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SCAM

Very nice twist on the Generational Colonization Starship idea! How ever BIG disappointment that you KILLED OFF a fascinating sub-culture./population that could have been the source of a bunch of follow up stories! You have a great main character that you KIll Off! Arrgghhh!! Think about finding a way for some of the colonists to survive, Wish you Good Writing!!!

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We The People are good to eat.

The concept and plot are good. The idea of Humans as food, of course, was done in Soylent Green and other works. Adding the idea of School Death Fights to provide the meat is a good twist. However, the writing style was stilted, This especially was noted during the dialogue /conversations. They did not seem natural. Some of the action scenes were better, but the author needs some work to get things to "Flow" . Try reading it out loud with friends, see if that helps.

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