Things Remembered Past
Let me start by saying I really liked this. It was an excellent effort to get inside the head of a tormented young girl. The journal idea was brilliant. I enjoyed reading the entries. I was curious what age you see for River. The series is rather confused about that and I wonder myself. I see her as being mid to late teens. With that viewpoint, I see the language in your dairy as being perhaps too mature. Again, I'm not sure, but that was my response. Often in the series she spoke in a kind of staccato rhyming rhythm and I would have expected to see a little of that reflected in her journal, then again, those usually popped out when disturbed and one would guess that when journaling she was calmer. Still, great job. Write On!
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