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Terrasen

Bored student. Aspiring writer. Voracious reader of all books. Small girl in a big world.

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Interesting...

This book has lots of description and it makes me feel as if I'm in the book with the characters. You've developed the characters well and it's clear that they have their own unique personalities. The story is engaging and I can't wait to read more :)

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Amazingly descriptive

Woah. this book is awesome. Your description in every paragraph really hooks me in. You have a great writing style and I can't wait till the next update.

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Wow

This story was amazing and had lots of emotion. The main character's voice really comes through. The only thing is maybe check over your grammar etc. Overall, It's a great story :)

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Captivating

This story hooked me in from the first paragraph. It starts with a bang and the plot is filled with twists and turns. The characters have their flaws and are relatable. Overall it's a great story and I'd recommend it to anyone who likes magic and action :)

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Run

The way you tell the story really hooks me in. It's great and I love the mystery

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Roots of a curse

You put so much emotion into your writing, which draws the reader in straight away. Your story has a nice flow and rhythm. I'd advise you go back and edit your grammar once you've finished the story, but overall it's a great book and I would strongly recommend it to everyone :)

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got me hooked :)

This story is fast paced and you use a variety of engaging word choices to hook the audience in. I love the way you describe every scene and character. The characters have their unique personalities. This book is off to a great start

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Beautiful

These poems are short but full of emotion. I really enjoyed reading these and I love your writing style

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Great concept

I really enjoy your ideas and it's clear that you've put a lot of thought into the story. The latin makes it even more interesting. The religion sets your book apart from other fantasy books and definitely makes it more interesting. Your word choice and description make this book a very engaging read :) Keep going!

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Magical

I was blown away by your amazing descriptions of every scene. You transition between the normal high school world and the fantasy world so smoothly :) You have a great writing style. I'm loving your story so far and it's definitely going in the right direction.

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Action Packed

I love how Aisha/Lily isn't a damsel in distress and sorts things out on her own. I like where this story is going, you've really hooked me in :) The only thing is that you should check your grammar a little bit, then the book will be perfect!!

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Engaging and creative plot

Ok this book is fantastic. I'm really enjoying the storyline so far. The plot twists are completely unexpected. It's lighthearted but sad at the same time, if ya get what I mean. The only thing is that the story is going too fast. I think it'd be great if you'd describe each scene a little more. That's just my personal opinion though. Keep going, you're doing a great job :)

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