Great Writers World
I've been reading this book in my spare time since I still owe people reviews for reviewing my own. Overall this book was really interesting and keeps readers engaged throughout the book. The main female character had a very versatile personality and you can tell she had her own morals and what was right and wrong in her head. I thoroughly enjoyed the aspects of her character, The only complaint that I had was when she would appear to be to easily gullible to the male characters. There were too many boys that she could have possibly become her love interest and there were not really any reasons why she even had an attraction to the two brothers. There needs to be more details to make it clear and give readers a gateway to what attracts her and why she appears to like someone, for example, Damian. That depiction was clear, but it ticked me off in the chapter where she initiates a kiss, but then pushes him away and runs because of "him being too old for her" or being her "mentor/teacher". But then again that added to the appeal of their relationship and the sense of playing hard to get in a way. The writing is well done when it comes to the family and it really shows as if it was a "real" family, I really enjoyed those brother and sister moments.
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The plot of the story was not bad at all for a start. Certain things needed to be more clear and sometimes I wanted to have a different POV to help give me a better understanding of certain things that were unclear from Dialla's POV. The certain scene in your book about her father and how she got there in the first place was quite unclear, but I got over it. I would have enjoyed reading the details of how her father took her, etc. There needed to be more details in regards to powers/affinities that each student has. More background information on the school and how it came to be as well as a thorough understanding on why her father left which may add to the plot to help form the main character to a stronger person.
There were few punctuation and grammar issues and when there was it was not a big deal to continue reading. You just may have to reread certain chapters to make sure all the words flow properly. Following the present tense and past tense words. Your style of wrting is a breath of fresh air and you do not stick to the stereotypical ways that certain genres seem to stick to which I really enjoy.
This book I will definitely recommend to other readers because it is quite enjoyable and really makes myself want to continue reading. I was kind of upset when I hit the last chapter, but hopefully you continue to update and possibly write a second book because this could be a big hit in my eyes. You should continue writing and inspiring others with your work.