Eve Mak

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Good read!

I enjoyed your story, perhaps as much for its unconventional ending as for the story itself. I found myself liking Tam and Corus as well. A lot of it could be elaborated on at some future point, if you had the desire to do so. Some of the transitions were abrupt (but still logical) which I realize is because of time changes within the story. Still, I'd love to have known how Corus took Tam under his wing, what happened with the other dragon to make Tam lose his powers (although I agree with you, I'd leave it vague because the hook of the story is we never know for certain until the very end whether Tam is really a dragon or it was all in his head.) I was a bit saddened when Tam killed Corus, although again, it was right in character for Tam as a dragon. If you ever expanded it, you could possibly continue Tam's adventures, and maybe show how his stint as a human did manage to color his perceptions even in dragon form. Moral of story, etc. etc.

In any case, all in all it was a good read. Thank you!

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Alias Smith & Jones

This story is my guilty pleasure! I loved that show (with Pete Duel) though I can't remember many of the specific characters except Sally Field--I do remember her. I'm amazed how much detail you remember! I'm about half-way through now and I can see them clearly, their mannerisms, in my mind from your descriptions. Your story took a darker turn, and that's good too, as it tells what happened "after." I'm looking forward to how you end it. This is the first chapter where I need to point out one anachronism that goes too far--"home invasion" is such a 21st century term. I'd feel better if you didn't use that exact phrasing. Other than that, I'm very impressed with how true you are to the times and the scenes. Your chapters are long (that's a good thing!) so I'm taking my time, but I really am enjoying this story.

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Okay now I know why there is no chapter 4. I am intrigued by your knowledge and I've always enjoyed historical fiction. What attracted me to your story in the first place was you mentioned Mongols. I always devoured everything I could get my hands on about Genghis Khan and his descendants. Never been there, though. I'd like to, one day. So far this story is very interesting and I love your attention to detail--you make the time and the place(s) come alive.
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