Heart wrenching and emotionally vivid.
I must say I wasn't expecting that ending to chapter 1! The fact that so short into the story was able to make me care for the characters so much shows the caliber of your writing and clearly you have a grip on the time period, one I've always wanted to write about but never really felt comfortable doing so. All in all it was paced perfectly, the dialogue was wonderful and I thoroughly enjoyed it.. The ending fit well though, even if it made me rather sad and a little angry at you! Glad to be competing against a writer of your skill. Ill be reading the rest, forgive me if I don't throw any voted your way ;)
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