Elizabeth Krohn

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Some silly ideas

i really like this story.

It would be fun to have Uncle Tom or is it Great Uncle Tom spoiling Harry's and hermione's kids as the only Slytherin line and descendants of all the founders. hermione should also be able to speak parsel and so should their kids. So.... a protective, caring snake for each kid given on naming day? toy snake plushies? Clothes in green and silver? Extravagant promises if the hat puts them in Slytherin? Uncle Tom visiting on birthdays and Yule? baby sitting death eaters? Threats to any boyfriends? The mind boggles!

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Sneaky

I really enjoy the story but the Dursley's hate for Harry to just disappear is not very realistic and does seem to OC for me. Dudley, i can see changing due to the dementor incident but the other two ... not so much.

For breeding purposes Luna and severus should have kids to have another Hogwarts heir - a Son or daughter to marry the Malfoy-Potter child? They don't have to marry just have a child -Luna's wackiness with Severus's common sense will turn out a clever, fun-loving girl.

The term '"Team ....?" is an american idea starting with the Twilight movies and would not be used in a British/English context.


Watch out for mixing and with an in some sentences. An easy mistake when
typing quickly.

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