Great Take
It's not an absolutely unique beginning, but in this day and age, that would be hard to find. The language, writing style is great. Very rarely am I able to completely just delve completely in the story because I am so often held back by the style of writing. This was definitely one of those times. I am thankful you empowered Eleanor, formerly so quiet, in the second chapter. It may be a personal preference but I am a sucker for quiet female main character's who reach boiling point and actually react, instead of pushing it all the way back down. Extra points for making Max so triggering, I wanted to punch him too because of what he said about Simon.
In paragraph 13 on your first chapter, there seems to be an incomplete sentence that looks like a typo.
Overall, I would definitely come back to reading this after this review. I'd like to see where Eleanor ends up :)
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