Jessica

no words

I don't know what to say about this. It's incredible how you describe the deaths and why you need to kill. Why you would need to have something to bring home to feed what is there. Keep writing, expressing yourself because you do have a talent.

Amazing!

This story is one that you would not be able to put down til the very end. It is engaging and it shows feelings like we all have. It's definitely I story I recommend you read.

Interesting read

This was something that I was not expecting at all. The way things intertwined together-the stories of the different characters-was good and fit together. I would fix up the writing and punctuation of the story. Overall, interesting and a good read.

Amazing read

I loved how everything came together and what the author used to describe parts in the story. What they put in here is something that I didn't expect. Definitely something to look into.

Different overall

This is a story that is not what I expected. There are technical and grammar mistakes that would need to be corrected. I would suggest to look over the story and edit it. Overall the story has a different feel to it. I liked how the girl never finished her game with someone else. I thought this would be more important in the book. Good read...but not for youngsters.

Unique

I can feel like I am there in the story. The epilogue is great and I loved it because it showed what happened after, to the king and his sister. I would suggest going over the story and fixing the grammar as well as the formatting of the paragraphs. Overall it's a great story idea. Just needs a little tweaking.

Amazing idea

I loved how this story worked out and everything flowed, especially with the twists and turns that have happened in here. I loved this idea and the story's background went together with all of these characters. I would definitely read this one!

Loved it

From the beginning I knew it would be a page turner. This is a story that I would love to see out there in the world on book shelves. I so what to see what would happen to the characters next! A few technical things to look over, but overall a great story to read.

Great

This is one of those stories where you want to see what happens next. I would say to edit the grammar and some spelling, but overall it was an amazing concept. I really want to read more to see what will happen next.

amazing

This story was one that I could not put down! How it was left open, I can't wait to read what comes next.

A-mazing

Wow. I love the way the story flowed, how Lila felt and what she was waiting to feel. With what was happening in this story, it was great and I will definitely read more!

amazing

How the writer added the exerts at the beginning of each chapter added that little extra that made the story more interesting. I loved how it flowed and it was a great read. Definitely check it out!

unique

How you described your love and his was great. The details and the way you show that he cares. I would suggest looking back and seeing if you have missed a letter in a word or two, but this was a great poem about love and what we go through.

wow

This was amazing. Just describing him being cold and how the poetry flowed through the story. It was incredible. I definitely suggest checking this out.

Very interesting

This book was not what I expected, and that was a good thing. I liked how it flowed, some parts were funny. How you used different comparisons. A great read. I couldn't wait to see what would happen next! I loved what was said at the end of the story, how it all fit together.

cute idea

I love the story and the plot. How the characters acted towards each other, and the meaning behind the tortoise. It's true that it is better to experience something without speaking. I do suggest to edit the writing style, such as where quotes and other things are placed. But overall I loved it!

Amazing

The story was great! Something different from what I would have expected. I would definitely recommend reading this!

Amazing

I loved this story. How it all started to what happened at the end. There are a few technical errors that would need to be looked at, but overall a great concept and wonderful story.

Not what Expected

I love how this story fit together and what happened. It was something that I was not expecting. Then towards the end when the kids came and gave him hugs, that was cute. Some stuff does need a touch up, but overall a great concept.

Very cool

When you think of what you would do to keep your secrets hidden, not many will chose the route that will cause harm to others. This story shows what the main character goes through to keep everything hidden. This was a good story and I would recommend reading it. A few things need to be looked at, but otherwise a nice idea. :)

Great idea

I like the idea of this story and how the author wrote what would happen. The characters are interesting and the idea of this painting is something that I really liked. The main character's angel, at the end how he just walked away, great. I would suggest to fix the punctuation and grammar. There are little things that need to be fixed and touched up on. Otherwise, I would take a look at this story.

Very cool

I like the idea and where the author went with this story. It kept me interested til the end and wanting to know what would happen next every step of the way. I would like to see more from this author. :)

Good read

The idea is great and it keeps you wanting to read until the end. But it does need some improvement. I would suggest to work on the writing and grammar of this story. If fixed and polished, it could be a great one.

Love the idea

This is one crazy story, but I liked it. The idea and concept of someone committing a crime every week and no one knows who, it kept you guessing. I would suggest fixing some of the grammar in this as well as separating parts of the story with a line or some kind of symbol so it doesn't look like everything is forced together. But this is a good read.

Great and fast read

It is a story that goes together nicely and the characters are ones that you would enjoy. Some people may relate to this one as well. Some things need to be looked over and tweaked. If the author does this, it will be a story that someone will want to have on their bookshelves.

Loved it!

I love how topics from the first book showed in this one. What has happened and where the characters are going next-from the epilogue-shows that there is of course more to read and explore the rest of this series. I would look at some of the grammar/writing techniques, but overall I could not put this one down!

Different and Great

This is a story that I could not stop reading. It is amazing how everything flowed together and what happened in this book is one that I would not have expected. Very talented author and a great read.

Cute story

I was captured by the title and the blurb. But as I read through it, this did make me want to keep reading and see what would happen. This is one that would be a great read. Just with a little bit of reviewing and fixing, it can be a great story.

Different in a good way

This story does take you on a journey through someone's life and what happens is something that does take you a little by surprise. It is a great narrative and it is one worth reading.

Lots of twists

I did feel emotions in this book when I was reading it. There were things that I, as a women, became mad at and what happened in this story. Because of what the character did and who he was. But this story is great. If a writer can bring out emotions in a reader, then that is someone who can definitely write a story.

interesting

The topic of the story and the background is very good. I would look back and fix the spelling and how you would put the words in places in a sentence. Overall I like the idea and it just needs a little more work.

good read

This story is very interesting but does need some work. I suggest to go over the sentences and see if it makes sense in the technical sense. But overall a great idea of a story.

Interesting

From the beginning you are hooked. Well written and great ideas. This is a story worth looking at. This can become one that anyone who reads will want to enjoy.

Page turner

This is a great story that you will want to know what is next. From laughing, love, and each character is unique. I would definitely give this story a try if I were you!

Loved it

I like the idea of how he talked about his life story and what he felt. What he has gone through, and all of this is a story he is telling to be questioned on how he will live his after life it seems. It's a great story and I loved how it flowed and all came together at the end.

Great story

This story was amazing! I will definitely read the others. How the characters were described, the setting in the book was awesome.

Amazing!

A classic story turned into an interesting new twist! I love the book and what has happened in it. Keep on writing!

Interesting

This was a great and interesting story. I normally would not read topics like this, but it was definitely an interesting read. I could not stop reading it!

Amazing

I have no words to say. How the story flowed and what happened at the end, it was a great story. I hope you write more because this is something that I will never forget.

Loved it

I liked the idea of the story and what the characters went through. I would love to see what would happen next! This is one that would be great as a series.

Interesting

The story was very interesting to read and I like what was created for the plot. I do suggest re-reading your story and seeing if you could fix the sentences to make them feel stronger. Overall, it is a story worth looking at.

Amazing!

I love this story! I'm a supernatural kind of person, but the way this story's scenes are, how the writer portrays that the vampire's are the ones ruling over the humans. It was great! I can't wait to see what happens next and to see what the characters will go through.

great story

I like the ideas and how the author came up with the story. What the intentions are. The grammar and spelling needs a little bit of work. Just to go over the story and re-read it will help improve the story dramatically.

Amazing!

Oh my god. I loved it! I read it so fast all the way through. I loved how it ended too. That was very unique and the story was great! I would suggest looking over some words and fixing like one or two, but the story was great. Keep writing because this was awesome.

very interesting

I liked how you made it like a poem. I understood everything and it flowed really well. I would suggest changing the abbreviations to words like ur to your or you're. Also to see what need to be capitalized in the beginning of the sentences. Overall it was an interesting and very good read. :)

Love it

How you created the story and the characters is amazing.
In my opinion, I would look back at what you have and read over the sentences to make sure that there are no extra words and that it makes sense. Also I think that when you brought in Nick in the last chapter, to put 3 stars (***) to show that it is a new idea and someone else is speaking.
The story line sounds awesome and I would love to read more of it.

Amazing

I love the idea of the story and what you did with it. The girl of fire and metal. Just everything was great! I loved it and I hope there will be more to this series.

Awesome read

The idea, the way the story flowed, it was great! It was a fast paced story and the characters were described well. I hope you keep on writing!