I like Luke Peace's writing style. It almost has a soft cadence to it.
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I was hoping to understand what had happened between the hermit and Brom who described him as mean. There did not seem to be enough reason for Shane's town people to avoid the road or for them to shun anyone who took it. Also, the battles in the story were too easily fought and won. I was never concern for very long, that they might lose and I should have been made to feel that it might not end well for the heroes.
Nevertheless, I really enjoyed the reading this. I hope Luke decides to expand the story. Perhaps elaborating more on how Whilo's town came to be, Brom's visit to the that road in more detail, the plague on Shane, and the curse of the crops. Also, it was never brought out how Lilly knew so much about Shane and we never really get to meet Bree.
I did just go back to the story and saw that Luke Peace divided the story into chapters. Good job. Soon you will have a really wonderful story as you continue to edit. I will read it again in a few weeks.