krushandkill

Even better

The story keeps on getting better, with even the bad guys getting more explanations about why they are like that. Not so bad as they were supposed to be, after all.

Nice

Amazing story, with a lot of things happening, with some questions getting appropriate answers and many new questions appearing.
I found myself sometimes lost between the different side stories that keep on appearing, maybe the transitions are two fast, it would be probably better to have the side stories in different chapters, instead of being, sometimes, only one or two paragraphs.

I am curious!

Now, that's an improvement in grammar, since the first story. Easier to read, with the dots in the right place. I hope Lumina fulfils her threat of burning the Empire. Is it wrong, rotting for the bad woman on this matter? And, who was that darkness woman knight who took Rory's sword and squeezed his neck? Continue this story, it's intriguing.

Good story.

The story is very good, with some amazing plot twists. It needs some editing in some words. Too many wrongly placed virgules instead of dots, to end a sentence. I had to read a full paragraph more than once, to understand when a particular sentence ended.

I hate the MC!!!

I hate Xavier, I hate cliff hangers and I might hate the author because of this story. That said, next update, please! 😉