kapil chugh

Chandigarh

The hopes give me the hope of a great life. I teach computer science and love to write stories and my ideas. I want to keep doing the same and want to contribute my bit in this way for a better world.

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Great thoughts, limited by words

I truly enjoyed these sweet poems, The recipe of emotional pangs, complaints and sweet expectations of a lover is something you will love to relish again. My request to you is to use appropriate words and punctuation to pass on your message to your readers the way you want, not the way they may interpret. For example, in chapter 4, "your crazy lover of your first earning bracelet" should be written something like this, "crazy lover of your bracelet, from your first earning...". Similarly, we "extend" our hands, not "increase."

I hope you will take my suggestion in a positive light. Keep writing your lovely poems.

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Childhood Dreams

I felt like I just saw a lovely childhood dream in the middle age of my life! Thanks for taking me back to my early life. Though I wished to read more...

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Mysterious Narrative

Your story has been a page-turner experience for me. I couldn't stop myself from reading the next chapter every time. As an author of a mystery-thriller (as I wish to call it), you have succeeded in arousing the curiosity of the reader, chapter-by-chapter of "what next!" The way you have narrated it, I believe this is not your first book. Selection of the words and the structure of sentences is appreciable. The details of the scenes, characters' feelings and their moods-all is done in a very detailed manner. Kudos for it!

Coming towards some of the weak points. I felt that much of narration could have been avoided in some chapters as it hampered the reader's understanding of the series of events. For instance, in chapter 3, details of Mae's worries over the disappearance of Carma could be edited to make it crisp, short of Mae's long monologue. I felt very confused over the state of affairs in first 3 chapters as I tried hard to connect the dots. Please keep the narration simple in your next offering (I also wish not to miss the "What Next!" factor).

Keep Writing.....

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