for herself without family or friends.

Lelia quickly learns that life outside the orphanage is a sink or swim world. She attempts to drown herself in the ocean only to be saved at the last moment by a mysterious benefactor. Who is her savior? Perhaps future chapters will reveal more answers to this mystery.

Lelia is easy to sympathize with. She seems to be innocent and helpless and as readers we hope along with her that life will get better. There does seem to be some potential for a better life for Lelia if Mr. Smith agrees to hire Lelia as a waitress. This was an enjoyable read with very few grammatical errors. Let’s hope all of Lelia’s dreams come true!

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No one wants to be ....Claimed.

No one wants to be ...Claimed.

Before I begin I should note this review is for the first chapter only. But boy is it goooood! It’s an awkward name but Spelunkadunk excellently paints the story of Toom, a would-be prince who learns about the dreaded fate of those who are Claimed. The term ‘Claimed’ in this world refers to a horrible form of slavery that includes sexual abuse. In a less talented writer there would be an immediate descriptive porn scene whose only goal would be a cheap turn on. But Spelunkadunk takes the abuse seriously and he (or she) deserves respect for that. I plan to read some more tonight. It’s a great way to relax after a hard day’s work. I just wish I could read it in a book form instead of a tablet. Keep an eye on this author. He (or she) may be going places ...

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There are Monsters Seeking in the Dark ...


A young woman named Rose enters a town that screams danger at every step. Everyone tries to warn her. The taxi driver; “My people say once you enter Scareville you’ll never leave again!” And the old woman at the hotel; “They are monsters in the dark!” Yet Rose stubbornly refuses to believe their warnings ...and hopefully won’t pay the ultimate price. A good story. I loved the warnings of evil. You know Rose is in for a terrible fate if she isn’t careful. There were some grammar issues, but nothing terrible. I did feel sorry for poor Rose. I’ve only read one chapter but so far but I hope she continues to survive in Blood Loves.

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Buckle up, Buttercup!



This review is for the first chapter only.
What can young, genius Oliver do when his mother insists he get a job? And not just any old job ..but as a janitor at the local Haunted High-school! (Some mother. You’d think with Oliver’s grades, she’d push for him to be a scientist or something.) Only younger sister Sophie seems to properly understand the dangers of the new high school but is helpless to save her brother. Quite sad really.

Grammar was good though I did notice one paragraph was duplicated in the very next paragraph. Overall a delightful read and humorous look at what can happen when the warning signs are ignored because the ones giving the advice are supposedly too ignorant. Beware the monsters!

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Answers can be found ...in the Lost Pages!



Interesting novel. I love the premise of comparing people to books. We all have pages of ourselves we try to hide from others for fear of judgment, or embarrassment, or maybe even something deep and dark that we’re afraid to acknowledge even to ourselves that we have. The Lost Pages attempts to explore these feelings in the two characters of gorgeous Aryan and the kind hearted Mila.
They flirt with each other in their attempt to find each other’s missing pages; Aryan’s goal might be only to manipulate Mila better, while Mila simply wants to help Aryan.

I did find some small issues in the novel. I’m not crazy about the use of ‘Aryan’ as a name. In English ‘Aryan’ roughly translates into ‘White Race’ which is sort of awkward reading for me. There were also some past and present tense issues and a few misspelled words. But other then that a good, solid read.

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Tris in Wonderland


As usual this review only refers to the first chapter but ...Wow! You certainly are a talented writer. I’m impressed and a little jealous actually. Your grammar is spot on. Your descriptions are excellent. While reading I found it easy to imagine myself trapped in Tris’s mind with her. A place full of all kinds of possible wonders and terrors. And yet it is a place that Tris does not wish to leave. How sad and horrifying for her.

This makes me wonder if Tris suffers from some form of autism. I suppose I’ll have to keep on reading to find out, but I am very impressed so far. Please keep writing. You obviously know what you’re doing.

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Beware the Fear!



Before we begin, let me make it clear that this review is only for the first chapter. You do have a very intriguing plot. I’ve heard of haunted houses before, but never a haunted museum. I think that is a great atmosphere for a terror to take place. I’m surprised Stephen King hasn’t come up with that idea yet.

I like Ajay. He is certainly gutsy visiting the palace not once, but twice like that. (By the way is the palace and/or the museum the same building? I’m a little confused here.) I’m also curious about what Ajay looks like and his age. My imagination is telling me he’s an older teenager perhaps 18 or 19, with thick black hair and he wears glasses, but if I’m wrong with any of that you can always provide a correct description for your readers in your story.

My favorite part of the story was when Ajay tells the boatman “Danger will be cured by giving money ...”. I loved that line. Now I don’t want to come off as a jerk. but I did see numerous grammar errors throughout this chapter. I know from personal experience that on Inkitt grammar issues are no big issue. But if you ever decide you want to get your work professionally published you might want to look into some editing. There was also some switches between past and present tense. For a story that works on fear like yours does, may I suggest past tense? Past tense has a way of making the danger seem imminent for some reason though I know that makes no sense logically.

Overall a good read. Keep up with the good work.

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A Wonderful Beginning!


Before I begin I want to inform you that this review is only for the first chapter. However I am very impressed with your skills. You certainly can write. As a matter of fact as of July 4th you are the most skilled writer I have encountered here on Inkitt.

What makes ‘The Museum’ so good? For one thing you avoid the dialogue trap of ‘he said this’ and ‘she said that’ over and over again that I’ve seen in lesser stories. In fact you cleverly avoid most dialogue tags in general. This gives your narrative an air of realism as you guide the reader’s attention to the computer or Doctor Woodhouse. I really felt like I was reading the work of a professional.

Not that everything is perfect. Few things seldom are. I’m not sure if the computer communicating in all caps works. It suggests a backward technology instead of going into the future which I’m sure you don’t want to suggest. Your characters are interesting. I like Jamie’s goal of wanting to be an agent, though she is clearly frightened at the idea too.

I will read more if I can find the time. But it is very good. I wouldn’t be surprised if I found a
Cherry Stark novel at my local Barnes and Nobels in the future. Keep up the good work. Don’t let anyone discourage you.

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Dream a Little Nightmare of Me ...


For starters please realize this review is only pertaining to the prologue and first two chapters. Overall a good story. It was properly creepy and lived up to the nightmare hype. I wonder who killed Ben if it wasn’t Martha. Is Martha having a nervous breakdown? Does the silver bracelet have anything to do with it? I admit I am curious about Martha’s fate. You have a great imagination. Wish my imagination was as good as yours.

I did see plenty of grammatical errors. I’m just being honest here. (You might want to try reading your work out loud. You’ll probably catch most of them that way.) But I didn’t see any errors serious enough to destroy my enjoyment of your work. Your characters are interesting especially Martha. I’m also kind of curious to how she is going to relate to Liam since she thinks he’s difficult. Lol. Anyway, keep up the good work. We need more female horror writers out there.

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Maya’s Hope!


Hi! I gotta warn you I tend to do a little more in-depth analyzing of a story then the average reviewer. But I only review the stories I like. And you’re more then welcome to give me the same treatment if you choose to review my story in return.

For starters, the title of your novel really intrigued me. ‘Maya’s Confinement’. Wow! Sounds like a horror story just waiting to happen. It was the title that drew me to your novel.

I’ve read your prologue which I can’t find in your novel anymore. Did you erase it? That’s okay because your first chapter is much better written then the prologue. There was so much improvement that it feels like it was written by two completely different people. (Yes, that’s a compliment.) You have a strong narrative voice and I sense an author who has good control of her story and definite plans for her protagonist. I like the personality of Maya. She is a realist and sad but not broken. A very good start. I am hooked and I can’t wait to see what happens to Maya next. Keep up the good work.

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This review is for the Prologue only.



Good writing style. You definitely have talent. I was drawn in your story of humanoid dragons. You gave great detail in their descriptions. I wonder how they would look like in a movie. Very interesting, I’d imagine.

I also enjoyed your descriptions about the floating rock island. In fact I liked it so much I wish you have written more about it, the way you did with the dragons. For example do rocks ever crumble off it and fall into the sea? (How picturesque, though I suppose it would also be dangerous to those on the sea or ground) Is there a strong sense of magic there? A feeling that can encourage fear and maybe excitement at the same time? Is it a scary place? A welcoming place? See what I mean? I crave more details about your fascinating island.

Also, I noticed you call your dragonoids, ‘dragons’. The only problem with that is that I would often get confused. Each time I read the word ‘dragon’ my brain immediately shifts to the big lizard non-talking kind. Not the very unique type of creatures you’ve created for your story. Maybe you could call them dragonoids or something else unique. This is just my opinion. Other readers may not have the same identifying problems I had.
Grammar was very good. I couldn’t find any errors. That’s often not the case on Inkitt, so kudos to you.

Overall good story. Well written. Keep up the good work.

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Death becomes us.

Overall an intriguing story. I have to say, I found the beginning prologue to be a bit purpley -overly dramatic, too many adjectives. But the rest of the story didn’t match the prologue’s tone and was an enjoyable read. The chapter on Alfred Pottinger was well written and compelling. It was interesting seeing how Charon in a sense becomes Alfred while reviewing his life, and all that Alfred experienced, we experience with Charon. Also I liked how you ignored the cliche of Charon’s becoming a fearsome deliverer of death. Instead he is kind and sympathetic towards the suffering of others. I’m normally a huge horror fan, so I wasn’t expect to like a gentle angel of death. But I did like the personality you gave Charon. That was nice. I saw no major grammar issues. Good job.

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This is Not Wonderland

Wow. I think you have an awesome idea for a compelling novel. I can even see this becoming a movie. A three year old child is kidnapped and trained to become a sexy and merciless assassin at age 17? I love it! Lisa must be such a fun character to write about. I can tell you’re having a good time with it.

Unfortunately I did have some issues with grammar. I’d get involved in the story, and then I would suddenly be yanked out again as I saw grammatical errors such as sentences not starting off with capitol letters, some misspelled words and some past and present tense issues. (I hope you choose to stick with past tense for this narrative. In my opinion your story reads so much better that way.)

I loved how you made your character Black. (I’m African American myself so I enjoy reading about Black characters.) I also liked how you showed your readers that Lisa was still human with her enjoyment of breakfast and shopping. Maybe in the future chapters you can show how she is ‘inhuman’ too. I imagine a professional assassin wouldn’t be too kind or sympathetic to other people.

Anyway, these are just my opinions. It doesn’t mean they are correct. I hope you continue with your writing. I can tell you have a wonderful imagination.

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