This review is based on the prologue
Plot/ Story: So, once again, I don't know the entire story because it isn't up yet. Having said that, based on this read here I'm excitingly confused. I felt like the ending was a good twist. It was unexpected as there was no threat from her given at the start. Having said that, I wish there was more back and forth between noticing the gun, using the gun to play a part of the romance, or simply a notion that her heart is heavy along with her actual body being heavy because she was holding onto the something.(At this point these are just suggestions, take it or leave it, your piece here was great regardless!)
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To me, it would of been nice to see more of his attempt to subdue her because of the gun. In a way, to indicate that she is currently a threat to him but he is trying to use his presence to stop his possible death. Unless he wasn't and his mind set was simply that she wouldn't.
The reason why I mentioned this, is because I almost stopped reading it. It felt like something I've peered over my wife's shoulder a few times and caught her reading before.(mostly vampire and werewolf stuff so those lines pertaining to their necks was a repeated factor for me. Still juicy detail though.) The romance aspect was there. For the love of everything spicy in the world, THAT part was spot on. Great job! For me, I was losing interest because that part of the story seemed to carry on a bit long without any evidence that she was currently a threat to not only their relationship, but to his life. Which again, made for a great 'whoa' moment when she literally ended it.
Your writing style is brilliant, as well as your vocabulary. As a poet I know using certain words at certain times can make a big impact. Any misuse of words or rather misplaced words can deflate the proper emotion you want the reader to have.
As far as grammar and such I really didn't focus on it honestly. I was thrown off by the single quotations but if this is a past event then I guess that makes sense. I might have been confused on who was talking at some points because the speech was joined together with the rest of the paragraph. Breaking up different character's speech by starting a new line can help readers understand who is speaking. Its a golden rule not an actual 'must do' so.
Overall, great job. As I stated before, I'm excitingly confused, which is a good thing. Please produce more when you can. I await to see what happens.