Erin Crowley

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Meh?

As the target audience for this book, I didn't like it all that much, just because of the unhealthy message it would send to young women should they read it- oh, your Prince will like you if you let him dress you up like a doll, let him do everything, etc. Your grammar is fine, but you left a few 'i's uncapilatized here and there. That will automatically put me off a book, but that's just me. Also, it seemse like the relationship dynamic is incredibly repetitive- Yulin orders Addy around, Addy gets upset, Yulin gets mad, Addy starts crying, Yulin starts to yell, and they make up afterward.

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Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar & Punctuation

Needs a thorough editor

The concept here is really strong, but the execution is definitely lacking. Tenses, grammar, etc are all off, with at least one or more errors per 'Page' on my phone. The writing style is almost broken- sentences move into each other awkwardly, and are filled with an excess of "filler words", like 'Had', 'Like', 'A', 'As', 'Has', etc. A huge plot point is revealed within 5 minutes of reading, effectively missing a HUGE opportunity! nice idea, just needs a ton of help on the execution.

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