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Summer Adventure

Thank you for posting this story.
I am always looking for thrillers set on the open ocean, in beautiful locales, where I can feel the sun glistening off the water.
This book was well written. The dialogue was realistic. I felt as though I understood the characters' motivations.
I wouldn't mind seeing more development in the villains. Aaron Sorkin, the creator of West Wing and A Few Good Men, says that all characters should be making their plea with God as to why they should get into heaven. Even the bad guys should have an argument for why they should be saved. I would have liked to feel more engaged by these characters.
Often what takes a book from being good to great is the depth of character of the villains.
It was nice on this cold day to be able to escape into the warm, blue ocean for a spell. I look forward to reading more stories by this author.

Fast Paced Tragedy

Wow! This one caught me off-guard. I am actually a little heartbroken by the end of this story. You won't see the twist coming. Jay writes snappy prose that keeps the story moving at a brisk pace. The story is also the perfect length for the plot to be unearthed and the twists to come to light. I can't recommend this story more highly.

Evil under the Surface

This story was full with dread and the threat of violence. The prose kept the story moving and engaged me during the reading. I would definitely read another story by this author.

Tension at Home

This was a fun, quick read. The author built a lot of tension into the story. She filled the character with conflict from both inside and outside. I would definitely read more by this author. Recommended.

Short Frights

Anybody thinking of reading this, stop whatever else you are doing. These are great two-liners. A few really got under-my-skin, but I liked every single one.
Thank you for posting. This was a real pleasure.

The Devil Down in Georgia

If you like possession movies or The Evil Dead, this story will be right up your alley.
Violence at every turn, the story keeps moving forward with lots of dark turns.
It reminds me of a Blumhouse movie. Young people find evil in the woods and they try to use ancient spells and incantations and potions to rid it before it destroys them.
Overall, I think it could have been 50-100 pages shorter. But I kept reading all the way to the end.
The writer has a lot of promise.
Thank you for sharing your work. Look forward to reading the next one.

A Simple Haunting

This was a fun read. Very quick and to the point.
I thought the writing was assured. It had a quick pace that kept me reading.
You know how to set up a good story. I knew who these characters were immediately. The house had a creepy vibe when the characters arrived.
I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Well done.

Gritty Texas Thrills

This story had the feel of a monster of the week episode from the X-Files.
It was fast-paced with lots of action to keep the story moving.
It also paused long enough to give the reader a little bit of heartbreak which I think takes a horror/thriller novel like this one to the next level.
I felt like I could have a beer with any one of these characters. I knew their story, where they came from, and what they wanted. These characters felt like living, breathing people.
My favorite part was the setting. I love Texas and the desert southwest. I could feel the grit between my teeth every time the wind blew across the plains.
This writer has a lot of promise and I can't wait to read what he writes next.

Vampire Assassin in love and War

The premise of this story is very intriguing. I was drawn in quickly. The secrets pulled me into the world. I wanted to find out what happened as the story moved forward.

Creatures are all around us

People who like Harry Potter and His Dark Material will be draw to this story. I’m certain there are even better examples however I haven’t read a lot in this genre.
I really enjoyed chapter three when the story began to kick into gear and we learned about the world of the creature seer. I imagine fantasy novels begins with a pro-longed set-up to orient the reader to the world. As a screenwriter first, I tend to believe the story has to start with a bang to pull the viewer in.
I think the opening with the creepy woman helps pull the reader into the story. I do think chapter two spent a little too much time in school. James Patterson says in his master class on writing thrillers, cut all the stuff readers skip over.
My daughter reads these kinds of stories all the time and I think she and all her friends would be drawn into this world and captivated by the story.
Well done!