Kathleen Ballantine Watson

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Wild, wild, wild!

Jon gets a new chance at being young again and boy, does he take full advantage of it. William has quite the imagination. This story was like a roller coaster. Always something out of the ordinary happening. Never a dull moment. The grammar wasn't bad other than having too many commas with long sentences and some unnecessary capitalization. But that can be easily adjusted. Good job.

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Makes you stop and think

Sam, the main character, got the opportunity to really get to know his father in the true sense and it totally changed his thoughts about him. Good story line, I would like to see it as a movie. Makes me wish I had the opportunity to go back as an adult and meet my dad. The story was well thought out. The one thing that would make it more readable would be the use of 'Contractions.' Such as ( had not - hadn't) (did not - didn't) (she is - she's)

(would not - wouldn't) (they will - they'll) These would make the story flow. But good job all around!

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A Half Orphan

I would have to agree with mdecastro's review. I thought it had a nice pace. It's hard enough for parents to agree with who you choose to love, but I can imagine it would be worse in a country such as Asia. The characters were easy to visualize, it was a sweet story. I liked it.

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A Nightmare at Northview

I have known people who have had to spend time in mental hospitals. Sandy's story probably has a lot more truth to it than fiction. It took awhile to get into the story, but when I did it all unfolded nicely. The characters were well put together. The story revealed itself mostly through conversations. Some could have been less to make the story flow better but all in all, it was a very good storyline.
I would suggest copying and pasting one chapter at a time to the free program, https://prowritingaid.com

It's an awesome program to help newer writers learn grammar.
This story would make a good series of life in a mental hospital.

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Very touching

I don't usually read poetry. But this was so moving. Flowed beautifully. Told such a good story. Cudos!

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The Kingdom of Archer Book I: Bloom

The Kingdom of Archer has such a good storyline. It could be a movie. The characters are realistic and the plot is excellent. Lyric having to choose between two soul-mates was interesting, especially when she thinks both choices are bad. Having had a life of terrible abuse from her father, it's hard for her to understand a man could have such love for her as Parker does.
Having said that, I highly suggest you try out the program 'prowritingaid.com' to help correct the grammatical errors. After publishing my first and only novel, I found a ton of mistakes. With the use of this program, I learned a lot. I did the second edition of my book and believe it or not I got rid of 20,000 words and all the semi-colons. It reads so much better without losing sight of the plot. (My second edition comes out in Jan.)
It may take some time, but I recommend you do it. Try it one chapter at a time. I think you'll be pleased.

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Wake of Deception

Sasha has quite the imagination! This was a story that kept me in suspense; it was not predictable at all. Hanu was a very brave fourteen-year-old, never thinking of just himself. The story at times was a little slow until the last five chapters or so, but it always kept me wondering who was good and who was bad. The ending was a pleasant surprise that left you feeling good. Very well written, excellent plot. I enjoyed reading it.

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Loved the ending

The whole time reading this I wondered how it would end. I won't give any spoilers, but I was happy with it! Great book for teens and YA, it took me back to my high school days. (long ago :) Good story idea.

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