Krisha Grim

Hey there! I'm just someone who started writing as a hobby to get some ideas out of my head. You can find my stories here as well as on Wattpad!

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The Waiting Room

When I read the first chapter of "The Waiting Room" I was immediately intrigued. My head was filled with questions, mainly with "Why?".

Without wanting to spoil too much of the story, I can confidently say you did good in keeping the story suspenseful right to the end when the grand reveal came.

I would have liked to get a few more hints as to what exactly the other side characters (like Alnair and Mr. Newman) had done exactly as that would have given each of them a bit more depth. Writing-style wise there were a few redundancies and word repetitions you could substitute, but that's no big issue.

All in all, very enjoyable read that I binged!

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"Seed" - unique and full of potential

Seed” doesn’t hesitate and starts off right away by throwing the reader into the plot. We follow Nick Armstrong on his discovery of an asteroid approaching Earth and the possible danger it carries with it. Little did Nick know that what would happen would not only change his life, but also the world. The author advertises their story by claiming it's plot is a mixture of Crocodile Dundee and Jurassic Park - and that's a kept promise! Inspired by these two movies, own original ideas were sprinkled into the story. Fans of those two franchises will certainly notice their influence and I’m sure they’ll absolutely enjoy the references. Without spoiling too much, it is a unique concept and I haven’t come across something like this premise before. Out of the mass of stories available out there, this definitely sticks out as an idea I see potential in.

I’ve read the first part (20 chapters) of “Seed” and I have to admit I was a bit skeptic at first, as I’m admittedly not that acquainted with the adventure genre. My first impression was that the story might get too scientific at some point and that I would have trouble following along. That absolutely wasn’t the case! One of the things I was very thankful for the most was that technical terms were explained right away and woven fluently into the dialogue. As a foreigner, I could follow along just fine.

Seed’s cast features a broad range of characters, each one different and unique in their own way. I quickly found myself getting fond of some characters in particular whom I thought were either really funny, simply intriguing due to their features, or I considered their committed good deeds to save others admirable – Connor, Dr. Lloyd and Celina were my top three and come to my mind here. Connor reminds me of Crocodile Dundee and Dr. Lloyd the nutty professor in “Back to the Future”. The side characters are really enjoyable, memorable, and entertaining. Characters like Nick and Ava don’t stick out so much. Writing-style wise, there were some tendencies to overexplain and over clarify some actions and that reflected in the structure of the phrases, but other than that, the writing is really solid and easy to follow. In all honesty, I would have also preferred a bit more detailed description of the surroundings (like wreckage) to set the atmosphere a bit more to paint a more vivid picture, but that’s just personal preference.

With all the obstacles and battles, fitting to the adventure genre, the story manages to uphold suspense. It feels like the first part sets the introduction to the world and future action to come and it definitely has potential in many ways (romance, reconciliation of the two main characters, personal conflicts in the group). So what to conclude? As a reader, I can confidently and strongly recommend “Seed” to adventure lovers and fans of the Jurassic Park and Crocodile Dundee movies. Very enjoyable work! It made me think I should give these types of stories a chance when I stumble across them. Looking forward to part 2 (which will hopefully be released soon!) already. :) Definitely notify me once it's up!"

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The Assassins Fall

The "Assassins Fall" features a story of two main characters caught up in a conspiracy, but in the end, decide to do good and leave everything behind.

Few things in this story bugged me. The lack of direct speech/ the characters talking to each other. This way, the story was narrated like it was told to the reader instead of giving them a chance to experience it. I'd recommend adding bits and pieces of dialogue (especially when there is romance involved), so you can get more emotion out of some scenes.

Also, sometimes, the character's backstories were kept on the surface level. For Shadowblade, for example, it was said that Seraphina fell in love with him due to his complex past and behavior - but aside from that, you didn't really dig deeper as to what exactly happened. Did he have a tragic past of loss and blood? As a reader, I don't know. And that's, in my opinion, a missed opportunity!

On a positive note, I absolutely love that ending. Without spoiling too much, it was very satisfying and I was happy to see the both of them receive happiness. Definitely made me smile and nod, going "They chose to do the right thing!"

The plot's idea was solid and I'm sure if you were to turn this short into a longer full-fledged novel, where you pace everything a bit slower and give the characters enough room to develop, it would draw out your story's full potential.

Despite all my critique, you did a good job and I enjoyed reading! :)

Best regards, Krisha_Grim

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Don't Touch

"Don't Touch" with the story's description along with the cover got me good.

I really like riddle-like stories and if anyone reading this review does as well, this one shot is perfect for you!
Featuring a simple, but mysterious story of a man with a crazy obsession most of his peers are not able to understand, the reader is thrown into a somewhat eerie, yet intriguing setting.

The whole time I was reading I was definitely wondering what the man's obsession really was, but at the end, I really was wrong and did not expect it. Great work!

You got me, you trickster! And for that alone, you earned this review!

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Solace

The first thing I noticed when reading "Solace" was the unique, atmospheric setting.
It starts right off the bat and as a reader, I had many questions at the start when accompanying the clad in black lady on her journey. Where did she come from? What kind of being is she?

The way I interpreted is that the Lady of the Graves seems to be some kind of God, who spread her seedlings across the Earth and is the creator of various species who later on fight each other instead because of the voices lurking in the dark.

Writing-style-wise, my only advice would be that some paragraphs tend to get a bit too descriptive (which might be due to the many timeskips in millennia), but that isn't a dealbreaker.

My favorite part is that, despite the crucial situation at the end, this short story ends on a hopeful note and for a call to fight back instead of surrendering. All in all, I could see this story drawn out into a full novel. :)

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El atáud verde

Lamentablemente, solo puedo hablar un poco de español, pero aun así me gustaría dejar una reseña. ¡Perdón por algunos errores de antemano!

Realmente disfruté esta historia corta! Para una extranjera como yo era fácil de leer y aprendí algo de vocabulario. La razón por la que Keith quiere ser médico es extraordinaria pero interesante.

¡Me gusta mucho esta historia y solo puedo recomendarla! ¡Bien hecho!

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The Tower

"The Tower" is a relaxing read when the topic of friendship interests you.

This story's strongest points were definitely the world-building as well as the two main characters. I'd suggest using the interesting concept of the tower to draw out its full potential by going into detail of its origin. Of course, in this short story you couldn't go too much into detail, but I can imagine how much of an awesome world you could be able to build if you turn this into its own story, especially since it's a good premise to depict the Elders as villains.

The two main characters, Orion and Cerin, have a pretty good and solid dynamic and make a good duo, where each of them have their moments to shine throughout the story. Both are very, very likeable and the way this story delved into the topic of friendship, is a perfect match!

Writing-style wise you sometimes get a bit too repetitive and some technicalities like the spacing and punctuation can be improved by simply proofreading - so that's no big deal!

Good work!

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Solid work!

"Ishtar's descendant" lured me in with the cool title and cover.

Even though I'm not usually the type for sci-fi, the story sounded interesting and I decided to give it a try.

I followed along the story of a bio-psychologist named Tricia Evans and got to read a few scenes I could picture really well (the warehouse), which were also quite shocking.

One thing I think you missed out on was the possibility to have Tricia's inner conflict put into focus, e.g. her inner scientist vs her moral compass as an individual. At times it felt like wasn't okay (the scene in the warehouse) with what she was confronted with, but in the next scene it felt like she didn't care at all.

Also, I think it would have been cool to see her be the reason why, in the end, everything got leaked to the public. In your version, Tricia was asked to help find a solution, arrived in Berlin, saw what's wrong and didn't really do anything to prevent it. Of course, that's just my personal opinion, but I think it's a bit of a shame she couldn't shine as a main character in this short story!

Punctuation- and grammar-wise I'm not that qualified to judge your style due to me being an ESL writer (German), but I can assure youI didn't see any spelling mistakes or anything else that would disrupt the writing flow. I could follow along just fine. :)

Nevertheless, solid work!

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A gem of a short story

The plot itself is kept simple, but it offers a range of deep topics like depression and takes a deep dive into an artist's worst nightmare when they lose their eyesight and therefore cannot practice their passion anymore.

Reading through it, I didn't get bored once - it has a perfect flow and the way it's written is easy to follow. I liked the way the phrases were structured. You have a very clean, accurate style.

Furthermore, the cover is awesome and I think the end was perfect. It wasn't a classical "Happy End" but it's not a "Bad End" either. The way I interpreted is that there are things you can't change (such as deteriorating eyesight) and the only thing you can do is focus on accepting the circumstance and live with the things you can't change.

This was a very enjoyable read, a gem for me personally, so well done! :)

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