dreamer2233

No published stories yet

Not following anyone yet

Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Nice!

I feel that the start of the book was not hooking at all. It was normal start as if you are starting a chapter not a book. I think you should work a little on it like telling us about the appearance of heroine or her surrounding or something which gives as an idea of what we are going to read.
I also find a lot of punctuation mistakes in this book which can be easily taken care of with a help of an editor.

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Captivating

Plot of this story is quite interesting and captivating, didn't wish to left mobile for a second while reading this book. You keep readers at an edge with the curiosity as to what will happen next.
I find some punctuation errors here and there, once they are solved I think your novel can be easily adapted to a comic or a movie.
Good luck with your work :)

Read the story now

No badges received yet

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.