gilly_boy

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Could be a Picture Book

As stated up top, Get a good water color artist (I don't know why but it gives me a water color vibe) and this could a great picture book. While I may have rated this as average, I think it's appropriate for the age group.

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I'm both entertained and intrigued

I probably should've checked the rating before I read this story (my bad) but I can't really complain. This story was good over all and had plenty of laughs. Sayre is a character you don't see too often and it's refreshing; on side he's sweet and innocent while on the other he is still a full grown man. Which reminds me, you never really established his age, for all the readers know he could be twenty and going to high school. Also there was a part of chapter 29 where is said 'that night' and it gives me the impression that they've done the deed twice.
There is still some questions that need to answered I hope you address them in future chapters like what was it that Sayre saw out Liz's window that was shining? You have given us a theory of how he got here and a possible way to get back but the question is, is he willing to go back? You bring up Einstein a lot and that gets me wondering if it's even possible for him to go back, cause according to Einstein: time can only move forward, you can't go backward. (Well if I remember that correctly anyway.) I also appreciate the bit of research you did for the character and his time frame.

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