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I just read the first chapter, and I'll definitely read the second!^^ I liked your writing style, and think you really nailed the dialogue - especially from the old man, whose lines were very old-manly! I liked how this chapter felt like breadcrumbing, feeling there is so much more to unfold from this story. I'll look forward to it! Good job, keep it up!:) - ELCS
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