Kudos!
You write very well and your story compels me to know more about your characters. I like how you put your twist in the Sci Fi genre. There are some technical errors in punctuation and grammar, but you can just correct them easily.
I really love how you wrote the protagonist. She seems on track to be the next big thing in female leads, next to Katniss Everdeen. You told your family history very well that I can understand the way she feels in every scene. Your setting is also very on-point.that it helps readers visualize everything that comes on in the story.
This is definitely something i would buy from the bookstore when it's already published.
