Chris Hawkins

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I survived the night and all I got was this lousy T-Shirt

I found this story mostly by accident. I was testing the waters for Inkitt, seeing if it was a platform I would like to try and utilize as an author myself, and came across this story. The initial premise intrigued me, even with it being a bit 'overdone.'

Group of teenagers all spend the night in a haunted house. One by one they drop like flies until...a cliffhanger. While I didn't see that coming, it was a bit of a gut punch; what can really be said in this kind of story that would take multiple volumes? It also made the climax of the book, where the most resolution or distress should occur, feel flat, uninteresting, and ultimately a whimper more than a bang.

The author also had a tendency to jump from person to person, their thoughts on what was happening, so that it would be slightly confusing at times when one moment we're inside Victoria's head, then we're in Kevin's. There was also a tendency to use words and phrases that didn't seem to fit...I can't really think of any teenage girl who would use the word psalmist, nor anyone who calls liquor smut.

It felt like there was a bit too much going on with the story, but I would also say that was part of its strength as well. Ghouls rising from the ground, Possession. Insanity. Starvation. Cannibalism. Ghosts...it seemed slightly like it was a story that ran off the rails, but at the same time, it didn't feel -too- disjointed. So I'll commend the author on that.

TLDR: Decent story, good read, few plot holes, and some glaring issues that can be overlooked if a real fan of the genre and books of this type. It ends on a major cliffhanger, so be warned.

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Um...ok.

I actually trudged (yes, this is an accurate word to describe this 'book') through this whole thing to get to the final chapter...only to find this isn't as 'completed' as it claims to be. It is also so poorly written, it's laughable. It actually got -worse- over the length of the book! One more thing...her name is Carol, It has been Carol for most of the book, not Carla. I read it all, and was highly disappointed by the whole thing. Such a waste of not only my time, but the author's...it really was an awful read.

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