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*SPOILERS AHEAD. DON'T READ IF THEY BOTHER YOU*
In a time when Muslims are either vehemently opposed to propounding good literature, or cannot get their heads out of cheesy (haraam-ish) romance novels, this book is what we need to set a new trend.
Now that I have completed my sweeping generalisation which I myself acknowledge is incorrect, allow me to "critique" your work. It's fantastic Ma sha Allah! I completed this a while back on Wattpad. Apart from the long chapters (didn't really bother me but I guess the mainstream crowd doesn't dig them), I was hooked. I still remember Ishaq's Mortal Kombat reference :P The fight scenes were well executed and apart from that, all the characters interacted with ways expected of them. Though I'm not sure whether I'm the biggest fan of Juan being the stereotypical backstabber.
You should definitely update the sequel. I know you're busy and all but when you spare a breather, do consider it.
Fantastic yet Realistic
I tried hard not to give you 5 stars for everything. You don't really make that easy on me... atleast not yet. I have to use my head to come up with faults for this book! Therefore, I have surmised that for me the pace might be a tad slow, but I guess that's not too bad because I understand why you are doing this. I totally prefer this to your first draft - this really feels like a living, breathing world. Although we have our two protagonists, they are in no way isolated from their surroundings. The addition of a backstory and elucidation of their lives before marriage are welcome additions.
Keep up the good work. I wonder if you can surprise me even though I know what's going to happen :)
*SPOILER ALERT. DON'T READ IF YOU DON'T WANT PLOT DETAILS.*
P.S. I personally felt that in the first draft, the action scenes were out of the blue. They were almost unbelieveable and felt somewhat rushed. I can see that you are taking steps to gradually ease them in this time around.
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