What I love about this novel is the whole concept that really creates a foundation for this story. The idea of charms being able to tell your future, who you match with, your abilities etc is a scary but intriguing thought. I also really love the idea of having the surface and the sky worlds. the juxtaposition between the two is quite interesting (reminds me somewhat of Bioshock Infinite). The characters are enjoyable, and I cannot deal with the cuteness of Mocha the dove.
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To make your writing better, I would suggest that you look back and have a quick look at the punctuation. The use of excessive exclamations eg !!!!!!!!, !?!??, or ........ isn't really needed. Having one exclamation is enough to make a character exclaim quite loudly. It simply just makes it easier for the audience to read more smoothly.
Overall, I fell in love with the concept of the story and you should be proud of your achievements. This was a wonderful read.