Hepi Anesti

Jakarta

an aspiring writer

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Promising Start

I love the start and how it somewhat hinted towards the conflict. The interactions between characters and I would like to see more backstory about the characters.
For improvements, I see some typos but those could easily be fixed ;)

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A Compelling Ride

What a work! It was just one chapter but I am hooked. The author created a setting so vivid through his/her words. Quite a lot can be learned from the characters just from their interactions.
For improvements:
Maybe reduce the use of archaic words in dialogues or maybe save them from certain characters because it can be quite puzzling for non native speakers like me :)

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Interesting Read

The theme of this book is interesting. It can be seen the author has a clear idea as to where this story is going. There are several unfamiliar words and names that would need more explaining, but not too much that will make the readers confused. The paragraphs are quite too long for my taste but not too complicated. I am curious of how this story is going to proceed :)

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Great story

I really love the different POV, it makes the story even more interesting. Also, their inner thoughts when swooning over each other are so cute.
And your writing style is also very nice, it makes the story flow nicely and me smiling when reading them.

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Light yet meaningful stories

The stories are nice. They are short so very easy to digest. The themes and characters vary so it doesn't get boring.
These stories are like mini peanut buttercups, small yet delicious!

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Interesting and fresh!

The idea is extremely fresh and having a little girl as the main protagonist is very nice. Descriptions of the realms are also very clear so it's not hard to be immersed in the story.
The plot flows smoothly although the author sometimes add unnecessary words in the sentences.
But overall, it's a very good and worthy book.

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