Cass Rosewood

Story has potential but needs some work.

I read chapters 1 & 2 because it's free. Books on Amazon gives 1-5 chapters free for the reader. To give the reader more time with your story to become more invested in it. I very much enjoyed the world building. It feels like you're there. The humor is good. Character's actions cause humor through their interactions will help make the reader connect more. But the chapters can be improved drastically. While reading chapter 1 and 2. There is a good amount of setup for the story in general. Each chapter lacked conflict within it. Ch 1 - Main story setup - coffee machine being haunted and says something in Latin. Example for conflict within chapter - goth girl has an accident that Protagonist has to help with. Ch 2 - Main story setup - Protagonist attracts supernatural/magical entities. Example for conflict within chapter - you have Protagonist walking home with someone you can have an attack happen (like someone steals purse) to cause conflict besides the magical shadow appearing and disappearing. I choose this rating because you are VERY CAPABLE to IMPROVE WRITING. I feel like the story has potential but needs some work to become more engaging.