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An excellent read
I found this story's mystery incredibly enticing. This is a story crafted with tempo in mind, so that each chapter has nice mini-cliffhangers that make the reader want more and it does a great job at that.
The emphasis on the use of cliffhangers as a "glue" to the (upcoming) installments could be more polished, as the current ending seems to come abruptly and it is not entirely organic (I could give a more accurate account for this comment, but I do not want to spoil the ending to other readers). Some of the dialogues could also be tweaked into being more organic and less exposition-dumps.
All things considered, I thought I would love to see books like this being published: it has strong, lovable characters, an intriguing premise and a great integration between sci-fi and fantasy.
Short and sweet.
The story was well written, in spite of a lack of plot. It describes a very lovely moment in time and would do very well inside a story. As an all-encompassing story, I found it a bit aimless. maybe I might have missed a metaphor. Very nice and sweet all the same. It made me smile.Read the story now
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